ISHAQIYA- THE IMMORTAL LOVE

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ISHAQIYA- THE IMMORTAL LOVE…(jndsd)

Although this Story is about the two person but one soul.This story is about two person who fought for thier love against this evil world.They faced many hurdles,obstacles what no one able stop them from reaching there destination it seems that god has wriiten each other name in their fate….

The man is talking with on phone while driving:(tensed) Hello yes i’m comming you please take care of her… i will be there in few mintues(cuts the phone)

The young girl trying to cross the road comes in front of a car…..car man pulls the break.. she gets pushed by the car…

girl: ouch!!!!!!!!…….

A young dashing, charming, extrovert,angry youngman business tycoon comes out the car(tensed and angry): oh….. hello are u blind can’t you see car comming….(still on the ground)……( face covered by long curley hair)

another girl comes their…….Didi are you fine…. she help her to get up from the ground……

Another girls: hello excuess me don’t you have any manner….. don’t u know how to treat girls…..
and how can u tease….yes she is blind…. she can’t see anything….

Girl:Guddi…… don’t say any anything to her I should listened to u…. but i wanted cross the road by my self…..(removes her hair from face)

A young beautiful , charming, bubbly, fearless, humble girl is shown: he does he know that i’m blind….. he had no intention na…..
say sorry to him….she moves her hand toward the man and say I’m sorry from her child…. she is my younger sister can’t see me in pain…..

man:( kal hona ho heat beat plays) what is happening to me…..(tone continue)…….

girl by the may I know your good name…… my Self…. Vividha Srivastav…

man: I’m Atharv Sujata….. I’m sorry vividha….i little tensed… my mother is admitted in hospital and I was rushing toward the hospital and in this
behaved rudely with you…. i’m sorry vividha ji….

viv: don’t take ant tension your mother will be fine…..(he leaves but) one mintue( take out something from her bag) take this for your mother….
i got this thread from baba mazaar….. tie this on your mother hand….. he will be fine….(she smiles and both leave)……..

After two three days……. Vividha and guddi is shown… sitting outside the restaurant….. some goons come..

guddi: lets go from here didi fast…

viv: but why guddi, we just come here….(whats problem)

guddi: sagar oberio goons are here….. i’m sure that they are definately here for u only……(lets go)

viv: No worry nothing will happen…..its a public place… they won’t able to do anything…..

guddi: why don’t understand….lets leave now please….(she insists) {viv: okk lets go}

goons1: stop there way….wait Sagar sir called u….

guddi: why did he called, why do we go the him?

goon1: sir angry as she was talking man…. few days back on middle of road he got the news…… lets go….(holds vividha hands)

guddi: (shouts for help) please help my sister these goons are taking her away please….some help(no one dares to step forward)…..

goons are talking away vividha and on other guddi ask for help(with teary eyes)….. goons move forward….but couldn’t…….. someholds vividha hands tightly…..

goon: who the hell is this… who stopped our away….(turn and see a man holding vividha hand) {its Atharv}….

ath: hey when girl doesn’t want to go…. why are you talking her forcibly……..

goons2: you don’t know us who’s man’s we are….. it will be bad for u…. now leave her hand let us go…

ath: won’t leave if you want, you can……

goons3: (gets angry) tries to hint punch……(he holds hand and twist…and throw him away…..)

goons attack Atharv but he punish them all…..

Ath: from next them…..say to your sir…. won’t trouble any women…. if has courage come fight with man……

All goon leaves….. we won’t spare you…. our boss will you…. they run away……

guddi: are fine dii and hugs her… thanks u hummm…….

viv: Atharv…..right….

guddi: thanks Atharv i took u so wrong but at last u were the only one who saved my sister….. soory for misunderstanding
this………..she cries….

ath: guddi please don’t cry…. i saw shouting for help so… I came to help… by the thanks to you vividha ji…… because of your thread… my maa is alright…..

viv: nice to hear about your mother health…….

ath: hey…. my mother would be very happy meet you…. she also here…lets go….

viv: ya….sure i will happy too meet her…. I want thanks her such a brave man…..(Atharv holds vividha hands)( kal hona ho heat beat and voilin mix(tone) plays……

they go inside restaurant…… Sujata…. siiting at the table… see Atharv comming….. and smiles but is equally confused seeing to unknown girl…..

suj: atharv who are they?

ath: maa she is vividha srivastav and she is younger sister guudi…. maa she is same girl who sends baba thread for u…..

suj: Ohhh!!!! thanks….. for your love….vividha… good bless….(puts her hand on vividah head) nice to see u….

viv: no need to thank Aunti…. instead i should thanks to u for such brave person……..(atharv makes her sit on chair……) they all talk for a while……. Scence shift……

suj: Atharv do u remember, you give donnation to KMT college…….

ath: yes maa i remember I will do this today itself……

suj: good boy….. (both smile) scence shift to KTM college….

