Game over : A Naamkaran ff Episode 2

Thank u readers for showering your love on this ff. I m sorry I was away for a long time which must have lead to you losing track. So…
Recap- Avni and Neil have an argument just after their marriage in which Neil reveals that he knows everything about Avni .
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Avni: What rubbish are you saying, Neil. Dont you know that I m Ananya Verma not any Avni ?
Neil: How much will you try to hide? I know that you are Avni Aisha and not any Ananya Verma.
Avni: I think our marriage has given you a very deep shock. That is why you are speaking such ” behaki- behaki baatein” .
Neil: Avni, dont hide it from me anymore. I know that you are Avni Aisha and Neela Aunty is your mom and not Madhavi. Nano is your grandma and you have suffered a lot because of Dayawanti Mehta. You came back here just for your brother Amol. Am i right ?
Avni: I dont know what in the whole world you are saying Neil. I am Ananya and not Avni. You get that ?

By that time Neela comes there.
Neela: What are you two doing here? You should be inside , taking the blessings of your elders. You two have just got married!
Avni : Neela Aunty, we both dont accept this marriage. It was just a plan to save the reputation of the Khanna family.
Neela : But Avni, this marriage has taken place with all the “riti – riwaz “. How can you not accept it ?

Avni : Neela Aunty , you also. Why do you people consider me to be Avni? I am Ananya.
Neela : Avni, Neil knows everything.
Avni: What are you saying Mom.
Neela : Yes , Neil knows everything and is ready to help you get justice.
Avni: I dont need anyone’s help to get justice. It is my fight and I will fight it on my own.
Neel: Avni, kabhi kabhi doosron ki help le leni chahiye. Kab tak aise akele ladti rahogi?
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The next update maybe late all thanks to upcoming practicals and tests. All types of appreciation and criticism is welcome.

11 comments

  1. LopaFleek

    LopaFleek

    |Registered Member

    I really loved it. I always like how you keep that suspense in last part. If I can give you any advice it would be to unfold the character slowly.

    Example: A beautiful lady walks to them

    Use she or her, then after a few sentences about the person, unfold the characters name.

    Please reply back, xox

    – Nikita

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