MY MAFIA KING- AN UNTOLD STORY OF UNDYING LOVE…..#1….(few shots)

Hello fellas…..im back…….im sorry lately i didnt updated REHNUMA…..but i was caught up with something unavoidable…….i apologise to all of u & thank a tonn for inspiring & commenting…….so here im with another story……however its just few shots…….this concept was running in back of my mind from yesterday…….so i decided to write it as an apology to u all……..especially…….myra,astha,s.v,jessie,adia,kk,gauri,ritu,roma,brin,sweetie,rosy,jewel,subha,jnana…& all d silent readers………..this one’s for u guys….i love u all……..well its my first one in few shots…so yes…im little nervous….so let me know ur views……& yes i wrote it in quite hurry so ignore typos & grammatical errors……

Njoy d ride……muuuha….
“sometimes life wins over love ….sometimes death ……while othertimes fate does….thn why do we still choose love over them…?…”…..well…well….i will tell u…..oops…..just give me a sec…”raj I’m coming baby please give ur radhu maa a minute dear….ok why don’t u go to neil dada…he will tell u a story…a good one”…..…uff i tell u handling raj is not easy…so where were we….…yeah first let me introduce u to myself…….im radhika ……radhika mishra…a 28 year old girl….as u all know I’m here to tell u a story….or i must say a love story……yes….……my love story….……but for that i need to take u guys 5 years back…….there….yes right there in that room…. can u see two girls sitting on bed…….the one who is consoling d other ….with all patience …..trying hard not to yell…..while soothing her friend…….well thats not me…….yes…..the other one who is crying like hell…..well even though i don’t want to admit but this d truth…..thts me……naaaaa….naaaa…..naaaaaa ….dont get to conclusion this fast….im not a cry baby…..nope…atleast not always…..i swear……ok…….so r u ready..?……then what r we waiting for ……… lets go

5 YEARS AGO……

RADHIKA’S POV

“would he hate me sam?….”….i asked all crying….resting my head over my best friend’s lap….well yes sam is my best friend ……& i share everything with her from my first crush to ranveer singh….she knows all of my dirty secrets….even d dirtiest one….i even share everything about saral……well first let me introduce u to saral…..he is my would be husband….saral shrivastava…..d saral shrivastava…..he is such a kind,loving & sweet person….or i must say….he is d perfect definition of how i want my husband to be…..he cares for me,& not to forget he is a handsome man,trustworthy,carefree,he respect women,& moreover not a short tempered guy…..& for me it counts a lot as i didn’t wanted my hubby to be like my dad …..he is really short tempered….& i just hate that fact….on the other hand saral is mr perfect….& just like d icing on d cake….he loves me….yes he is in love with me…..well even i like him….he is d best man i hv ever met…..so I’m happy…..& well why i won’t be…..as we are getting married d day after tomorrow…..but here I’m feeling bad right now…..wait why am i shaking right now…..oh is someone screaming or …..”radhu…..radhu……where were u lost…?”….ohhhh its sam…”umm…nothing …was just thinking about saral…”…sam sighed & said…”u r stupid….if u r feeling this bad ….why didn’t u let him kiss u?…..anyways u guys r going to get married……thn whts d problem?”….well yes this is true last night what i did was very unexplainable issue….i slapped him when he tried to kiss me….”i …i don’t know…why i slapped him….its just …it ..it didn’t feel right at that moment….i felt as if i was betraying myself…it felt like he didn’t have right to do all this…i know I’m sounding weird….but i was helpless….”……then sam muttered” don’t u think….he has all damn rights to kiss u…after all u r going to be his wife radhu…..& even u like him…then whats d problem…….….dont u love him?”…….”i…i don’t know sam….he..i….i like him….i like him more than any other man i hv known…he is just perfect for me….but love…i don’t know abt that..”….thn sam sighed & muttered…”let it be radhu…don’t think this much….& even he told u na that it was ok….tht he didn’t felt bad…..thn leave it….concentrate on ur marriage…& for god sake stop crying….or u will get dark circles…..now go & try ur lahenga….”……i thought she is right….i should think about our marriage….i quickly got up all excited & tried my lahenga…….thn we enjoyed all night….doing things like…dancing,drinking,b***cing…& what not…i just love my bestieee…..i