Ath: he goes to meet prncipal……. hello ma’am….

prn: welcome Mr. Atharv how are U……would u like to have something……

ath: i fine ma’am ….. thanks for asking……and they have talk……

ath: okk ma’am I should make a leave now…..I will send you check by today or tomarrow……

prn: Thanks mr. Atharv…. and yes too Sujata ji as well…. (he leaves)

he stops remove his googles…. he see Beautiful girl making…… Sculpture(kal hona ho{ guitar}… he mesmoreis her beauty… and runs back to principal…

prnci: What happen Mr. Atharv??…..

ath: ma’am i want to organise this complete feast….

prnci: yo do this every year….

ath: no ma’am not like that…..(sees vividha) not this way…. this time I also wants to be part….. I want to enjoy with them…….(smiles)

prnci: that great Mr.Atharv…. our pleasure…{ma’am start prepartion from today only I will join hands from tomarrow}

ath: thanks ma’am…….. he leaves….. and goes toward vividha….. hello vividhaji how are U……..

viv: she hears….. him and ask who ?

ath: its me vividha ji Atharv………

viv: Oh!!!! atharv u….whow…………. what a surprise…..how come are here….

ath: vividha ji actually, we every year orgainse event in this college……. this year I my self will be the part….what are you doing here……

viv: that great here Atharv…… actually I teach student art of sculpting…. and she is my asstaint and frnd Shakshi………

The prepartion starts and Atharv and vividha share some moments…… of happiness……….they both became good frnds……
ath: chocaltes for u vividha ji…..

viv: choacaltes thanks for this Atharv…… how do you know that i love chocolates…….

ath: when heart comes closer…. you began understand each other…..liking as disking……..

viv: nice punch Atharv……

ath: vividha if you don’t mind can we dance together in this event….. please…

viv: why not my pleasure Atharv……..

ath: go then!!!!! we will perform on Greua……..(dilwale)…….

they began to practice….. their dance….roamantic couple dance…….. someone sees them and clicks photo…..

next day sagar……. comes to vividha house….. and began to throw things…… vividha where are you come out……

uma(vividha mother): what is this……felony get out from my home…..

sgr: where is vividha call her right now…..

kailash: who is there……. you rascal how dare you enter my home….. get out…. never take my daughter name from your tounge……

sag: holds collor and says keep vividha away from all that drama…… otherwise you see…..

viv; who is this maa……

sag: vividhaji…..(holds his jaw) never go near any other man…because your only mine…..

viv: i will do whatever I want to do…. its my life……

sar: vividha i’m saying for ur and your family sake…. I’m your future husband……

viv: god has already written someone in my I don’t fear from you……(she picks up something)…. if don’t go i will kill you…

sag: haaa…… holds vividha tightly and say please vividha kill me……

viv: okk then i will hurt my self…. lets what you do……

sar: wait I’m going….I’m leaving…. leave come everyone……. please vividha harm yourself….

viv: takes deep breath…… and cries out…. falls on ground….

uma& kailash : vividha are u my child…. they both goes to either side and calm and hug vividha…..
nothing will happen to u…..

Next day: Atharv hello vividha but she doesn’t respond… vividhaji are you there… (she ingonre him)……

viv: leave me alone and never come close to me okk…..

ath: what happened to u please tell me….. (he force her to tell)……

viv: Atharv…… that sagar oborio is troubling me and my family his…. agent saw me with you and he came to our house….. narrates the whol incidence……

ath: but why is he troubling you when saw me with U…..

viv: sagar obrio saw me one party…. from there he is fallowing me…. he once proposed for marry but i refused….. he told me that he will marry me….
slowy his love turned into obession… if any man tries to talk…. sagar oborio destroyed them…. I now i fear he will harm you…. i doesn’t want that….(badly cries out)

ath: goes toward her holds vividha….. vividha ji you trust me{she nodes her head postively) be relax i will handle……. everything…….. now can we pratice…..(wipes her tear…)
vividha I hate tears (and both smiles). they began pratice…..

