enemies frm childhood (part-1)

hey guys its me aastha…..i wanted 2 write an ff ever since i started reading all of urs……..its truly amazing….i know mine ll never b like tat…. Its te 1st time im trying 2 write a story……plzz dnt scold me if it is bore….ok im gonna stop blabbering………..
in tis story niel n rohit is rads cousin bros bt te bond btwn tem s mch mre tan tat……..sam n arjun r cousins…arjun niel n rohit r besties …anjali mishra is rads dadima(te actor who acted as anjali in ipkknd-2)……..n hr husband is rads dadaji(te dadaji in mmz plot)….i’ll introduce others as te story moves on………………….soo here we go…..

Location: Sun’s palace:
Sun ws woken from his deep slumber by te voices of people in Earth.They were saying:” its already 6 in te mrng…….y hasn’t te sun risen yet!!!!!!!!!!!!!. Sun in hs mind:” these people r really tiresome wont even let me sleep……..”Distracting hm frm hs tots cme remainder alarm in hs iphone “its time 4 te meeting..hurry up!!!!!” (sun s very modern jst like any of us…..)By te time he reached te hall every1(clouds,thunder,rain,rainbow,wind…..etc… etc…..).Soon tey all got into a serios discussion.”How can we make this day special????today our princess in gonna b cme to tis beautiful wrld na???( cn u all guess who it is???…..)…..Rain spoke out:”I ‘ve an idea.if it wrks out we cn mke te sky very colourful in connection wth hr b’day……others:” wat s it????stop fidgeting in ur chair n share it wth us…..rain:” ok.tis is it….i will rain in one part f te sky a few minutes bfre hr entry n meanwhile sun shud shine in te other part….as a result rainbow ll b formed…….rainbow u dnt mind it do u???hw is my plan???sun??…”.sun representin all others spoke out”what an idea serji!!!!!!!!!!!!!”…………..

Finally the sun rose in te east filling te world wth its li8 and ebbing away te darkness.The beautiful sun rays fell on te lush green garden of te Mishra mansion.It sparkled te water in te fountain. It smiled at te beautiful flowers n leaves. It did’nt forget to greet te beautiful winged butterflies n te busy bees before seeking its way to te mansion…..

Inside te mansion te atmosphere ws filled wth morning prayers to god all mighty,laughter f te children,morning chores in te kichen…..bt apart frm tese tere prevailed anxiety n tension n hope….yes hope f fulfilled dreams…te house ws decorated frm roof to floor…..it ws in its ast touch ups to welcome their new guest who s gonna fill their lifes wth colors…in te Pooja room,Anjali ws holding an aarthi plate n ws praying” lord u gave us 9 healthy well behaved good natured grandsons in a row..please fulfill our dream f holding a baby girl in our dreams n petting hr….” she hd tears n hr eyes……it s tld tat if we cry n request 4 smeting bfore god he’ll grand it 2 u…..

As te clock in te living room struck 8 in te mrng..tere came a call…..it ws frm te hospital…to an eagerly waiting Anjalii hr husband broke te news…not able to handle te shock she got out f hearing it te phone fell frm hr hands…bt regaining hr strength she spoke out:” our mala(rads mom) gave birth to a baby girl…”….te moments silence wich prevailed after te news ws announced ws soon broke by te cries of happiness n cheers frm te children…it ws followed by te laughing f te others.As Anjali rushed to te Pooja room to express hr gratitude to god te exicted children who ran out to share tis happy news to others stood transfixed at te gate seeing te rainbow in te sky.tey stared at in awe..it ws quite unusual to see rainbow let alone a secondary rainbow…infact tey were nt te only one who sawit..infact te whole neighbourhood saw it…n spoke to each other tat te baby ws blessed….by te by do u know wat niel n rohit did???tey ran to Arjun n woke hm frm hs sleep by shouting in hs ears “ we got a sister…”……soon te place cme to a festive mood…..evry1 were burning fireworks to celebrate their angels birth ……

Precap: Baby comes home n hr naming ceremony…..cn u guess who te baby is???

Guys plzz tel ur sincere opinion f tis….is it bore????should I stop it???plzzz give ur cmmnts…bt plzz dnt reprimand me 4 writing a bore story…..

Credit to: aastha

43 comments

  1. None other than rads ….. 🙂 growing older with our loved one s really cute part 🙂 🙂 dats too being cousins it’s kind of fun 🙂 🙂 keep going (Y)

    • aastha

      tanku sooooo much suga…..i dnt know hw to tank u…..ur comment means a lot…………n ya its rads………once again tanku…….

  2. Sathya

    nice plot aastha. i hope it will be fun when the hero n heroine grow together ???all d brst for ur first attempt

  3. Vivi

    Wow wat a beautiful intro…truly loved it….the way u narrated d whole sun n other parties…der convo…..and d babygirl is our own sweetheart radhu….wot a wonderful welcome she had into dis universe……write soon!!!
    Love you….

