Jaane tu yaa jaane naa……by saku ishqie.. Part 1

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Hello frndz…
I hv read fan fictions of many amazing writers like.. renima di ..b.k.maha,b.isha di …rasika..sahana di..mrunal di..IME..anha..shraddha..verna di..shivika22kapoor..kuhu di..nd many more..u all r just amazing nd my inspiration… this is my first attempt…so plz forgive me if there r any errors..thank u..

Introduction:-
In my story omkara nd Gauri r childhood frndz nd both families I mean oberoi’s nd sharma’s business partners…..gauri nd omkara use to visit each other’s house in their vacatvacations nd frm dat time they became gud frndz..no best frndz….But after schooling Gauri went London for her further studies…..nd omkara was in Mumbai itself…
So the story takes place when Gauri returns to Mumbai after 5 years….
Let’s start now…happy reading…nd plz forgive me for errors…

In oberio mansion..
Omkara was in mix emotion of angryness nd nervousness continuously checking his phone then watch..phone nd watch..same drama was going on frm 5hrs…
Ani:- shivaye whts wrng wd om??..wht happened to him???..y is he behaving so??..
Rudy:- Arrey bhabhi…woh aa rahi h naa…bhabhi cum bhai chor..!..
Ani:- frm bhabhi I understood ki koi ladki aa rahi h..pr yeh bhai chor kya h???
Rudy:- haan bhabhi who bhai chor hi h…u knw whenever she used to come our house om use to roam behind her…nd om ko uske alawa koi dikhta hi nahi tha….bilkul paraya dhan hojata h yeh lambe Baal wala prani..dont whts gonna happen now can she is coming after 5years…bhaiya humara o hume bhul jayega (in crying tone)..toh hui naa bhai chor.
Shiomani:- shut up rudra!!!…
Shiv:-anika tum iski baato main mat aao .. I will tell u..
Ani:- tell naa…shuld I take appointment of urs??..
Shi :- omkara’ s best friend nd our business partners daughter Gauri is coming…
Ani:-ohh!!!..
Om:-y didn’t she came uptill now, she checked out 2hr ago…
Shi:- u r u overreacting…u knw Mumbai’s traffic naa…she might hv stucked in traffic…chilax bro…
Rudy:-(in crying tone)…look at him …abhi tak aayi nahi toh yeh haal h…aanek baad kya hoga???
Om:- rudra…will u plz shut up..(Nd give him a deadly look)…
Shi:-om..now it’s really very late call her nd ask where is she…
Om was any to call her..nd suddenly someone frm back said hws u dabbu???…
Yes u r r8 she was our GAURI…omkara was very happy..suddenly his angry face turned into bright happy face…both ran towards each other nd give a right hug…after sometime Gauri releases herself nd go to shivaye nd hug him..
Shi:-Gauri.. .u r looking beautiful..
Gauri:- thank u so much bhaiya….
Btw who is she??…(pointing towards anika)..
Ani:- Hiii Gauri.. .I m anika..
Shiv:- no…ANIKA SHIVAYE SINGH OBEROI..
Aniomrugauri:- smiles
Gauri:- hello bhabhi so u r the beautiful lady who stole my bhaiu’s heart..not bad not bad..saying this she hugs anika..
Rudra:-ab sirf usne hi Mike kya???..mujhse toh koi pyaar hi nahi krta…(makes puppy face)
Gauri:-awww.. my sweetu..come here..nd gives him protein shake packets…
Ani:- was surprised by sudden change in rudras gesture…shivaye what happening I thought rudra didn’t like Gauri.. or yaha toh mamla hi ultra h..
Om:-bhabhi I knw him naa…he says dat I keep revolving around Gauri.. but in actual case is different..rudra is Gauri ka chamcha..
All laugh on omkaras statement..

Rudra:- don’t b jealous o..
Gauri:- haan om..dont b jealous..
Janvi comes there..
Janvi:- Arre wht r u all doing here ??..rudra college nahi hasna tujhe??..aur shivaye tej is waiting for u beta..go otherwise he will get angry..
Shiv:-Thanks badi naa.. today u saved me otherwise badepaoa toh meri OMM…. kr dete.. .
Janvi:-kuch bhi shivaye…..om show Gauri her room…nd anika u come wd me..we hv to go to temple..pinky nd mamiji r waiting..come hurry up..
Janvi anika nd shivru leave place..
Om was staring Gauri.. .
Gauri:- what happened dabbu??..
Om:- nothing yaar gabbu..but dis name doesn’t suits u anymore…
Gauri:-y??.
Om:-ab tu moti nahi rahi naa..
Gauri:- wht u called me motu.. he dare u??
Om:-like this moti..moti..moti..
Gauri rans to beat him but her leg gets stuck in luggage she stumble nd falls but om holds her…..
Aankho k pannoo or..
Maine likh a tha say dada…..Main hoon hero tera plays in background..
They share an eyelock….

