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Home»Fan Fiction»swasan ss ‘DOORIE….Sahi Jaaye Na…'(chapter 1)
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swasan ss ‘DOORIE….Sahi Jaaye Na…'(chapter 1)

SerenaBy SerenaJune 14, 201680 Comments5 Mins Read
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Helloooo all of u…Serena here…thanku guys for immense support…I really got lot of comments on intro part….n hoping many more on this chapter…so here goes the first chapter of ‘Doorie…..Sahi jaaye naa…’

It was a pleasant morning….a room was beautifully decorated n a couple was sleeping peacefully with an angelic smile on their face….looking at the room it can be clearly said that the couple is newly married….meanwhile..the Sunrays falls on the girl’s face n she opens her eyes n she see her husband beside her who is sleeping Peacefully taking his life in his embrace…the girl smiled on him..when suddenly the man spoke up.
Man- why r u staring at me like this swara…..(smiling naughtily) meri izzat toh tum kal raat ko hi lut chuki ho…abb kya irada hai…?(u have already taken my virginity last night…now what’s in ur mind)
Swara-haww!! U shameless…now go I won’t see ur face again..(fakely angry)
Sanskaar- areyyyyy! If u won’t see my face then how will ur day go perfect….so come on now look at me baby..
Swara-(surprised by his shamelessness) what? (Now seriously angry) what do u think of urself?
Sanskaar-(innocent look) ur husband!!
Swara-(now more frustrated) I mean what have u think of urself??
Sanskaar-(with attitude) handsome hunk of kolkata !
Swara(also in attitude) in your dreams..
Sanskaar- aye haye! Tum mere sapnon me aana band karogi tabhi to main koi sapna dekhunga. (I will see other dreams only when u will stop coming in my dreams)
Swara-(acting to be angry) what? It means I disturb u in ur dreams….go now I won’t talk to u…
Saying this she went from there…
Sanskaar-(unbelievable look n wide open mouth??)- yaar main toh yaha romance karne ki soch raha tha….yaha toh world war shuru ho gaya..??
Sach kehte…bhagwan ne pehle duniya banai…phir chain se soye…phir bhagwaan be aadmi banaya….phir chain se soye……phir bhagwan me AURAT banai….phir na bhagwan soye naa hi aadmi soya..??
No one can understand these women..seriously…

Sanskaar got fresh n went to dining area n saw her angel serving breakfast…his trance was broker by laksh n dp.
Laksh- arey bhai what r u doing over there…come na…see Bhabhi has breakfast today…
Dp-(in between eating) ya ya sanskaar…come fast or else I will eat everything then u have to eat bread butter…
Sanskaar smiled at his family’s antics n went to the dining table…
Sanskaar passed smile to swara but swara gave him full on attitude look…
It was not gone unnoticed by dp n laksh…n they asked sanskaar slowly..
Dp-(slowly) beta hv u both fought over something?
Sanskaar-(shocked) how do u know papa.
Dp- beta 30 saal se Annapurna naam me aatankvadi ko jhel raha hu….itna toh pata chal hi Chuka hai ki kab kaunsa bomb fodti hair ye biwiyaa.
(Son m tolerating this Annapurna named terrorist since 30 yes…I know very well that when these wives used to blast which bomb)
Sanlak look towards each other than to DP n Spain said in unison- EXPIRIENCE..
Sanskaar- papa but now plz tell me how can I convince her…
Dp- sorry son! But its ur personnel matter…u have to solve it by urself..
Sanskaar gave a look to dp n dp chuckles…then sanskaar looked towards laksh with pleading eyes….n laksh understanding his intentions noded his head in no…
Then sanskaar having no hope leaned to his chair n with painful eyes(in funny way) started to say a poem looking at dp n laksh…..
Khusi me toh sab khaate hai
Jam, butter or toast.
Khusi me toh sab khate hai
Jam butter or toast….
Par Jo musibat me saath de wo hi
Hota hai sabse accha dost..
Laksh who was eating food coughed listening to the hilarious poem by his bro whereas dp who was sipping his coffee , split all his coofee on annapurna’s face n Annapurna was giving him death glare..
Laksh- (giving unbelievable look to sanskaar) bhai u have became mad only after 24 hrs of ur marriage…(turning to dp) dad m going to Himalayas.. M not gonna marry….coz I don’t wanna become insane..
Dp- laksh beta kaash main bhi ye bol pata….(wiping his fake tears) but Jo galti 30 saal pehle ki thi Ab uski sazaa bhugat raha hun….koi baat nhi m proud of u that u r not doing that same mistake as ur bhai n me…
Everyone was looking dp in amusement n ap was fuming in anger…
Ap- (angry) oh! So marrying me was ur mistake..
Dp-(realised what he said) oh god no no ap…I was just joking….don’t take it seriously yaar….
Ap goes from there n dp follows her..
Dp-(following ap) listen ap ..see yaar in process of convincing u I hv become bald in these 30 years..plz don’t be angry on me….see now not even a single hair left on my head….see yaar mere takle ka tablaa ban gaya..Ab toh man jao…??
Sanskaar to himself -(touching his hair) oh god sanskaar agar baalo se pyaar hai toh biwi ko mana le beta..( oh god sanskaar if u love ur hair so go n convince ur wife..)
When the two men were busy in convincing their wife they suddenly heard a lady shouting their name…
Lady- Bhaiya….. Bhabhi….sanskaar….laksh…..
All of them excluding swara- kaveri/ bua..

