My employee… A Twinj ff (two slots ~ ritzi) Shot-2 last shot

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Let’s start the last shot….

“Yes…. He does….so whts a big deal…its ofcource not a crime” dad said with too much of confidence… No dad no…pls don’t show this much of confidence on me…it only makes me more guilty.

“No Mr.sarna interviewing a person is not a crime…but the way he interviews a person nd appoints them job is absolutely a crime” he said looking at me to which I just bowed my head. “Arre whts wrong in testing a person’s intelligence…nd checking his achievements?” Dad said being fully confused. “Arre Mr.kunj u didn’t tell yr dad how u appoint a person…. I mean a girl?” He spoke.

“Mr. Shikhawat I request u to come to the point!” Dad shouted loosing his patience. “Voice down Mr.sarna instead of wasting yr voice on me…u should use it on yr son” he said “sir pls….its not dad’s fault…he doesn’t knw anything pls be humble with him” I finally spoke. “Kunj! Wh…whts…yr fault…wht hv u done….stop lying” dad said.. I just bowed my head. “Oh…if fu*cking or I should say ra*ping every girl nd then giving her job is not a crime…then ofcource yr son is not at all a criminal… But sadly…its against Indian law…so I will hv to arrest him” he finally spoke. “Inspector!” Dad shouted “mind yr tongue….my son cannot do such things” he said…no dad no…pls don’t do this. “Kunj tell them its false….tell them u cannot do this.

I tightened my fist nd closed my eyes to control my tears. “officer…arrest him” I heard Mr.shikhawat saying. “ inspector its wrong…u cannot arrest a person without proof” dad spoke. Proof! Oh yes…they cannot arrest me without it…I suddenly opened my eyes nd looked up at inspector. “Oh so u want proof…no worries I will show u the proof….but wht if u don’t even believe in proofs? Umm…let me call the witness also…eye witness I mean” he said making me go shock……..witness! Proof! When! How! Where!

“Wi…witness!” Dad exclaimed “ya…MAM!” He shouted just aftr tht the door of the cabin opened….my heart was racing like anything…. I desperately wanted to knw who she was……I saw her…..”Twi…..nkle” I whispered…… Twinkle? Witness? No this is not possible… She cannot ditch me… No…oh wait kunj… U called her for job frm today na…she must hv forgotten the way to my cabin thts y she came here. I must say she is looking…..argghhh! M not getting words…..her gorgeousness was too gorgeous to handle….her simplicity… She wore black denim nd a sleeveless baby pink T-shirt tucked inn. Her straight brown hairs were left open today ‘dhak dhak’ hehe did u heard tht…thts my heart…the moment in saw her I had to collect my heart beats. “Twinkle…. Wht r u doing here…I forgot the way to my cabin…go nd sit there I will be there in smtym” I said advancing towards her but those Bl**dy constables stopped me. “Arre….wht r u doing let me talk to her” I said but they were too stubborn.

“Mr. Kunj I guess u still not understood” Mr.shikhawat spoke “understood wht? Inspector” I asked “tht twinkle mam is only the witness” he spoke. “Wht! No…u r lying” I spoke “he is not lying sir….I mean kunj” I heard twinkle saying…. I moved towards her….still trying to digest wht she told just now.

“Who r u….y do u want to spoil my son’s life?” Dad spoke. “She is twinkle… Twinkle taneja” Mr.shikhawat spoke. “Wht! Twinkle taneja….u…u mean…TWINKLE TANEJA!” Dad spoke. “Dad…wht is so shocking abt it” I asked

“Kunj…she is daughter of RT taneja…commissioner of Mumbai” dad spoke “wht!” I exclaimed being teary eyed. Did I just had a s*x with daughter of Mumbai’s commissioner!

“How could u do this to me ….u ditched me” I said almost teary eyed.

“A person like u deserves to be ditched” she said looking directly in my eyes. “But how can it be proved tht kunj is guilty” dad spoke. “I understand ur dilemma uncle…but we hv proofs too….hv a look” she said handing over sm pictures to him.