Precap:-anishiru teases gaurika….

Guys plz forgive me for mistakes..i hope u will understand…do comment guys..nd tell me whether I shuld continue or not…
Thanks …

By saku ishqie ?

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50 Comments
    1. Shreyanvi

      Thanks dear

  1. Karina

    I love the first chapter sweety…keep writting….i really like that your ff is different from the story of the show…keep up the good work…

    1. Shreyanvi

      Karu di……i m glad ki u liked it…??..
      Keep reading dear….

  2. Verna

    Wow saku.. such a beautiful part dr.. loved it.. keep writing I’ll regular reader of urs..

    Thank u so much for mentioning me.. keep writing dr 🙂

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thanks dear…i m glad u liked it..
      Keep reading..??

  3. write in english

    1. Shreyanvi

      Yaa definetly…i will try to write nxt part more in English.. .thanks for letting me knw…keep reading…

  4. Niriha

    Awesome….

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thank u so much dear…keep reading..

  5. Rasika

    Interesting epi dear, a different story, it’s creative, overall awsm…. ??… Eagerly waiting for the next episode… ?

    Thanks for mentioning me, and thanks for reading my ff and do comment dr?…. K

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thank u so much dear….keep reading…?

      Nd I m regular commentor nd reader of urff…but I use to comment by name saku…

  6. Beautifully mesmerizing chapter

    1. Shreyanvi

      awww …..thanks for

  7. Yashu

    So Sweet…it has a different story….loving it….pls post nxt episode asap…..

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thanks yashu dear….
      Next part is already ready…i will post it today only…
      Keep reading..

  8. Renimarenju

    Pleasant surprise….what’s happening with me today….it’s sunday and i am just scrolling tu and finding my ishqies here ……first bshama surprised me with her ff…and saku,….my pyaari choti behana……u are writing ff….oh god…..i just saw the title of ff and ur name saku….that was enough for me 2 check this one…..This is ur first attempt and as di i really appreciate ur effort for taking time and writing this ff…..Ok….really u have done a gud job…especially i liked the new way u are portraying gauri…..it would be nice 2 read gauri like that….want 2 see how ..harharai ….gauri kumari sarmaaa will stand with lambe baal waale omie …. ok….and i liked the way u portrayed rudy and gauri’s concern to rudy that was some thing different……and i felt that as the catchy one….Ok….right now i am not able 2 continue my ffs and i know u would have waited for that gaurika…ff ….i am really sorry for that ….due 2 certain personal issues and work pressure i can’t write any of my ff now….and am taking a break….hope u will understand me…and if possible pls wait for me and my articles….but as soon as u update this ff naa….send links via pm 2 me without fail….i will be ready 2 read it…..pakka…bye lots of love…from ur renima ishqie…

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thank u so much diii..???..
      U knw after reading ur reply I m dancing like hell….
      I m glad u liked it…nd I will surely pm links to u…
      2nd don’t worry ….i always wait for ff…they r always something different…nd I can understand ur work load..dont worry…u post whenever u will get time…
      Lots of love…nd hugs to u..
      From..
      Saku ishqie…

      1. B_isha

        So here I am as promised , well just spellbound I mean the authors note said that i am inspiration to you oh my gosh . Honoured me ….

        As far as your storyline concerned it’s mind bobbling dear I am so happy that u changed mean u were a girl who used to say I am not also reader I can’t such long article and see now ur writing and kya likh rahi hai tu wah !

        Suggestions for you dear
        Here as you know maximum readers ask us to post articles in English which they find easy to read I know hindi is the best way to portray humour but just a suggestion that for those readers add English slangs I mean translation .

        The episode was damn cute sweet little you please do write more …..lots of love and appreciation for your attempt it’s an awww storyline. ….you named me Shimla express I would name you cuteness wali express

        Send me links through pm I would surely pendown my views carry on with the good work best of luck my choti

      2. Shreyanvi

        Awwww…cutenesswali express???…i m so happy dat u finally read it…nd kept ur promise??…nd thanks for suggestion diii…i will surely work on it….
        Nd coming to writing…mujhe bhi nahi pata tha ki main likh bhi sakti hoon????..i mean mujhse comments toh thik se nahi likhe jaate nd Maine ff likh diya..???…..thanks to all u guys…u supported me alot nd readers …thanks..i will surely pm u links…
        Luv u?

  9. Superb dear waiting for the next????

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thank u so much dear…i will post next one by today itself..keep reading..nd supporting??

  10. B.k.maha

    Superrrrrrrrrrr dr… Such a lovely story… Keep going dr… I don’t know dr I capable for it…in spite of Thank u so much dr… Waiting for next episode…. And all the best dr…

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thanks maha di…nd ofcourse u r capable.. …thanks for reading..??