So here ends the first chapter…sorry for being late n plz give me ur feedbacks..bye..
N yup NATASHA Di oops BHABHI m same Serena..

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    80 Comments

    1. tvisha on June 14, 2016 9:11 am

      awesome serena.. it was so hilarious sanskar saying that poem then laksh going to himalaya and the DP AP it was so refreshing plzz post soon

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 10:03 am

        Thanks tvisha..

    2. alia on June 14, 2016 9:18 am

      Nice

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 10:04 am

        Thank u..

    3. thamiazh magan on June 14, 2016 9:19 am

      really funny of break fast table antics.. by the way i cant understand hindi. thanks for giving translations also. Can u plz tell the meaning of title?

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 12:13 pm

        Thank u…n the meaning of title is ‘ distances….can’t be tolerated..’ Its a name of song sung by atif aslam..

      • Meher on June 14, 2016 12:43 pm

        From his second album doorie ????

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 12:58 pm

        Di u like it??
        U know its one of my fav song till now??? omg his voice???, his feelings.???
        I just love it…
        Not only song but singer also…???

      • Meher on June 14, 2016 1:04 pm

        He is my favorite… Mere pass uske sare songs hai… N doorie was first song of him which I had listened… N I fall for him.. N his voice ????

    4. Sree on June 14, 2016 9:24 am

      Wow Sanskar poem was very nice???? kahan se aate eise ideas tumhe???
      Dp is very funny???
      I loved this ep.??
      Love u dear???

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 12:15 pm

        Thank u sree Di…???

    5. Soujanya on June 14, 2016 9:25 am

      Awesome…

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 12:11 pm

        Thank u??

    6. vyshu on June 14, 2016 9:37 am

      nice…..funny too.

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 10:05 am

        Thanks vyashu

    7. Kritika on June 14, 2016 9:47 am

      Awsm..but plz giv the link of prologue

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 10:06 am

        Thank u n sorry I don’t know how to give links…but u can search it..

    8. Purvi on June 14, 2016 9:50 am

      Awesome….. Continue soon……

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 10:06 am

        Thanks purvi..

    9. kavya on June 14, 2016 9:50 am

      awesowe yaar

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 10:07 am

        Thank u kavya..

    10. anu on June 14, 2016 9:56 am

      awesome.. laksh want to go himalays.. hope kaveri dodnt do anything with swasan.. if she is negative character..

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 12:10 pm

        Thank u n yup kaveri is negative…

    11. Meher on June 14, 2016 10:02 am

      Omg shukla ji ??????

      Annapurna atankwadi ?????

      Dp was osm ???? takle ka tabla ????

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 10:39 am

        Thank u Di…n plz do tell me from where did u found that pic which is on ur profile..

      • Meher on June 14, 2016 11:01 am

        Pta nhi yr.. . Fb pe kisi swasan page se uthai thi… ????

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 11:20 am

        Mere liye bhi ek utha lo naa..parcel kar dena..??????

      • Meher on June 14, 2016 11:32 am

        Bhut saari hai bata kaha parcel karu ? shipping charges tu degi ???

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 11:56 am

        Di aap shipping charges ki tension mat lo….waha jaake mera naam bata dena….parcel kya…aapko bhi bhej denge free mein…????

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 12:21 pm

        Waise where r u…plz do come back soon naa….its been long holiday now….jaldi aao naa plz…m missing ur story badly…???

      • Meher on June 14, 2016 12:45 pm

        M at home.. Umm house arrest no room arrest would be perfect…

        I will come back this week surely ????

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 12:56 pm

        Kyu kya kaand kar diya??

      • Meher on June 14, 2016 1:02 pm

        Zada kuch nhi bas chicken pox kia hai ????

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 2:12 pm

        Whatttt? Aapko chicken pox hai…??? take care n get well soon…??? or bohot accha kiya aapki mummy ne… Apko room arrest kr ke…???