I donno wht pictures were they…I wanted to see them but these constables were not allowing me to even move. “Let him see too” I heard twinkle ordering them. They left me….I ran to see the pictures….I snatched the pictures frm dad’s hand….aftr seeing it…I was…u knw shock is such a small word to explain my feeling right now…I got into trauma….there were pictures of me kissing twinkle…. Taking out her cloths…in our intimate position… I couldn’t believe my eyes…how can a girl be this strong to keep her respect…her character at stake? My hands were shivering… I looked towards twinkle just then inspector snatched the pics frm my hand.

I didn’t had any strength to look towards dad. “Wht if this pictures are edited?” Dad spoke “dad” I whispered.

“Look Mr.manohar I knw u r in a gr8 shock…let me tell u everything frm beginning. Frm past 3 years or so we r getting continuous complaints against yr son for s*xually harassing girls nd forcing himself upon them…we could hv come at tht tym only wen we got the first complain but we needed heavy proofs against son of this big businessman nd if we would go without much clue then there r 100% chances of him getting saved…..this case was pressurized so much tht we were forced to discuss it with commissioner. He suggested us to send a girl who will bring proof against u but which girl will be ready to put her life at stake….we searched a lot but no1 agreed once twinkle mam heard us discussing the matter…..nd within a second she told tht she was ready to enter the cage.

Commissioner sir though being a father was bounded by his oaths nd duties therefore he agreed nd u knw the rest.” He ended. I could see shocked expressions on dad’s face….but the one who was getting deeper nd deeper into trauma was me.

“Is this true kunj?” Dad asked me….I just bowed down my head nd nodded in yes ‘chatakk’ I heard…….actually I felt it too….I deserve it actually…. I really deserve tht slap. “M sorry dad” I whispered. “Don’t call me dad…m not yr dad…….if u were my son then u must not hv done this…but u proved me wrong….take him inspec…” He said but got choked “dad…dad u alright” I screamed trying move towards him but no…..they were not letting me to do so. “Lemme go there u idiots dad has a heart problem… He cannot bear stress” I shouted……but of no use…..I saw twinkle running towards him …..she made him sit on chair nd made him drink water. “Calm down uncle…..pls its not good for yr health.” Twinkle said…..I donno y..though she has done this much to me I just cannot get angry on her ….but y!!

“I…I m s..Sor….ry bet…a” dad said breathing heavily making me more nd more guilty “its OK uncle…it wasn’t yr fault” twinkle said. “Okay then Mr.sarna we will take our leave” inspector spoke. Nd gaze which were wondering the floor till now went up to dad….he didn’t protested…..I deserve it…ya…I do. I saw the constable making me wear handcuffs. Nd soon they dragged me out. I saw the whole staff looking at me….whispering nd all….it was too shameful. But u knw wht…I really deserve it.

They took me into the police jeep…aftr a lot of struggles I managed to look up….nd I saw twinkle sitting in her black Audi nd moving out. I just want to talk to her once.

End if Kunj’s POV

(Hehe guys…now comes twinkle’s POV)

#Twinkle’s POV

Y do I love him so much! Y! I thought driving my car. Ya…the moment he touched my body…I became his tht day…. My heart got connected to him tht day…the moment he left his marks on my body…my body became his nd only his frm tht day! I donno…though I didn’t want to fall in love with him….I fell for him….but its necessary tht he gets the punishment…. Nd abt me? Huh….I will forget him in few days. ‘No twinkle u cannot…..’ My heart whispered yaar….I just want to murder it right away… Here I m struggling hard to kill my feelings nd there it goes……..

I stopped the car near police station as I wanted to give the photographs to him safe handedly nd I got to knw tht he is here for sm enquiry. I wore my shades just to hide the pain as ik dad would easily catch it …..nd I stepped out of my car.

