Mrs. Khadoos v/s Mrs. Malhotra (plot)

Hi guys!πŸ˜‰ This is Otakustuff. It would be my first fanfic on this site. Please review! Suggestions and constructive criticism are always welcome.
I wanna first share my basic idea about the story, test the waters and see if it would be worth writing complete story. If it is received well enough I will definitely write the story. So please give me your honest feedback and also any suggestions you might have. Constructive criticism is also welcome anytime. Though I wont be revealing the whole plot so as to keep some suspense.😝
Another thing I would like to tell you is that though this a kaanchi story , it wont be focused on just two of them all the time. Other characters will also make comebacks through chapters to give clues about the main plot.
So the bottom line is it wont be just Kaanchi romance story but also of suspense genre.

Mrs.Khadoos v/s Mrs.Malhotra :
Kaanchi get married because Jaya doesnt want her to get recognised. Also she fears that some people might recognise her being sunil’s daughter and take revenge on her by destroying her careet. Jaya and Kusum know each other. Veer will play cupid sometimes and is like Mr.Khadoos’s younger brother and loves Kusum like his own mother. Kusum doesnt like annad but tolerates him for sake of Riya Veer and Priya. Riya is not that bad just a bit foolish. Though she still dreams of being Kusum’s daughter in law.

So what do you think?

If you are interested in the story please read further:

Also i need you guys’ opinion about something. Should kaanchi’s marriage remain a secret to people in hospital or be known by everyone? And why?( If u have any particular reasons or ideas about it ) In case of jeeping marriage a secret it will be still known by Malhotra family( or maybe some members of Malhotras ). The updates might not be regular ones since i have exams coming up in mid august( I couldnt wait till then to share this ideaπŸ˜‚πŸ˜) and also i don’t wanna update just for the sake of it and compromise the quality of the story…rest assured i will try my best to update asap.

39 comments

  1. Maliha Noor

    Hey! Nice plot, I think kanchi marriage should be secret for sometime for maintaining professional relationships comfortably but it should be exposed after some time. Love your story please keep updating soon. Thanks

    • Otakustuff

      Otakustuff

      |Author

      Thnq for bing te first one to review my story plot..I’ll try to update asap. Be sure of that! I hope you will love the story as well!πŸ˜‰

  2. Trisha139

    Trisha139

    |Registered Member

    You can continue this is super cool …and yes I guess marriage must be hidden for sometime and then known by everyone …

  3. AnahitaAnnie

    AnahitaAnnie

    |Registered Member

    The plot itself already got me ready in the seat.. Woow, veer a cupid, Riya a foolish.. Its going to really in interesting. I think their marriage shouldn’t remain a secret.. Jaya doesn’t want her recognised that means she needs Kabir’s surname or identity and Thats not possible without the marriage being revealed.. So its basically Saanchi has to be known as Kabir’s wife to conceal her Mishra identity. Plus it would be soo cute to watch them try to be a couple.. And ur comments and fav ideas everyday made me feel u should be writing an ff.. U have an awesome set of ideas.. And a potential person like u would make any story interesting.. So , my vote is obviously continue asap.. And a big hug on starting a ff!!! Congrats..😘😘😘

    • Otakustuff

      Otakustuff

      |Author

      Thnx a lot Annie. If their marriage is secret she won’t be known as kabir’s wife but someone who is married and just has the same surname as him and malhotras will know about it and if it is public then everyone will know who she married but her status wont be unmarried inany of the conditions.

  4. Richa1496

    Richa1496

    |Registered Member

    Nice plot.. I think for some time marriage should be secret.. Because then only we can see jealous and caring kabir…

  5. shreya

    it is just a request we are not a author but we are bit nice reader and dear author we know without are opinion u can do the best but main thing is post regularly and start the ff as soon as possible

    • Otakustuff

      Otakustuff

      |Author

      I will try my best to post regularly but since my exams are approaching in 2 weeks…there will be a bit delay at that time..plz be patient with me then….maybe i’ll write chapters inadvance and post later…

  6. riya

    sorry for late comments dear……..btw the plot is good, continue writing………..in my opinion the marriage should remain a secret, anything when revealed, loses its essence & if it remains a secret, we r going to hv an amazing story line,like if malhotra would try to offend sanchi i any way, kabir could (secretly) help her & since kabir is in anand’s good books, he won’t doubt on him………its completely my opinion, u may take the plot as u desire……….eagerly waiting for ur next update………….

    • Otakustuff

      Otakustuff

      |Author

      Thnx a lot Riya…ur review made my day…so happy to know that u believe in me…..I agree with your opinion…stay tuned to find out what happens…I will post the first chapter soon!πŸ˜‰

  7. Amnaa

    The story line is very nice and u should continue it and i think the marriage should be a secret as like this we would see a jealous kabir but plz make him understanding and caring

    • Otakustuff

      Otakustuff

      |Author

      Thnx for reviewing Amnaa.. seems like everyone wants to see a jealous kabirπŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚ yes yes you will see him and of course his caring side will come out…but you will have to wait for that momentπŸ˜‰ i will post first chapter soon….lets see what happens!

  8. riya

    all the best dear for ur exams………seems like everyone’s having exams within this time period, i too have my exams next week……..hope it goes well………..

  9. Isha

    I liked the storyline…I love ffs and movies with suspense…cuz what is anything without a suspence…would be waiting for ur ff..Yeah I too have exams😩…Best wishes dr😊

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