  11. Criz

    Hi saku nice ff I like it very very much keep writing

    1. Shreyanvi

      Hii dear…i m glad dat u liked it…keep reading..?

  12. Alekhika20

    Beautiful updt

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thank u so much dear..it really means alot…keep reading…hv a nice day?

  13. Riyasmiles

    oh.. that awesome… a different story line up.. loved it…
    would be waiting for next…..
    keep doing the good work

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thanks..really means alot…i will post nxt part soon..keep reading..

  14. Archiya

    Hi Saku
    Nice one dear.. It’s ur first FF but it’s just superb…keep posting n pls pm me the link of next chapter

    I have written an FF too..do read Wen u have sometime… Here is the link
    http://www.tellyupdates.com/mere-sang-toh-chal-zarashivika-ff-archiya-part-3/#comments

    My latest os
    http://www.tellyupdates.com/beyond-friends-shivika-os-archiya

    1. Shreyanvi

      Yup…i will surely read it di….
      Nd I m glad dat u liked it…keep reading?

  15. AWESOME CUTE EXCELENT SUPERB?????????

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thanks alot uf…keep reading…

  16. Anu16

    Nice one…. loved it

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thanks dear..keep reading?

  17. Oye saku.. tu toh writer nikli yaar… I lovedd it… N tere pjs isme kaam aa gaye??.. keep writing.. its a fresh concept n far better than the current storyline which gives me headache?????????

    1. Shreyanvi

      ??? dekha di..mere pj’ s kaam aaye naa??…nd thank u so much for commenting..luv u???

  18. ha ha ha…its good , but technically speaking there are a few error’s here and there , but that’s ok. I didn’t find anything new in the story , we have seen these kind of stories in Kabhi khushi kabhi Gham and Jeena sirf mere liye etc.

    But attempt was good to imagine Om and Gauri’s love track with such scenes

    But kudos to your attempt

    1. Shreyanvi

      Vaishnavi dear…i m sorry for errors dear…actually I didn’t checked it before submitting dats y..nd moreover it was for first tym I hv written it so plz forgive me for dat…
      Thanks for commenting nd keep reading..i hope u will find it different to see gaurika in such a way…

  19. gyz..I’m new…may I join with u all

  20. end the episode was awsommmm…as usual…

  21. hey shreyanvi ..nice episode..plzzz let me know mera comment tum take phoncha ya nahi…bcoz I’m

    commenting for the first Tim..I used to read all episode ff BT comment nahi kar pati this…that’s y I asked…plz let me know about my comment….

    1. Shreyanvi

      Hiii dear..ofcourse u can join us….nd tumhara comment mere tak pahunch gaya…
      Thanks slot for commenting dear…nd haan keep reading..2nd part is posted on ishqbaaz page..so do read dat one also…?

  22. thnxxx end surely I will dear

  23. Kehkasha

    Wooooooowwwwwwwwww…
    Saku tu toh chaa gayi boss…
    Tere cute and sweet pjs….
    Uspar no tension wala atmosphere….
    Gabbu and Dabbu…
    Phir Gauri ka chamcha….
    Phir om and Gauri best friends….
    And that too childhood wale…
    Pata hai….how good was it…
    I loved it and will love reading it further and further….
    Waise kj ke baare mein tujhe likhna hai….so no doubts…..yeh tera first and best ff hone wala hai…

    And yes one more thing…..u have read my ff…….when….how….and did u like it…..and of course which one….
    Reply kahin kar bhi dena par dena zaroor…

    All the best for this ff….continue……continue….continue….and post the next one soon….without forgetting to send the link….
    Take care my chotu sis…

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thank God.. ..u commented diii…i was waiting for ur comment yaar…nd haan Maine nxt part toh chodo 3rd part bhi update kr diya??????…read dat one also..nd plz comment…luv u????

      1. Kehkasha

        Han toh link bhej de…..
        Mujhe aasani hogi padhne mein….
        Aaj pata chala ki Mai kitni late lateef ho gayi hun….??

  24. Mrunal

    awwww….. so sweeet….???
    zakas episode dear….
    u know I’m missing this in DBO…
    but I’m glad that at least i can get such cute omri moments here…
    and i have no doubt ki tu accha hi likhegi akhir kj ka ff jo hai….

    and tune toh muze 440 volt ka zatka de diya… tune mera ff padha bhi hai kya…
    padh le fir bolna… mai aur inspiration…
    impossible…??

    1. Shreyanvi

      Thanks alot mru di….finally sapne padha…i m so happy…nd Maine aapka ff nahi padha pr jitna main aapko jaanti hoon aap best writer ho…?…

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