I entered the police station as soon as I entered there all the constables saluted me. I smiled at them nd made my way towards Mr.shikhawat “sir where is da..” I was going to ask when I heard a scream……a scream of a known voice…a scream of my Love’s Voice….caught in the frenzy of fear….fully frightened I followed the screams continuously praying god tht he must be in good condition….my heart beats racing faster nd faster as I moved closer “kunj” I whispered when I finally reached his cell. Tears blew down my cheeks uncontrollably. “Aaaaaaaaaah” he screamed when he again got hit by a metal rode. He was tied up nd was being beaten up by few officers ……..he had his jeans nd black inner on….his hairs were fully wet due to sweat blood oosing out frm every part of his body. “Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah” he screamed hard when one office just hit him on is already wounded back. “KUNJ!” I screamed shit! I was too loud. Damn twinkle can’t just control. Kunj looked at me in pain. Still getting beaten up.

I closed my eyes as I was not able to bear it anymore….no twinkle u hv to be strong…u just cannot let him know yr actual feelings to him….I took a deep breath in nd opened my eyes nd again gained my attitude. Just then I felt a hand on my shoulder… I looked towards the touch “uv Bhai” I whispered “wht r u doing here?” I asked “m here just to give tht baster a taste of my hand…how dare he touch u….how dare u hide this much truth frm me!” Bhai scolded “bcus ik u would hv not let me do this” I said Bhai just ignored me.

“Hey u guys….come out” he ordered…. Nd they came out ofcource yaar how can they deny the orders of the inspector general.

Bhai entered the cell aftr all were out….I too went behind him bcus ik he was here as a brother nd not as a police officer. (Guys uv hadn’t came in his uniform) I saw Bhai picking up the rod again….no Bhai pls! “So u r the one who even thought to touch my twinkle” Bhai spoke.

“Who is he?” Kunj asked who was still tied up nd was panting heavily due to pain. Twinkle come on…u hv to speak “thts none of yr business okay” I said moving towards him…..”no…thts completely my business ” he spoke “nd how so?” Bhai asked frm behind “bcus…..” He said nd started kissing my lips…..I was struggling to move out… His hands though they were tied up but his lips were also too strong. “Bcus I love her” he said in betwn the kiss…..but he was audible enough to boil bhai’s blood “aaaah” kunj screamed when Bhai bet him hard on his stomach ….nd bhai pulled me back. “How dare u uh…how dare u touch my sister”

Bhai said beating him like anything “si…ah…sister” kunj ……..smiled! Ya he was smiling endlessly though he was being beaten up. “I knew it….aah aaaaaah…..I love u twinkle…. u” he said continuously screaming in pain as Bhai started beating him harder “u Bl**dy womanizer….don’t even dare to think abt my sister…m warning u” Bhai said till now blood started oosing out is his mouth. “Bhai….Bhai leave him…Bhai…stop it” I shouted snatching the rod frm his hand…kunj was almost unconscious “kunj…kunj… Open yr eyes” I said patting his cheeks. I was not thinking abt anything else….the only thought running in my mind ws kunj. “Twinkle” I heard Bhai whispering…… Shit! “Whts happening here!” We both heard a voice “dad” I said nd ran to him. “Oh my god uv….did u forget tht ur a officer too” dad said looking at Kunj’s condition. “Twinkle don’t u knw ur not allowed here……..go!” Dad said angrily “nd uv u too” dad continued. I unwillingly started to go “twi…wink…le” I heard kunj stammering nd his words pierced my heart…. Though his voice was painful but I was able to find love in it too. “ do…nt l…eav..e m.e” he said making me cry vigorously “dad I m gonna kill this guy” Bhai said moving towards him “uv! One step forward nd ur gone” dad warned Bhai came,held my hands nd took me frm there.

# aftr 4 days

I took my keys nd rushed towards my car …..shit! The case only had 10 minutes left to begin. I said driving my Car at the speed of 90km/hr.
Yes today is the court’s day…..which will decide our future ….Kunj’s future. I only knw how did I spent this 4 days… Those sleepless nights ….the nightmares of kunj being hurt still haunts me. Ya though I was not allowed to go out of house….. But my heart stayed with him wen he told me not to leave him. I applied breaks when I found tht I reached my destination.