didn’t knew how but another day passed….& then came d day of my marriage….omg…yes…today is my marriage….im little bit nervous……ohhh gosh no…..im nervous like hell…..uff….marriage…..i don’t know what turn my life would take after this ……well brushing all my thoughts aside i got up…to get ready….sam helped me with my make up & all….well right now she is gone to my mom….saying she will be back in a minute….& here ….i am literally trying to tie d back dori of my blouse…..urrrghhhhh….im not able to do it…..where d hell is sam…suddenly door burst open & i yelled..”where were u…..now say something stupid….urrrgh…leave it….come & tie this dori…its irritating me like hell…”….then i heard foot steps coming towards me….& then sam held my dori to tie it down…when suddenly her fingers brushed on my back…i felt shiver down my body……wait….oh crap…..this touch…its not sam……i quickly turned around to see a guy…in his mid 20s ….he held d dori of my blouse tightly….his gaze is fixed on me….his personality was intimidating….his dark brown eyes were cold…..god he is standing so close…..i gulped down seeing him ….& god he is devilishly handsome……uhm……i don’t mean it…..swear….ok fine….i do….but its not like I’m hiting on him….anyways i am just getting married today…so…..….wait…what is he doing here…..i again looked at him…all this time his eyes didn’t moved away from me….i tried to say something…i wanted to yell on him…but when i opened my mouth not a single word came out……urgh…..he is standing so close…its hard for me to even breathe now…moreover his hot breaths are falling on my exposed shoulder …its making everything worse…..noooo….focus….focus….radhika….…what d hell am I thinking….thn I composed myself & muttered…”who d hell r u??…don’t u Hv dis much manners to knock on door…& how dare u touch me…..…stupid………now leave… “…w..w… Why is he moving close to me giving me death glares..omg there is a gun in his pocket….is..is he here to shoot me down or something…. Oh no..no..no…I don’t want to die this early. ….” U…u…better..s.stop where u r…..otherwise….I..I’ll shout….” Thn I noticed his hand which he moved towards his pocket….now panick striked me….what if he is trying to take out gun …..oh no…” Plz…plz….don’t kill me….I don’t want to die this early..p..plz….I’m not even married .. …if u want to kill me….thn plz do it aftr my nuptial night…..I don’t want to die a virg…”….what..did he just closed my mouth by his hand…..urrrgh…..now I won’t take it any more….when he was busy giving me that intimidating look….I bit his hand…..urrrrrgh…is he made of steel or what…..I Hv made a quite deep mark over his hand….even a bit of blood is oozing out of there….but he didn’t even moved his eyes from me….let alone his hand…..he kept giving me those intimidating look…as if i had stolen something from him………suddenly my eyes grew wider….ready to come out of d socket any moment….when he took another step towards me….before i could make another movement….he tied my dori…..& left without turning back once…then i released my breath …which i didn’t knew i was holding for how long..….ooooooohf……god…..wht d hell was that…….as soon as i came out of shock…i started calling my parents & sam…..i was literally screaming…hearing me …my mom & sam came to me all running….their eyes grew wider seeing me like this….then mom came to me & said…..”beta….what happened…why r u screaming….is everything all right?”….before i could reply back……there was this sound of gunshot coming from d hall….