    • aastha

      tanks vivi…….im glad u liked it……infact i too love tat part the most……….n ya i’ll write soon…..

  4. Gauri

    Well done Aastha…keep it going…very good start…waiting for the next…lucky girl Radhika 🙂

    • aastha

      tanks di………..im sooo happy………n di wen r u going 2 update dpo?????????im dying 2 read it……

  5. Shree

    Aastha it’s so cute!! Keep going girl!!

    Post soon… Love you loads.. Tc.. Keep smiling.. Bear hug ??

    • aastha

      tanks rosie…..i dnt tink i ve commented in ur stories lately….i ws busy with my board exams…..wen r u going 2 update???????

  6. Beatrice

    Well done dear on your first attempt..the narration is superb especially the part where you describe the sun’s nd all meeting and the intro u gav to the household.. U hav a gift dear..

  7. Nina

    its niceeee…… but can u plzz stop abbreviating everything ???? ….bcox its hard and annoying sometimes for reader to read….

    • aastha

      i’ll keep that in mind when i update the next part…….n thanks 4 te correction…….love u……

  8. Ananya

    Aastha I loved it.. Full happy happy mood everywhere.. So cute… U write well dear.. Keep going..

    • aastha

      tanku anaya chechi…….hw can i not make everything happy when our princess in going 2 b born?????

  9. Rg

    Hi I really love this story line. So from d title arjun and radhika r going to b enemies on sight

    • aastha

      tanks rg……….u guess too much…..lets see what will happen in the upcoming episodes…….

  10. aastha

    sorry 4 the late comment….i was busy helping my mom in household works…..i had promised her to help her after the exams……..hope you wont mind…..

    tanku all for ur comments n wishes and suggestions…………i never expected such a welcome……..i was reallly tensed whether all f u will like it as it is my 1st attempt……..bt im gladthat u all loved it………..i will keep in mind all the suggestions you have given me when i update the next part………i cant help stammering thanks to all again……all of your comments made me realize that im not that bad………….thanku all………….love u………..

  11. Sv

    Super awesome. Gr8 start . Pls do continue and rock it . Loved the speech by the sun rain and others. That was awesome. So the little angel is our fav radhika ?? Right ??

    • aastha

      u r absolutely ri8…….its our rads…….im glad that u liked it………..ur comment means a lot……

  12. Ammuz

    Its our one and only radhika na? Awesome story Haha :v sun, rainbow, cloud nyc dear! Soo my frnd is a writr!!! Ha? go on with ur writng buddy i wil be with u to support u lyk evry1! 🙂 nd dnt u hav fb? Wts ur prof nd name?

    • aastha

      tanks ammu…..ya i have fb account…..aastha is my pen name…..i did nt understand wat u meant by prof????did u mean profession????…..i’m studying…i just completed my 12th….like u……n i ws a science stream student.To b mre precise a computer science student…..i studied in rajagiri(state)…..n my real name is aleena……

  13. Dev

    It was nc 2 read buddy n while reading i cud imagine d scenes wow osm plz b regular n upload d nxt fastly????

    • aastha

      tanks dev…..i so happy tat u cud imagine those scenes…n ya i’ll update soon..actu i’m free bt im a lazy goose so i din start writing te nxt part…..but i promise i’ll write sooon n try to post it today……tanks 4 ur support……

  14. akkru

    SHOCK’D…DAMN SHOCK’D..wen u said u wrot a stry,i tot it wud be sme kindof simple one…BT dis is UNBELIVEABLE,it’s fanatastic dearoo!!i hve always mock’d u for being sch a serial freak.Bt 2day i take it bck,u hve gt dat potential inside u,KEEP GOING.I am happy dat d so call’d ‘aastha’ hve come out of her shell.i am not regular reader,bt vil nvr mis ur episo”s…like othrs WAITing 4 the next 1…

  15. feby

    sry dr…i was late to comment…i didnt get time actually evn though i read ur on that day itself…..its an awesome one dr…u r doing good….and u have all our supports to tell the truth….v r eagerly waiting for the nest part….actually i thought of commenting whn i didnt grt to c ur ff strday… ;p

    • aastha

      hey febi its all ri8…dont wprry i’ll soon post the next part…ityping it..as soon as i finish it i’ll b posting…..tanks 4 ur support…

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  17. Roma

    It’s our angel, our light….RADHIKA….wowwww so beautiful n amazing start….aastha you’re amazing…I never thought anybody can ever think like this…sun, clouds, rain, Rainbow n all had meeting….so sweeeeeet n cute…n the colorful welcome of our beautiful Radhika…what will our hero do now as neil n rohit broke his sweet sleep with this good news….very interesting n unique lovely plot…plzzzz continue dear n congrats on your first ff….is mind blowing and superbbb….eagerly waiting for the next episode, love you loadsssssssss

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