I quickly moved out of the car nd started climbing stairs of court. “Twinkle” I heard nd I turned around. “Uncle” I said nd touched his feet out of respect. A lady was also present there…..I could find her eyes swollen… She must definitely be kunj’s mom. “Beta…pls forgive us” uncle said joining his hands. “Arre uncle …pls don’t do this” I said putting his hands down. “I…to” aunty said “its okay aunty….u dont need to give explainations” I said “let’s go in” I said nd they nodded. “Have u forgiven ur son?” I asked climbing stairs. “No…still we wish tht the decision of the court no to be so cruel…but we knw thts wht it gonna be aftr all he did tht …..I mean….to a commissioner’s daughter” he said “uncle…its not abt whose daughter…its just abt respect of a girl” I said nd we entered court.

I saw Bhai there….dad said he won’t be able to cm bcus he was too busy….but ik he is not cmng bcus he will not be able to see my respect being pointed out. Bhai got to knw tht I hv sm feelings for kunj…..thts y he is angry wid me nd he stopped me to meet him until the court session was there.
We all took our respective seats. Nd the judge also came we stood up nd greeted him…he then ordered us to sit down.

“Kaidi ko kathghare mei laya jaye” he told. His words just tore my heart apart…..tears again filled my eyes when I saw kunj coming…..he was not the old kunj……he has become too weak with wounds. I saw usha aunty crying too…..I caressed her palms nd she started crying more….I hugged her just to console her. I saw kunj looking at us….but as soon as his gaze met mine…I moved my eyes just to show him as if I was not at all concerned. Kunj was made to stand in the dock.

“Case ki karavahi shuru ki jaye” judge ordered. Our lawyer started giving solid proofs against him….we also had many witness….. It was like they were clearly loosing.

But Kunj’s lawyer was not so weak…he aroused many difficult queries to us. Later on I was called in witness box…. My heart raced….I don’t want to speak against him….just then Bhai came nd made me stand as he must hv understood my dilemma….before climbing the box Bhai gave me death glares or I should say warning glares of not ruining the hard work done by all of us.

I secretly watched kunj…who was just staring me…

His eyes had its own vocabulary…. It was definitely a beautiful language to learn….but I ws bounded ….I was roped with all my duties ….I knw tht I nd he can never become one so why to give him a single clue tht I also love him? Just to arouse hope? Just to make him weak? No! Its better tht I keep my feelings safe in my heart.

“So ms.taneja u r claiming tht kunj sarna forced himself upon u” he asked I looked at kunj …he was looking at me….with pain. “Ye…yes” I said. “Where r the proofs?” He asked nd my eyes widened up…my heart was still racing…I could feel the heat rising in my body. “Objection my lord…we hv already shown u the photographs” my lawyer said

“Yes your honour they hv…but they can be edited too” their lawyer spoke. “But why will I do this to myself?” I protested.

“Oh! I will explain u….ms.twinkle can u tell us yr whole name…pls?” He asked “twinkle ramindar taneja” I said “nd here u go… U got yr ans!” He said making me go puzzled.

“Your honour… She is daughter of Mumbai’s commissioner…we heard tht ramindar taneja is behind kunj sarna since 3 years but he was not getting proofs so he sent his daughter to get sm fake proofs there” he said Bl**dy b*stard how dare he speak like this abt my father….nd look at kunj…he is standing there…motionless nd still…not even protesting…………

“Do u hv any solid proofs ms.taneja” he asked me. “Yes we hv” I said closing my eyes tightly as I knw my next step will ruin everything damn thing….my reputation… My respect… My love…everything.

But I had to do this….. For dad….for all those who suffered…..nd I do feel tht kunj can become a better person in jail. Nd later on he can live his life without any allegations….. I hv to do this for him. “I told u those photographs wont work here” the lawyer said “but I hv a video too” i said .

“Wht!” I heard kunj “yr honour I had fixed a video camera there….which has recorded every single thing” I said with tears flowing down my cheeks.