we all ran towards there…..when we reached there….a gasp escaped my mouth seeing d scenario there……..there were a lot of men around 30-40 pointing gun towards my dad & his men……& saral was standing beside my dad……oh my god…..even he was pointing a gun towards them along with my father & his men……he even had a gun….& he knew how to use one….strange…..but what d hell is happening here…..my eyes grew wider d second i spotted a man sitting over d couch like a king……he was d same man who came to my room…..suddenly i heard my dad…”arjun…we can talk about this….i give u my word…i won’t interfere in ur business…..”….first time ever in my life i hv seen my dad scared….he was stuttering…..i don’t know why but seeing a man like him this scared….i started fearing d man sitting right in front of me….suddenly a man standing on his right spoke”…so now mr mishra want to backoff….but i guess its too late……u should hv thought about it before crossing our way…..boss won’t leave a single person here alive….u planned to kill our boss….well now lets see how u save urself & ur family from him……..” saying this d man loaded his gun…..now i was trembling….he wanted to kill my family….nooo…i won’t let this happen….before doing anything to them…he would have to face me……then i muttered…”who d hell r u….what do u think of urself….nobody dares to raise a voice in front of my dad….& u r threatening him….”….with this i moved towards man sitting in front of me….looked straight in to his eyes & said in an angry tone…”…if u want to live enough….then move ur dumb a*s out from here….right now…..”….i didn’t thought he would get intimidated by me….but atleat i hoped he would get mad at me & try to show me his power or yell on me or pull out his gun towards me….but no……his reaction amused me…his lips twitched in a smile & he kept staring me….d man on his right didn’t utter a word & started looking alternately at him & me……he looked kind of shocked…..but d one on his left keep glaring me…i was disgusted by him…he was looking at me with lust in his eyes…yuck…i felt terrible..…but somewhere i was scared by of all of this….but I’m not a coward….i decided to confront him more…but i was interrupted by my dad…”radhika…..go to ur room….now……”…..i tried to oppose him when suddenly i felt saral taking me away from d man….what was his name…arjun…yes arjun……he took me by my hand & dragged me towards my dad…..i tried to protest but he told me…”not now radhika….i think u should listen to ur dad…”…then my dad spoke next in trembling voice…”arjun please….leave us alone….today is my daughters marriage……please don’t do this to me….i beg u….if u want u can have my business….but please let me live……”…..now i was shocked my dad was begging to this man….hell….who is he….& what have dad done to him?……& when i looked towards arjun….he kept staring at my hand …which was held by saral……he didn’t moved his gaze from it…not even for a second…until….d man on his right spoke…”really mr. mehra…u r offering us ur business….haha….really?……u r offering ur so called mafia business to d mafia king……well i must say….u r out of ur senses right now….”…..my eyes grew wider….mafia…..oh god….my dad worked with mafia….& d person right in front of me is mafia king…..god let it be a dream…..plz …plz…saying this i started digging my nails in saral’s palm…i do this when ever I’m scared….when suddenly he pulled off his hand & gave a look to his palm…..i gave him an apologetic look….

.then i observed d man on arjun’s right was going to say something….when arjun kept his gaze fixed at me….raised his hand…& muttered in commanding tone…”neil…”…to my shock as soon as he did it d person on his right ….who happen to be neil closed his mouth at d very instant & others dropped their gun…..he stood from his place & moved towards my dad….all d while his gaze still fixed on me…when he came face to face with my dad….my dad started sweating…thn he muttered…”well then ….i hv a proposition for u……….i won’t kill u or ur family…..if u give me all d information about one ur are working for…..every single bit of it…….”….thn my dad replied with his head down…” i will….i will do whatever u say………”…..before he could complete his sentence arjun muttered next….”but……how could i believe u….u r a traitor at d first place….”….hearing this my dad gulped down & said…”i won’t betray u…i give my word……just don’t kill us…”……now arjun gave him a smirk & muttered…”oh u won’t…..i won’t give u a chance to backstab…..till u don’t give me complete info about about d person…….i will keep ur daughter with me……..now its up to u to decide….what u want…..”…..now i felt earth shaking beneath my legs…..did he just said that he would keep me with him…..no…no…this can’t be happening…i gave a look to sam…& she looked shocked just like me…..i tried to say something but couldn’t…not a single word came out of my mouth….when suddenly saral stood in front of me…& muttered…”no……she won’t go anywhere with u….”…saying this he shot arjun a deadly glare & held my hand……somewhere down my heart i felt good…..i was pround of my decision on marrying him…he stood for me……against d mafia devil…..he indeed is perfect for me…when i looked again towards arjun he was glancing towards my hand which saral held protectively…saral stood in front of me as if challenging him…….he completely covered me….by standing in front of me & i held on his shirt tightly..…& for a sec i saw arjun’s eyes turning a shade darker but in d next sec….he turned around & sat on d couch like a king & said…”u must be knowing mr mishra….im not a person with patience…..”….bl**dy moron…what does he think of himself…..how could he even propose something like that to my dad….just wait u mafia devil….my dad will show u ur place….my thoughts came to hault when my dad spoke…”u won’t kill anyone around?….& she will be safe?”…….every thing started getting blurr in front of me……my body as if wanted to fall down……a single drop of hot tear rolled down my cheeks…..did my dad just said that…..i was just deal for him…..he didn’t fight back for me……i felt half dead….d person who was my father….who was supposed to protect me was handing me over to this devil….he gave up on me without fighting back….he didn’t treat me like a daughter all his life & even now he didn’t cared for me…..another tear escaped my eyes….but i didn’t gave up ….somewhere down my heart i knew saral would stand for me…..when suddenly i heard him…”dad…no….she is not going anywhere…..” i felt his grip tightening on my hand …..thn my father muttered in a stern tone…”saral!…”…..now i felt his grip loosening on me…& suddenly he dropped my hand ……now i was completely shattered…..he didn’t have guts to go against my dad….& i thought he loved me…i was pround to get have him in my life….but he broken it in to million pieces…everyone left me….now i don’t want to live….i would rather die than go with him……then i spotted fruit knife over d table….i quickly ran towards it & tried to cut my hand when sam came & took it from me & threw it somewhere….unable to bear anymore i hugged her tight & broke down…..i saw my mother crying behind my dad……no one dared to come to me except sam….she cried while consoling me…..