they final day of comes….. everyone comes and enjoy party…..

ath: today After feast i don’t what to do…. i’m felling so bad…. don’t know…….(vividha calls Atharv…… but still lost)

viv:(shakes) what happened to u atharv….its seems u are lost in your own world……. Have this Litchi juice……

ath: thanks ….. by the how do you know that I like litchi juice most……

viv: comes heart cmes close you began to know each other liking(they both laughs) all perform and now its…. Atharv and vividha performance…….

they both start dance on greua….. they fell each other winds blows….. Atharv who is lost in Vividha beauty continusly sees……All enjoy their beautiful performance…….

goons comes there with hockey and began to break furtinure and decortion and everyone runs and shouts…. Atharv sees..them.
what the matter with you why are you damging all this…….

goon: you are that hero hmm…. he push him, when boss told u to stay away from her….. you want danc with her….last we make understand you don’t listen….
(holds his hair and jerk) vividha shocked hearing all this…..Atharv…. why did u told me……

ath: I won’t leave vividha alone…. do whatever you want to do…… i know ur….. i even any fear of boss….. all goons shock hearing this…

goon2: yes boss will be happy….. he will rain money on us….. they move forward atharv gets up….. they began to hit Atharv….. they hit on Atharv legs an he falls down everyone beats…him bloods comes out of his mouth….

viv: please leave…. please…. they keep vividha side with push….. her hand…. Ochhh!!!! she cries….

ath: he hears her…. see blood comming out….. but goon rise hockey was about hit atharv……(gets angry) he holds and hands and hit everygoon……..

ath: he runs to vividha….and sees her wounds…. its paining? and ask first aid…..first aid comes..(he cleans wounds) and (kal hona insrumental plays)……

comes from behind…… and hits on Atharv heads….. but atharv turns and beat all the goons …. all run way….

ath: say to boss now Atharv Sujata is on his road…. do whatever he want…..

all goons are shocked hearing atharv sujata and they run away…….

he turns toward vividha falls on ground holding his head……all rush toward hospital……

goons report….sagar everything…..about and atharv…….

he picks up his guns and say I its a real game…. get ready to lose Atharv Sujata….. he fires bullet on on his man……

because of you she gets hurt…. she bleed out…. so blood revenge is blood….. laughs…..

In hospital…….vividha comes to meet her…..

viv: what was need to fight against goons…..

ath: who is listening to vividha peacfully…..(talking to himself { what i tell u, that I love Vividha I can’t leave without you} ) sorry vividha ji…..

viv: its ok.. but please take care of your self….. and I brought this thread this rudraksh garland for you wear this his right hand…..moves forward.

ath: (he smiles ) moves his hand forward and say make me wear…….(vividha shoacked)…. what happened? fast put this on my hands….

viv: she makes him wear…… rudraksh and I should leave….. now I’m getting late….

ath: okk bye take care please……..

After some days Atharv is back home…… he goes to college to meet Vividha…… and ask her for date…..

ath: hello vividha ji how are you…..

viv: athrv u…. moves forward searching atharv…… she lose her balance but Atharv saves her from falling…… he is continusly watching vividha……

ath: makes her stand are u fine…..he ask..

viv: yes i’m fine thanks….. holds his hands….why are you here?

ath: i thought to take my frnd for a candle lit dinner…..

viv: I can’t come please atharv no…….

ath: you are tensed about me and Sagar….. I will see to it… and now if will not agree…. i feel bad….

viv: smiles okk say…. i will come with you….. sence shifts…

Its athrv and vividha enjoying their dinner talking and sharing there secrtes…..with each other…..
atharv who is listening to vividha eyes……I wish you see me…… hey….. will dance with me…. beautiful……
vividha agree and moves her hand forward…. atharv holds….. and bring her to Stage and they dance….. (agar tum saath ho…. tamsha)…

they enjoy with each other company and began spend time with each other…… As Atharv was already in love with vividha…..on the other hand
vividha too start fell for atharv……. he gets happy talking to….atharv but eqaully in fear from sagar because of repeated warning that he will hurt atharv….
but love does care about evils and ride on thier love express both couldn’t confess their love to each fear losing each other frndship and company…….