“Then we would like to see tht” lawyer spoke. “No…wait….” I heard Bhai saying. “Twinkle u r not showing tht video” he shouted

“Mr. Yuvraj r u forgetting tht u r a officer nd not a brother right now?” Judge asked. “M sorry my lord…but I cannot simply ruin my sister’s reputation” he spoke “Bhai… Its OK…waqil sahib u can submit the video” I said to my lawyer. The lawyer stood up ….I closed my eyes ….shivering like hell. “No wait”

I heard a voice….kunj’s voice? I opened my eyes nd looked at him “your honour pls don’t show the video…I accept my crime…I…I….I did force my self upon twinkle nd not only twinkle but every single girl who came to give interview to me” kunj said nd his lawyer went all shocked…..not only he….I was shocked… Kunj…u proved me wrong…u proved tht u really love me…..kunj….”but pls don’t show the video….I cannot see my twinkle’s reputation at stake” he said making me cry…..I was crying like hell…. I tried but I couldn’t control…so I ran outside the court ….crying.

#at 12 am (midnight)

” take this nd open the door” I said giving handsome amount of money to a constable…nd telling him to open kunj’s cell for me. Ya I was at police station…..tht too at midnight…. Nd tht toooo by hiding it frm every1…. Wht to do Bhai was not allowing me to meet him…… I got to knw tht kunj was sentenced 3 years of imprisonment.

The constable opened the door of his cell nd I entered it “u only hv 5 minutes” he spoke nd I nodded. I saw kunj sitting on the floor with his head dug in betwn his legs as soon as he heard the sound he looked up…..nd finally our eyes met. “Twinkle!” He exclaimed standing up suddenly. I did not utter a word….actually I didn’t knw wht to utter….. I did not find it necessary to utter either…bcus the moment I see him …time freezes.

“K……kun..j” I spoke with a lot of difficulties but as soon as I spoke he banged me to the wall….holding me tightly by my waist. “I knew u would come” he spoke. “Kunj there was no need to deny the video in the court” I said “oh…so I will simply allow my bl**dy lawyer to throw out yr reputation right?” He asked “but how do u care?” I asked even though I knw the ans. “Bcus I love u Twinkle” he spoke. “Though this is not the first tym I m telling it to u…but I will never grow tired of telling it to u…again nd again” he said moving his hand down my waist….no melting twinkle no melting….I warned myself. “I knw u love me too” he said ….nd my eyes grew wider. “St…top day dreaming kunj sarna” I said “stop lying twinkle” he said tucking out my shirt slowly nd sensually….”I m not lying” I said moving my eyes hear nd there. He came more close to me. “I knw u r lying….the day I touched u at tht very day u fell in love with me” he said….how does he know!

“Bhai is gonna kill u kunj” I said when he opened my last two buttons too.

“I don’t mind getting killed twinkle” he said sliding his hand on my bare waist. (Guys her she had her shirt on but the buttons were open)

“Kunj stop those cheesy lines” I spoke throwing his hands down… Nd trying to move a bit away frm him….but of no use…he again pulled me towards him nd cupped my face gently. “Tomorrow they r taking me to central jail…..for three years….I will not be able to see u….pls accept twinkle pls….so atleast I can live my days with yr memories” he said making me go weak….I didn’t knw tht he was going to central jail…where no1 is allowed to meet.

I started breathing heavily. “Shh…hey..calm mera baccha…calm…only three years” he said rubbing my bare back below my shirt…how does he understand my every worries? “I will wait for u till tomorrow…. If u will say yes….I will be on cloud nine…. But if u say no..I will accept yr decision” he said pecking my lips for a millisecond. Just then I heard the door of the jail opening “mam the meeting tym is over” the constable spoke. Suddenly I realised my buttons were open…I quickly moved my hands towards my shirt.. Just to find it already…… closed? When did he just do tht? I looked at him amazed.

“Remember… Last tym also I made u wear cloths…then y not today too” he whispered making me blush endlessly…. I quickly ran out of the jail.