then my dad came to me & said …”promise me u won’t hurt urself…..if u do any such thing they would kill us all…radhika u have to bear all this for us….for ur family….”….i started laughing sardonically & said ” family…..i don’t have one….”….he raised his hand to slap me when arjun held it in d mid air & said…”don’t even try…..u better start working as i don’t have much time to waste on u creepy people…”…..after saying this he gave a nod to his men & they started taking me out……no one said a word or protested except sam she kept yelling ….crying…..begging….she came towards arjun to slap him when neil held her tight & blocked her……she kept kicking him….finally she sat down on her knees & pleaded arjun to leave me saying she will come on my place……….my heart cried seeing all this…..she was not my blood relative….she was not my sister but she was ready to sacrifice herself for me…on d other hand my family ,my would be husband betrayed me …tears started rolling down my eyes….unable to take anymore i dozed off before i could hear or see what happened with sam……..

i woke up in a big,classy room….& from big ….i mean real big……i found myself lying on d soft bed……i didn’t recognised d room….it was definitely not mine….thn where am i….suddenly what happened before i fainted came to my mind…..& tears started rolling down….i was scared….i didn’t want to be here….i want to go back to sam…..why my life is playing with me like this….all my life i craved for a family….a happy family…a loving father….a trusthworty husband….& what i got betrayal….& loneliness……i cried….i cried for hours……when suddenly door burst open & d person who back there in ny house was standing on arjun’s left …giving me lustful stare…..stood in front of me & smirked…..new hot tears made their way out when he leaned towards me & kept his hand over my leg….muttering…”aah there u r sweetheart….dont…. don’t cry …..”…saying this he started getting closer to me….i quickly kept my knees folded ….close to my chest & moved a little bit…..he was eyeing me in d wort way possible….i cried…when he again came near me…..i shouted for help…..when he muttered…” oh common…..dont behave like an innocent child as if u don’t know why u r here…”…..i gave him a confused look & he continued…” of course…..u have to pay for ur dad’s deed….as far as i know arjun…he will make it worst for u….he will make every single man here to f**k u every single night….till he completes his revenge….u don’t know him………but……but……I’m not like him…I’m not a beast like him…i like u….u r so hot…if u want i can help u out”…saying this he started touching me improperly…..i screamed on d top of my voice…..then he held my wrist tightly & whispered…”ill make it easy for u sweatheart….i will give u pleasure….u will love it….& i will convince arjun to leave u…if u make me happy…” saying this he started touching my back inappropriately….this time i took a vase & tried to break it on him….but he tucked it in time…& laughed …..then i ran towards door & started banging it….yelling for help….& he started moving towards me ….i begged him to leave me……i cried….but he didn’t stopped….he laughed & held me tightly…….when suddenly door burst opened & neil came in…..seeing neil d guy composed himself ….neil narrowed his gaze on him…& said…”jai……what is all this?…”….he quickly got to him & said…”neil…..she was trying to escape ……when i stopped her from doing so…..she started throwing things on me…..”…..i slide down against d wall & cried like anything…..now neil gave him a doubtful look & said…”jai….u can leave…i will handle this…..”….when jai turned around to leave….neil stopped him & punched in his stomach making him fell down on his knees he thn muttered…” Next time I don’t want u anywhere around this room..otherwise….” Before he could complete his sentence….I heard door slammed open & shut…..I felt something breaking inside me….I cried keeping my head over my knees…without caring abt d man standing in front of me….suddenly fear started building inside me once again….when I heard him taking steps towards me….what if he was same as d other guy…jai….what if he too tried to molest me….suddenly he bent down & was about to place his hand over mine… When I started sobbing badly ….. pulled my hand back & started moving myself against d wall as much as possible….