      • Meher on June 14, 2016 2:24 pm

        Hawwww how mean!!! ??? M locked in my room from 12 days ??????

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 2:56 pm

        Bas 12 days…OK OK just kidding…well I can tell u the best way to enjoy right now….rishtey par swaragini as raha hai…. Till 5 pm…do watch it…accha wala track aane wala hai n specially that agar tum saath ho song first wala segment….m watching it right now..

    12. Radhika on June 14, 2016 10:38 am

      Hahahahaha awsm….

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 12:02 pm

        Thank u..

    13. shruthis on June 14, 2016 11:35 am

      awesome dear loved it 🙂

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 12:02 pm

        Thank u..

    14. niku on June 14, 2016 12:05 pm

      HAha..awsome …n kya poems thi.. hmm..maza aagya

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 12:15 pm

        Thanks..??

    15. Sumeeta on June 14, 2016 12:09 pm

      Soo funny.just amazing

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 12:16 pm

        Thank u..??

    16. SHAN on June 14, 2016 12:47 pm

      awesome….pls dr update n english alone dont understand hindi

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 1:00 pm

        Thank u n would give u the translation…co somewhere I have to use Hindi…but surely give u translation in English..

    17. pooja26 on June 14, 2016 12:48 pm

      superb dear……..

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 1:00 pm

        Thank u..

    18. Geetanjali on June 14, 2016 1:04 pm

      i love it so nice

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 2:13 pm

        Thank u..

    19. Rosey on June 14, 2016 1:06 pm

      Great

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 2:14 pm

        Thanks dear..

    20. navi on June 14, 2016 1:30 pm

      Nice…

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 2:40 pm

        Thank u..

    21. Jwala on June 14, 2016 1:34 pm

      annapoorna atangvadi.. superb dear

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 2:41 pm

        Thanks jwala..

    22. Zeenat on June 14, 2016 1:35 pm

      Hahahhhaaa!!!! Hilarious!!! Funny!!! BT awesome

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 2:58 pm

        Thank u dear..

    23. Annie on June 14, 2016 2:26 pm

      Hi Serena…

      Loved the way you write and humour which is shown is just awesome…I was laughing just imagining Dp and Sanskar….

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 2:58 pm

        Thank u so much Annie..

    24. Anu Ann on June 14, 2016 3:08 pm

      Nice episode dear

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 4:06 pm

        Thanks dear..

    25. Abdul hafiz(uma). on June 14, 2016 4:10 pm

      Oh my god,I like ROFL. But yeah,ladki o ki bareme esi baate karti hain jab tu khud ek ladki hein ,sharam nehi aati…….hehe,just kidding. About chappy, super se upar.Waiting for nxt.☺☺☺☺☺☺

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 6:16 pm

        Thanks uma Di..n it was complement to ladies in indirect way…see na we girls r sooo beautiful…that after our creation men wanted to see this creation carefully that’s why they never slept…n if they slept our sweer dreams never let them sleep peacefully…
        U know different way of taking things..???

      • Abdul hafiz(uma). on June 14, 2016 7:02 pm

        Lol,you your logic.

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 7:40 pm

        ????

    26. aanya on June 14, 2016 4:21 pm

      Awesome

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 6:17 pm

        Thank u..

    27. Aami on June 14, 2016 4:31 pm

      soooooooooo cuteeeeee eisode… statrng with romance, naughtiness n ending woth ee entry….. i lved dps chrctr…

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 6:17 pm

        Thank u aami..??

    28. harshitha on June 14, 2016 4:40 pm

      Ur ss is just fab dp is just hilarious I liked dp in ur ff rather than serial loved the episode waiting for the next part ❤

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 6:20 pm

        Thank u…even I don’t like that dp….even when he cries in someone death also it looks like he has lost his chocolates????
        No emotions at all….that’s why m taking revenge from him in my ss??????

    29. kumu on June 14, 2016 4:46 pm

      nyc start..:)

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 6:21 pm

        Thank you..

    30. kaynatk01 on June 14, 2016 6:31 pm

      awesome yr i just loved it and sanskaard dialouge was rofl ???

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 7:39 pm

        Thank u..

    31. sneha on June 14, 2016 7:09 pm

      Nice serena… the family anticss and sanskarzz poem ws jst hilarious…i was laughing soo loudly that my dad came into my room to know why i was laughing lyk a mad…lol..
      I mst say that u hv a vry gud sense of humour… 😀

      • Serena on June 14, 2016 9:07 pm

        Thank u dear n thanks for complement..????

    32. mahi on June 16, 2016 7:23 pm

      It is really nice . Ab mein tumari fan banjavungi yar……

    33. Naaz21 on June 27, 2016 12:13 am

      Awsum n funny

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