Its Atharv birthday…….. vividha ask guddi to call atharv….. she tease her… as she understand her sister feeling…..

ath: hello guddi yes, tell me is vividha is alright and is there problem…..

viv: calm down everything is fine…… I’m vividha not guddi….

ath: sorry I thought you are in trouble and that why i got tensed for u……

viv: calm down young man….. actually can we meet…. I have show something…….

ath: now…. ok.. i’m comming… in few mintues…. (cuts phones)

screen shifts……

atharv comes to Srivastav niwas…. excuess me… vividha….

kai (come): yes whom you want to meet……

ath: actually sir, i came here to meet vividha….

guddi: dii atharv has comes…..( vividha smiles) and goes to greet atharv……hii Atharv…

ath: i’m fine what about you vividha……

gudi: we are fine….. Oh!!! actually papa he is Atharv., i told you man saved didi everytime.. god hand to didi…

kai: ohh!!!! yes… he joins hands thank u beta you saved my daughter life everytime…….

ath: no need uncle…. just bless today is my birthday…..

kai: congrats…. livelong… and stay happy….. go vividha is up…. guddi take her vividha…..

gudi: wait the big surprise is waiting for u……..

takes her vividha….. room…. winds blows….

viv: atharv you have come…. welcome..

ath&gudi: shocked how did she get to know……. they ask how did u/

viv: not just my heart felt that you are here…….

ath: nice…. it means I also leave in your beautiful eyes……

viv: yes…. you are very special…..

ath: thank u madam…. why did call so early…..

i want show something come….. she show him….. something coverd under red colth……

ath: what is thgis……vividhaji…

viv: see yourself…this for u…

ath: removes cloth….. surprised to see his sculpture…..and Atharv Sujata Wriiten on it…. whow that great….

viv: did you really like it…. i know I blind i can’t you I just felt you while dancing with u…..

ath: iss!!!! puts her finger on her lips… from next time don’t call yourself blind ever…..do you no one other than my mother gift so beautiful…..present….
it more valuable for me than gold, dimand ring………
he moves forward…. say vividha ji…. who told u can’t see…. u see this world from your heart…mind(mann)….. now my eyes will your eyes….. you will see this world from my eyes….. and promise you i will give that precious thing to see which never dreamth……

viv: I wish u were mine…. even god is annoyed from me……

ath: will never…. leave your and gift you gave me….its very special for me…. you made mt day….
and kiss gently kiss her cheeks and thanks…. beautiful…….

Days pass they began to come more closer toward each other….. but still can’t tell each other their feelings…….atharv takes her to diffrent places and make her feel pleasure……. of the world… he make her see this world from his eyes………

One day…… At school…… Atharv comes to her…..and talk about…..vividha thanks him for being her god patner….

Atharv recives call from someone……

ath: hello….., ya its atharv

voi: …………….

ath: really…. are sure… is’t possible.

voi:……………

ath: thanks you made my dream true… thanks…..

voi: ……………..

ath: i will come as soon as possible…. just made arrangement ready…..

voi: ……….. sure, bye…..

ath: once again thanks and cuts his phone…. he jumps yes….. hug vividha tightly…..

viv: first surprised what happened….. tell me…..

ath: my dream come true…..vividha….. we go to london for that…..

you are comming with with me get ready and i don’t want to listen anything……tomarrow is our fight……

they both ready to leave london…….

ath: vividha ji i’m just waiting for that moment…….

she surprised as didn’t know anything…. but she Atharv company….. fight take of………….. atharv is describe her activity near by vividha closing her eyes imagining all that…..
they reach london…. he her describe beauty of the london…… the check in hotel……

later after some hours they go breakfast…… they both go for breakfast…. and enjoy thier meal….. phone rings…

voice: all preparation is done…..

ath: really ok…. i’m comming you email me your text…….

voi: its done you soon as sir…. we are waiting…..

ath: lets go….[she inquir] its surprise for u…..

viv: i love surprises…. lets go then………

they hire a taxi on way….. its gonna be beautiful time if, results are positive…… they the place….. its london eye hospital……..

he takes her inside the hospital and make her sit inside the room……

viv: where we are…tell me….

ath: told u surprise for you……. wait…..

they start to opreate….. vividha next day…….
viv: what happening here i’m not getting anything…please tell me.

ath:iss!!!!! wait….(doctor enter)

doc: so ma’am are ready to see fresh world….. yes ma’am sir made arrangement for your opreation so that you could see……..

viv: what really!!!!!!

doc: really madam……. are ready….. madam….

ath: i want vividha first thing i want you too see my life,my love so that you could convience her to become mine….. wait a mintue…. bring something covered under red cloth…

viv: who feels little sad…. agree with smile….