#end of twinkle’s POV

#kunj’s POV

I stepped out of the jail……ya…they were taking me to central jail today. I was moving as slow as possible not bcus I was scared of prison nd all…but only bcus I was worried …..if twinkle didn’t come then? Or wht if she gets late? No pls!

I almost reached the jeep…nd tht constable was pushing me inside continuously…… I was busy looking here nd there…..she didn’t come….I lost all my hope nd started advancing towards the jeep….”MAKE SURE U DONT FALL FRM THE NINTH CLOUD KUNJ SARNA!” I heard a voice…..she came! I again moved a bit away frm jeep nd started searching here nd there for her…….nd there she came….running…my smile knew no bound…….she came nd jumped upon me…..I held her up a bit…though it was difficult bcus of the handcuffs…but I was able to manage.

“I knew u would come” I said “I knew u would say tht” she said… Ahaaa….my girl! “Promise me u will wait for me” I said childishly “first promise me u will not date any girl in tht jail” she spoke making me laugh. “Promise” I said

“I will try not to make a boyfriend…. Aftr all there is a lot of demand of mine” she said to which I Gave her glares. “Accha baba…I promise …the day u will put yr first step out of the jail…u will see me” she said nd pecked my lips. It ws then when we heard clapping sounds…… In those clapping sound I could see my parents….twinkle’s bro clapping too…. How does she manage to convince every1? I thought….arre bcus she is kunj sarna’s girl…my heart replied.
I lend her down but she was not ready to leave me. “Mam….we r getting late” one of the constables told. No! I want to stay wid her…….as soon as tht constable told her….she tightened her grip more. “Kunj I also want to cm” she said making me laugh at her childishness.

Just then uv came “twinki….cm on leave him” he said gently separating her frm me. “No Bhai” she said nd I felt my shirt wet….was she crying? “Hey twinkle…..look at me” I said cupping her face making her look at me. “Don’t u ever do this” I warned clearing her eyes. The constables started pulling me but my heart was not willing to go…….it was scared…wht if she cried again. “No no…pls don’t hurt him m leaving him” she said to them. I saw uv signing them to leave me. I saw twinkle glaring uv. Uv too saw it…we both were clueless…..finally uv spoke “wht r u up to…..aaaah…ouch!” He screamed when she punched him on stomach ? “now wht was tht for?” He asked wincing in pain. “I m thinking to murder u up so tht I can also go to jail with kunj” she spoke making all of us laugh.

“Hey mera baccha…. Take care okay” I said planting a kiss on her forehead when the constables again started pulling me. I sat in the jeep….but my eyes were still on Twinkle….she was not crying…. M glad!

#aftr 2 years 6 months

“Yr punishment is over” a constable said opening my cell. Nd I was already jumping in happiness….. Finally I will get to see her…I quickly moved out of my cell. They showed me the way out….ya…I was being released 6 months early bcus of my good nature in jail….as soon as I stepped out I felt the sun on me…making me close my eyes for a while. As soon as I closed my eyes I felt those soft lips on mine…tht similar touch…..I smiled in between our kiss. “Arre arre be slow” I said wen I found her eating my lips hungrily. “Aah” I screamed when she punched me …..still on leaving the kiss. I wanted too see her…but my eyes were closed…..finally she pulled apart. I gently opened my eyes. SAME! My heart spoke when I saw her…she was all same….her eyes…her flaws…her glow….her sparkle….everything was same.

“I missed u” she said hugging me. “I missed u too” I said pulling her up nd rotating her.

The end …….

So guys on a serious note…if a smile Crept on yr face aftr reading this epi then only comment otherwise its OK. Bcus I m not in a condition to listen anymore bashings.

I was a bit disappointed bcus of the last post’s response I think u guys didn’t liked it much…sorry for tht….u guys were continuously bashing kunj nd it was like there were more bashings on him rather than appreciating me. I didn’t wanted to tell u but still m telling u

It took me almost 14 days to write this whole os I was able to complete it only bcus I thought tht it will entertain u guys but I m wrong nd as far as mine nd Krystal’s collaborated ff is concerned I m not continuing it….not aftr last tyms response for sure nd m thinking to wind up my ff too

As m not getting comments frm those people whom I expected to comment. So its better I don’t write it nd put all my concentration in studies. M sorry guys.