he moved back a little …& then sat down beside me…..there was this silence for few minutes…thn he muttered… “ I was 10 year old…when my dad got murdered right in front of me…..d man stabbed him 15 times……i cried…..i mother begged him….she held his feet pleading him to atleast leave me…….he then gave me a look & smirked…holding my mother by her hairs…..i ran towards my mom…& started kicking him…with whatever force i had….but being a 10 yr old boy…..i couldn’t do anything…..thn i threw a vase towards his head….this made him angrier…& he took it out on my mother…he…”….suddenly i turned to look at him with tears in my eyes…..he stopped for a moment ….his eyes red….i was shocked to death when he muttered next…”he….he…raped her….not once….but repeatedly……forcing me to watch….everytime….he hurt her…..my mother cried…..she begged him…..she pleaded every single man there….but no one showed pity…..everyone around was laughing….. after sometime her pleading, her sobs, her tears stopped…..as if she wasn’t feeling pain anymore…..she sat at d same place for hours….without saying anything……i didn’t had courage to go to her……i was sobbing holding myself like a ball….all scared what if he comes back…..when suddenly d only noise of her breathing coming from d room stopped……i ran towards her….i called her….i shook her….but not a single time she looked in my eyes & called me beta……she…she….died right in front of me….” a crying gasp escaped my lips….to lower my loud sobs i held my mouth tightly by my hands…..i don’t know why but i kept my head on his shoulder leaning on him……god plzz don’t make anyone else go through this pain…..suddenly he let out a sigh & kept his hand over mine saying….”then after 2 years i met arjun & told him everything…..he gave me shelter…..he gave me power…..he gave me strength…..but somewhere down my heart i was restless….i couldn’t sleep at nights….…i thought that may be i will get peace after killing him…..…one day arjun took me to d same man…i pointed gun on his head……at first i was scared of him…flashes of that night keep running in front of me……thn arjun held my hand in support…& i pulled d trigger……i killed him….i killed that bastard…i fired total 15 bullets at him…but d fire inside me didn’t calmed down……i didn’t felt peace….i don’t know why…..do u know why am i telling u all this?….not because i wanted u to know my painful past…or what i have suffered……i told u this to make u understand that pain doesn’t end just by crying buckets……it doesn’t……we have to be strong……..i…i couldn’t help u with all of this…with what ur dad did & all….i know this not ur fault….but u can’t break down like this….” saying this he kept his hand over mine while other one rested over my shoulder……at first i flinched a little but then i relaxed a …..i don’t know why i did so….even when my brain warned me…to not to believe on anyone around here…..but his eyes held truth & pain…..suddenly as if realising what he was doing …he quickly got up & said…”take rest….”…..he turned around to leave but stopped at once & muttered….”don’t worry abt jai….i will tell arjun….he…”…..before he could say another word ….panic ran through my veins…..arjun….the mafia devil…no…no…..what if what jai told me abt him was right….he would definitely take his revenge on me by making every other man………no….no…..he is a beast…..thinking all this i started pleading him all crying…”plz…plz…d…don’t…do ….t…this….plz i don’t want to see him…..he…he would….no….plz….if u want u can kill me…but plz i don’t want to see him….”…saying this i started moving towards wall as iff they could hide me…once again fear was visible in my eyes…yes i feared him….…but neil…he looked confused….he wanted to say something but stopped seeing my condition…..he came towards me …bent down & said…”ok…ok…relax….i won’t say anything to him…..relax…”….he stood there few minutes & then left…….after he left…..i looked towards clock on d wall…..a thought strike me….if things would hv been normal….i would hv gotten married till now…..a hot tear suddenly made his way down my cheek….everything would hv been fine…if he hadn’t shown up 7 destroyed my life….yes….he was d one responsible for all this…..for my condition….he is a devil…..i will never forgive him…..it has been few hours since neil was gone…..every time i heard steps or movement in d corridor my heart flinched….thinking what if jai came back…..

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SO THTS ALL FOR TODAY…KEEP SMILING GUYS…LOADS OF LOVE…..& HAPPY DUSSEHRA….