ath: yes doctor please start…… before u open your eyes…… he holds her…..bring her front of that thing he made cloth hold in her remove and thenopen eyes slowly…….he stand behind her….
viv: (smiles removes cloth) finds and its mirror she opens eyes….. and finds herself and with heart on centre…. and written vividha Atharv sujata written mirror she gets emotional……and turns and says Atharv…… and tightly hugs….he sigh doc and nurse to leave….

ath: I told u…. my dream but surprise for u……..

he breaks hug and moves back bend down on his knees and ask will u be Mrs Vividha atharv sujata….. i fell for u when i was with….holding ring in his hands

viv: I love too… atharv…. i didn’t wanted to lose u…..that’s why i couldn’t convey my felling…… to you….but now i love U atharv…..

atharv makes her wear ring…. they both are happy and hug each other………they tour the beautiful london…… its there time to go london……

viv: i love u london….

ath: and what about me….

viv: (kiss his cheeks) this is for u…..

they are in flight…….. now vividha could see everything what atharv make her see…. with his eyes…..
she thnaked for atharv…….

viv: thank u atharv for being part of my life….

ath: i should thank u….. you changed my life……

viv: but sagar…. will harm u….

ath: i’m with you nothing will happen………

they land india Atharv tells everyone about the surprise……. vividha is happy how could now see her parents and siblings…….

suj: comes with Shagun and ask vividha hand…… they happily agree and the date of marriage comes………..

sagar comes know about all this and gets angry….. i will not let go away vividha……

sagar kidnap her family….. and her ask her to marry otherwise all will be killed…….

viv: please leave them sagar…. i love atharv i can’t live without him….. please try to understand…..

sar: you go to your atharv here I will kill your family….. I promise its your decision now…….

he load again it time for first installment………. 3…2…1…. stop…. I will…..

sag: then get ready tomarrow we will marry an tomarrow in temple…… and your family men will be released……

Next day comes across truth and and to find vividha…. later he gets to that there family member are in trouble……..

he starts finding all…. here vividha is made ready for marriage …..she remember Atharv……and his memories…. his propsal their time their cute rommance momments and cry…..

atharv captures sagar gonns and ask about everyone….. he finally finds everyone…. and saves them from sagar captures….. he runs to find vividha……

he remebers his beautiful moments with vividha……Other hand vividha is made ready and sagar coms to take her……. lets go vividhaji……
they drive off……on the way vividha ask him stop car as she want pray for her beloved onces…..

sag: i will come along and yes wear this burkha so that no one can identify you……
they both leaves toward baba mazar(Bhahr do jholi meri plays) …… Atharv also reach thier…..both enter mazar….vividha tie thread and bless for all…… she leaves…..
atharv also comes ask for vividha and tie thread…… vividha comes and bow down her head….. ask for
atharv happiness and well being…..she gets up her anklet fall down….. atharv too prayer and offer Chadar….. he bow his head ask for vividha…. he gets and sees anklet……. he idenetify the anklet…… runs too see….. vividha but they leave……….

Atharv gets call yes: yes they are going toward old Shiv temple…. at near outer ring road……..

ath: i comming vividha ji……wait for me……

ath: reach there….. and finds…. i’m comming

there marriage is happing…… vividha is quiet and silent….

sagar: was put vermillion…… someholds his hand…. who the hell…. turns and find atharv…….You….

ath: how dare you think what this….. i will kill u…… he punch and an free vividha…. they fight….. at top of cliff….. finally…
you tried harm my vividha ya…. kicks and sagar faints….. vividha atharv hug…… sagar gets up ……

sag: if you will not be mine…. I will not let u be any one…. runs with knife to stab vividha….. Atharv who holds his hand sides Vividha and turn the knife and hits sagar belly…. the falls down……… Atharv moves toward vividha and some bags iron rod on atharv head………vividha shouts…… Atharv….. he again bangs and Atharv falls…. vividha shocked……

man comes to sagar.. son get up see i removed your biggest obstacle….. see…. wake up son…. his eyes gets red and gets up….. beacuse of youmy child died…. I will kill you to….
holds gun and pulls gun puts his hand on trigger in press it vividha close eyes……. she opens eyes….. athrv spears man…. an dthey both fell fro cliff….. vividha shouts Atahrv…

viv: god did gav eme eyes to see this day of life…. why u always take away my happiness………

ath: comes out and sees below what happned it seems someone badly fall down….

viv: nods heads…. and cries….. and turn her head….. see find Atharv……. all well….

they both hug…… they go…. all the ritulas take place both the couples gets happily married…….

