PRIDEV FF : IMMORTAL UNCONDITIONAL LOVE (Part 5) BY RENIMA ISHQIE

Hello, Ishqies….. am feeling bit better and I am updating fifth part of my ff. I agree that you want it on priveer but I started it as pridev only… Amidst of hectic work schedule and ill health am writing this ff. If you didn’t like it then express it with your comments apart from saying ff on priveer only ; since I started writing it before priveer track was started. So ishqies…please try to understand it’s a ff for pridev……
As your opinions are really valuable for my ff….
Here are the links for the previous episodes…..
part-4

part-3

part-2
Prologue

Scene- 6 {@ Park}
Dev : Hi Priyanka…
Prinku : Hi Dev…
Dev : Prinku…thanks for coming….
Prinku : Dev….am getting nervous….please whatever you want to share please make it fast….
Dev : Yeah…I understand prinku…..actually I want to tell you something about sidharth rana…. Sidharth is a cunning person….he just want to ruin Shivaay bhaiya ….
Prinku : What ? But he is just business rivalry
only ?
Dev : Prinku…..he want shivaay bhaiya’s failure….not only in business…..but also in life…You know when I was struggling for a penny he offered me the post of marketing manager in his company……And I saw his real face there…I mean he intentionally want to ruin chabra’s group of business by utilizing me……And when I find it I resigned the job…..He still didn’t stop his masterplan…..He tried a lot to trap me …but my life changed all of a sudden with my mom’s unexpected death and paapa’s announcement of me as his son…..And I want to say from the sources I got an information that ranas have planned to trap shivaay bhaiya in his upcoming business contract…..And…..I just want to say….
{ his words got interrupted as he gets a phone call…..Prinku observes that he is tensed….}
Prinku : Dev…you are tensed……Whenever you gets the phone call I have observed that after attending the call you will be tensed….Why?
Dev : Nothing…priyanka…..
Prinku : Dev….we are friends…and you can share it with me…..
Dev : Prinku….I think we have to leave now….
Prinku : But dev……
Dev : Priyanka…..I am sorry…….I mean I will tell you ….but….i need some time…..
Prinku :Its ok…but trust me dev….when you really feel to share it with me you can……{she smiles @ him….he just pretends a smile and interrupts her words}
Dev : Priyanka…..i think….
Priyanka : Dev….am leaving…..
{She is about to leave….dev stops her by holding her hands …..She turns and they share an eyelock….}
Dev : Am really sorry…..priyanka….if you don’t mind shall I drop you to your house ?
{Prinku just smiled and shake her head….dev also smiled…}
Scene- 7 {@ oberoi mansion}
{Prinku and Dev entered into oberoi mansion. All are shocked to see them}
Shivaay : Dev…..how dare you come here ?
Dev : Am sorry shivaay bhaiya…
Prinku : Bhaiya….please don’t blame him….actually I…
Dev : Shivaay bhaiya…..actually I was just on a long drive and on the way when I saw priyanka I said I will drop her….but she was not interested and I said I want to meet Tej uncle as paapa asked me to give this ……{he just tries to search something in his pockets by putting hands }
Shivaay : What the wuck ? You are an irresponsible person …..and I wonder how Mr. Chabra announced you as his son ?
Dadi : Billu….behave yourselves….he is our guest…
Shivaay : Dadi….this guy…
Dadi : Billu…for me dev is like you, om, rudra and prinku…..Got it ?
Shivaay : Dadi….
Omkara : Shivaay….dadi is right….
Shivaay : Disguesting !! {shivaay leaves the hall in anger}
Omkara : Dev…..sorry….
Dev : Its ok…om bhaiya….
Dadi : Dev….puthar….am so happy to see you…… om beta…call pinky and jhanvi……
Omkara : Yeah dadi { Omkara leaves…..}
Dev : Dadi…….whatever happened @ that day…
Dadi : Puthar…just leave it…..{dev smiles}
Prinku : I will bring tea…..
Dev : No thanks….actually I have to leave….
Dadi : But puthar….jhanvi and pinky….
Dev : Dadi….its urgent…convey my regards to them….i have to go….
{Dev is ready to leave….Prinku stares him……Dev smiles @ her and leaves…..Jhanvi and Pinky arrives there and found dev has left….}
Pinky : Maaji I think this dev is not rights….
Dadi : What do you mean ?
Pinky : I don’t know why but I feel this dev is just here to makes Oh my maata of Shivaay …..
Jhanvi : Pinky….dev is a nice guy……I don’t think he had any intention to ruin shivaay…..
{“But I think pinky is right”…..every one turns and find it was Tej who had interrupted the words }
PRECAP : Tej- Sakthi- Chabra meeting

Guys…please put your comments…
And guys i will update late only as am having some work….sorry guys for the inconvenience…

12 comments

  1. Renimarenju

    |Author

    Guys i know..this is not good….. and am writing it amidst of time shortage….so comparitively my ff’s parts will be very short …..really sorry for that……

  2. Luna

    |Registered Member

    Renima, actually this ep was quite boring according to me…plz try to add more depth in the characters. This is just my personal opinion so take it as a pinch of salt. I’m sorry if u felt bad…take care of ur health dear.

    • Renimarenju

      |Author

      Thanks my critic luna ishqie…actually i know this was the worst one…but when i started it every one got interested…but as soon as priveer track was shown….then am getting comments to write for priveer only…..and this part i wrote in rush…and yeah….i didn’t conveyed much in characters ….actually when it got posted and i read it i feel the same…and dear i have updated the 6th part and have commented on your ffs…also….and no need of sorry ishqie……. as you said what i feel only….

  3. shahabana

    Helloo renima i hope u are better now.
    And about ur ff its intresting i mean to say its different than other ffs like i this is the only ff about priydev and i liked it. And in IB i liked dev charecter but after entry of ranveer i liked priyaveer pair most bcz i think ranveer suitable for prinku but i loved ur concept about prinku and dev .really its short and sweet ff. Sorry ishqui i have readed ur ffs 5 chapters together so im commented here only in coming episodes i will comment for sure inshahallah. Nc attempt tc

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