y did i let her go?? (Part-1)

hi guys ,I have been a silent reader for long and have read many fan fictions of ishqbaaz and I really liked them so I thought to write 1 by myself.i hope u all like my story my story and pls comment so that I can know how am I doing but pls not hateful comments I am not that strong to handle them ?
So I am going to start writing from the place where shivaay kicks Anika out of the house.lets start!!
shivaay:(dragging her )just get lost and never show ur face to me again !!shutting the door on her face.
on the other hand Anika is shattered ,she is walking like a lifeless corpse not knowing what to do and where to go
Anika:(to herself)shivaay pls forgive me,whatever I did was just to stop u from breaking, ur Anika can herself break into pieces but will never let any harm come near u
meanwhile at OB mansion,
shivaay:from now onwards, no one will take her name in this house again or you’ll have to face my warth, just forget her like she never existed
Om:yeah,just the way u forgot right?how could u shivaay,u forgot love for her in a single second, dont u think u should have tried to understand y is she doing this
Rudy:yeah bhaiya,dont u know how much bhabhi loved u ,she could never even think of hurting u and today when u were going to confess ur love and accept her happily ,she did all this ,dont u find this strange
pinky:shut ups u both, what’s so strange huh,she was acting all this while b4 and today when she got to know that shivaay is giving shares to u both ,she started showing her true colours!!
dadi:no pinky, her love and concern have always been genuine, I have felt that, in my whole life I have never seen sm1 getting hit by a bullet to save the other,since the day I first saw her ,I knew that she is special
shakti :yeah I also can’t believe that Anika has done this, it seemed as if the words which she was using were not hers but sm1 else’s
jhanvi:u all were just hearing her but I, I was looking at her face it was clear that she was doing this under sm1’s pressur(looking sternly at pinky)
while evey1 was telling their opinions,shivaay was standing there unaffected,his mind was somewhere else
om:y are we discussing all this now huh,u all should have thought of it b4,I tried to stop shivaay but he did not listen to me
shivaay leaves from there without saying anything

there Anika was still walking on the road lifeless and she was just about to get it by a black suv,the driver keeps playing the horn but Anika does not listen

precap:a boy in his mid 20s comes out of the car and starts lashing out at Anika

finally done,I think it is enough for today and it is long enough too so pls tell me how is my 1st attempt?