43 comments

  1. Jessie

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    Meeennnnn…. I was so engrossed… gosh.. girl…wat a plot….!!! Radz and her dialogues..heheh.. I loved it.. kill me.after nupital ni8..😂😂😂 hw cud she..hahah…
    Mafia king!!! This is super se uupar!! Fantastic one!!! He fits d bill..! And Neil.. I did cry reading that part.. am sure.!Arjun is gonna shoot Jai!! The way u described Arjun’s gaze thro Radz pov..! Fab..!! Neil d savior! So gud meen.. I cud get images b4 me..Am so eager now.. when is the next one..!! Continue the same way.. do we have Arjun’s POV.. I love to have dear… do think to include it if u haven’t thought b4…

    Meen.. This is fantabulous!! TC n loads of love…loved ur gift…I will read again..

    • Meen

      |Author

      awww…..jessie….u dont hv a single idea what i feel right now aftr reading ur comment….thnks a tonnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn……u r grt……regarding arjun’s pov…..yes im planning to add his pov along with neil & sam……….once again….i couldnt thank u enough…..love u loadsssssssssssss…….muuuha

    • Meen

      |Author

      hey amber……nice to see ur comment………& thanks for liking d story line…..i will update as soon as i finish writing next one….i hv written half of it……love yaaa

  2. Jnana

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    Hey…… The epi was fab……. And I just wanted to know that if you are writting on some other page of tu?

    • Meen

      |Author

      hey jnana…….thank u for ur lovely comment…….well no….i dont write on any other page yet…but i am definitely thinking to write one for dahleez……i loved that show….love ya

  3. Gauri

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    OMG Meen fantastic….u narrated beautifully Radhika’s POV…..Neil’s past was heart wrenching ….awesome work meen….an emotional ride …loved it will be eagerly waiting for next 🙂 love u

    • Meen

      |Author

      i thank u from d bottom of my heart gauri….i dont know…whether u hv any idea abt this or not….but truly u r one of all d people whoze writing inpired me to write one myself……& im thankful to u for that……love u loads & literally standing on my feet waitinf for crossroads….take ur time…& give us a blast…..love u

  4. Starz

    |Registered Member

    Hi meen… awesome…lovely… enjoyed a lot…Neil’s last was very sad….post next one soon and ur ff too

    • Meen

      |Author

      heyaaaa starz…..happy to c u again…..i will try to post next one as soon as possible dear……..& will be waiting to read next one from u……love u

  5. shreya

    It was terribly awesome ………
    God I m in love with this mafia king n Queen …….love u bless u ……plz be soon

    • Meen

      |Author

      hey shreya……well ur excitment & lovely comments makes my effort of writing this chappy all night worth it…..im glad u loved it….& i will update as soon as i finish writing next one….i hv written half of it….i will try my best to complete it as soon as possible…..love u…stay blessed

  6. Jewel

    Meen…. This is amazing…. Ur narration is superb, from the starting to end, this is beautifully written one…. Really superb… Neil’s past was heart touching…. Loved this plot a lot…. Waiting for the next chapter….. And when will u update rehnuma?? Plz update that too

    • Meen

      |Author

      hiiiiiii jewel…..first of all a bear hug to u…im talking to u after so many days……i will update rehnuma after another update of mafia king…….& thanks a tonn for ur lovely words……..thnk u thnk u thnk u…..love & miss u….

    • Meen

      |Author

      hiii neeetz…..how r u?……well thnks for reading…..& giving such a lovely comment dear…..i will post d next one…in a day or 2……till th keep smiling…..love uuuuuuuuuuuu

  7. Rossy

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    Hiii…superb dear meen…now plzzzz don’t be late to post this one or that one meena…rehnuma …missing it…radz pov was really heart wrenching…i wonder how she fell for Arjun then …neil’s past was sad…waiting next for both…

    • Meen

      |Author

      hey rossy……..how r u girl….?….well thnks a tonn for commenting dear….it means a lot to hear such a wonderful words from a brilliant writer like u……love uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu…..will try to update as soon as possible….keep smiling dear just like a rose:)

  8. Sweetie

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    Meen,firstly how are you??Story is bang on sweetheart.. 😀 I just loved it,I was totally engrossed in the story,Neil’s past and the agony he went through clenched my heart yaar.. 🙁 Please post soon and thank you so much for this beautiful story.. 🙂 Love you loads and take care.. 🙂

    • Meen

      |Author

      hey sweetie…..im perfectly fine…..how r u?…….thanks for reading it dear…..ur comments always have this impact on me….tht makes me keep smiling……now i know why ur name is sweetie……….muuuuuuuuuuuuuuuha……love u……take care…..