AFTER 3 years All the standing outside the room………. they all hear child cry all gets happy and hugs….each other…… Atharv thanks vividha for this beautiful gift…….

after some years….. all a beautiful girl is shown ….. all vividha call her….. Vidhita….. where are……. its your first day… to school….

ath: remember your vidhita vividha……

viv: vidhita Atharv sujata and the began to fight…… girls shouts enough….. decided what it to be….. she tells them all get happy hearing… this….

ath: see how smart mydaughter is…..

viv: hello excuess me your wrong….. its my line…. see how smart my daughter is….. they began nok jhok…….come under close and smiles……

THE END………….

every one claps…….. she recives standing ovation……

media1: who did get this super idea about the best seller book…..

girl: its a true about my parents struggle for thier love….

media: it means your daughter of Atharv and vividha sujata…. Vidhiat…..

girl: no…. not vidhita its VIDHITA VITHARV SUJATA………..

all clap….. here are my parents i’m proud of them……

ath&viv: no….. we are pround parents of our dauhgter…… thanks for Ur surprise and gift they comes under on frame….. camera man clicks photo…..all smile

“HAPPY ENDING- VITHARV”

“ISHAQIYA- THE IMMORTAL LOVE”

here ends my story….. my OS About Vitharv…… hope your good support and good results………….

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16 Comments
  1. Aleya.marzan

    i liked it.
    where’s the ff u said u’ll publish it monday

  2. Yaaar no words to say ….really fabulous and heart touching ? …atharv’s dialogues were powerful…clearly portrayed every character….vidhita vitharv sujata…superb thought ?
    Was able to visualise same as ur ff .
    Keep writing dear ..u r really blessed..go on…?

  3. ohhhhhhhhhh my god this is the best ff I had ever seen I like other too equally but this is just amazing what type if person you are @ raone you are just amazing I can’t expresses how much happy I am after reading it just loved it fabulous and fantastic I loved it I will never forget this ff in my while life till my death only
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    vividha atharva
    o my god now what I can say your love for vitharv you have shown in this ff and this I want to say for every vividha atharva ff now what should you have said everything by this ff again I will say love for vividha atharva
    only
    vividha atharva
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    vividha atharva
    vividha atharva

  4. and yes one thing more plsssssss become director you will be famous among the whole world you are just wow

  5. RAOne your story line was brilliant really enjoyed the soul of the content. One small suggestion, try to do proof reading once after you write, because it will help you to make the content flawless. If possible write in MS-WORD and after proof reading paste the content here. Don’t get offended by my suggestions.
    All the best.

  6. Sunanda12345

    @raone dear superrrrrrrrr awesome…..no e words….such a wonderful os of vitharv

  7. Fantastic FF in ever
    I like your FF
    But raone its too loooooong ? ? ?

  8. Aleya.marzan

    i wish this could be shown on tv . really awwwwwwwwwwwwwwsome .u’ll win the contest for sure

  9. Ohhh god.what is this???? Just beyond words. RAOne dear it’s awesome, superb, fabulous,nice…..and I think one of the best OS?.Yesss it’s our vitharv??. God bless you and best of luck.?? You are…..yrr don’t know. I’m just speech less.?

  10. So good….. ??

  11. Raone…No words dear…Awesome..?????…Ur best ff ever…
    Liked it so much…ur way of writing is too good..??..Vitharv are soo cute …

  12. Superb.i can’t express it in words. Really enjoyed it.good work.keep working.u will succeed..ALL THE BEST

  13. I loved it to the core. Oh my RAOne u r fantastic writer. But please once b4 posting go through it to correct typing error i know it’s hard work don’t feel bad pliz. keep this awesome work up u’ll definitely go far.All the best dear.

  14. lovely OS

  15. Shaani

    Amazing os… Loved it.. Superb yaar.. I really enjoyed it.. Keep writing… Thankx for this beautiful os..?

  16. Jasmin

    Hey dii..sry for the delay..i wasn’t getting the net..that’s why I got late..n this story is awesome..i loved it..ur marks r..

    Title : 9 / 10
    Story : 38 / 40
    Reader’s attention : 16 / 20
    Understandable : 9 / 10
    Creative dialogues : 16 / 20
    Total : 88/100

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