  9. Sathya

    |Registered Member

    Hey Meen..where were you for so long? This is stupendous update…my heart is pondering till i finish the whole episode. Some unknown tension was arising in my heart. neil’s past is terrible yar. Oh god. So now our Mafia King fallen in love with the Queen is it. Post next one soon.

    • Meen

      |Author

      hiiiii sathya…..im so happy to c ur comment….as everyone here knows….what a splendid writer u r…so getting such a comment from u…make me feel proud & motivated….thnks again….muuuuuuuuuuh….love uuuuuuu

  10. Madhu

    Hey meen it’s just out standing………ur story is beyond words……..I’m dying for ur next update….pls do that soon…….neil past life it makes me cry……..I do know abt arjun………..pls pls pls…do that soon……actually I’m a silent reader……this is the first time i’m commenting…….keep doing it meen………

    • Meen

      |Author

      hiiii madhu……first of alll a tight bear hug & a big wala thnk u for reading & commenting….u hv no idea….how happpy i am aftr reading ur beautiful comment…its just made my day…..im glad my story made u comment….awwww im just doing happy dance right now……thnk u….thnku…..thnk uuuuu……looooooooooooooooooooove u

  11. Madhu

    Hey meen it’s just out standing………ur story is beyond words……..I’m dying for ur next update….pls do that soon…….neil past life it makes me cry……..I do know abt arjun………..pls pls pls…do that soon……actually I’m a silent reader……this is the first time i’m commenting…….keep doing it meen………and i’m madhu ….hii to all guyz

  12. Myra

    |Registered Member

    Meen….sorry for the late comment sweetheart….i kinda like lost this in the ocean of updates …..and now i regret not reading it earlier…

    It was so engrossing….i had my eyes glued to the screen throughout.

    Jai…well, he is disgusting.
    You know i felt that saral is going to protect radhika when he stood up for her the first time…..but when he didnt it kinda broke my heart a little.

    Neil is by her side…she’ll be safe.
    Arjun aint a bad man…is he?

    Yaar update rehnuma naaa….i am desperately waiting.
    Update the next of both of these soon….love u 😘

    • Meen

      |Author

      hiiii myru……muuuuuuuuuuuha…..dont u dare to say sorry….i wont take any sorry from u….u keep that in mind………u dont hv to apologise me ever for commenting late…….coz even if its first one or last one….all tht matters is ….u read my story & made a comment…thts it….im more thn happy with that….u know i love u…..& i know u r just as amazing person in personal as u r here….stay blessed….will update rehnuma sooon…muuuuha

    • Meen

      |Author

      hiiiiiiiii ansh….well thnks for reading & commenting….i will update next one in a day or 2…..till th keep smiling

  13. _Ritu

    |Registered Member

    OMG…a thrilling story Meen.. 🙂 Rads POV was very well narrated… Arjun a mafia king here..interesting 🙂 waiting for nxt…loads of love. 🙂

    • Meen

      |Author

      heyaaaa ritu…..u know what….i may doubt anyone else…tht they would comment or not….but as far as u r concerned…..i know…..be it first or last u would always make a comment…..& u hv no idea how much thanful i am for tht…..lovvvvvvvvvve u

  14. Roma

    Awesome wowwww meen mind blowing shot. …I am very amazed…it’s really superbbbb. ..u narrated rads pov very marvellously. …her condition very miserable n sam tried her best to save rads…..ahhh that jai was so cruel n devil….neil’s past so heart wrenching. ….neil’s arjun made a deal with dilip….neil’s brought rads with him…..rads family was so selfish neil’s that saral…mr. perfect..also betrayed her….uffff…plzzzz post next part soooooooon. ..also ur other story too…eagerly waiting. ..love you loads. muaaaaahhhhhh Bear hug my sweeeeeetheart ♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡ 😉

  15. Madhu

    Meen luv u too……..sry 4 late rply…………when is the nxt update dear……I’m eagerly waiting 4 it……pls do that soon sweet heart……bear hug to u……..have a great day………

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