So u might take it as my last piece of writing.

Guys pls do tell how was the os ….PLSSSSS!

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  1. This was so beautiful…just loved it???

  2. Anam_sidhant

    Heya Ritzi,don’t go through a heartbreak girl.
    Sorry for not commenting on previous 1 shot,was not available on telly updates that time.
    But this was the best os I have read so far!
    You nailed each and every emotion.
    I truly loved it!


  3. er its really too good.I always want to see my twinj together.Ur os is so heart touching. their love💝💝💝……forever …😊

  4. Sohi

    Hey ritzi how dare you to say like that
    You are not going to end any thing ok
    Iam warning you
    You can’t snatch my happiness after seeing any of your writing on tu ok
    Iam really very sorry for bashing kunj In previous shot
    And also sorry for hurting you
    Please please please don’t this to me and us
    I had always eagerly waited for your os ss and ff plz don’t stop this wait please iam requesting you
    Plz yaar don’t do this
    And yes this shot has definitely brought happy smile on my face
    And want to like this after reading your other writings too
    Plz come back soon with your both ss and ff plz iam waiting
    Do continue

  5. Ria

    Hey Ritzi, that was a really nice story. ?
    Sorry for not commenting on the previous part.

  6. er it’s really too good.I always want to see my twinj together. ur is so heart touching. their love……

  7. it’s really too good. loved it.

  8. I just loved this one ritzy

  9. Kruti

    Hey Ritzi d OS was just another brilliant piece of writing from u….I legit loved it…….the story….the way u brought it out everything was just so amazing???

    Nd spcly that scene when Twinkle enters in nd Kunj without thinking abt police arresting him……he was still adoring her beauty…..that was indeed very cute nd adorable

    Check your dm on insta

    Loads of love?

  10. Soumyad

    It was so heart touching.. Loved it..

  11. The episode was really awesome, good, emotions, romantic
    Please iam very sorry for bashing kunj
    And iam saying sorry by holding my ears to hurt u
    Plz don’t do this to us
    Iam in severe fever then also saying sorry ? plz don’t end your ff and it’s my wish and request
    I hope u will fullfil the wish of a patient
    Plz iam eagerly waiting for the ss and ff
    Do continue
    And once again sorry ?

  12. Ritzi…… Darling!!!!!!!!! I luv u. I luv u….. I luv u…. Muahhhhhhhh,, u made my day……

    Luv a lots.. ?????????????????????????

    Epi was fabulous, amazing n what not??!!!???

  13. Amazing os ritzi I loved it

  14. Presha

    Hey ritzi its awesome yaar dont be sad yaar u nailed it yaar…
    I m fan of ur writing do nt end ur ff plnd dont be sad ok
    Lots of love take care byee

    Plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz
    Plz Don’t say like that it’s ur LAST PEACE of writing….I want cmnt ur ff U but cudnt but U knw when i m cmnt ur ff in 1st i can’t expressed my happiness ki how much m happy to cmnt ur ff… That was my 1st cmnt and I don’t wanna considered it’s a my last cmnt in ur writing…..
    U Don’t kno ki how much desperately m waiting 4 ur ff….I knw in ur bz schedule u write with so much difficulty 4 us and I mean it… And U expctng ur fav prsn to cmnt in ur writing…. And I knw m not ur expetng cmntr and don’t cmnt good but I will surely cmnt in ur every writing alwys… And I CAN NEVER BASH U……
    Coz I love the way u writing and waiting 4 to read it ….. And when u post ur ff my happiness has no boundary…..
    I can’t praises ur talent coz don’t knw word’s to praise u….coz ur writing r just MASTER PEACE….
    Tum mere fav writer ho yarr…. Aree vai hamare bareme toh socho jo tumhare true writing lover hai….ab mai tumhe kese samjhao bolo…. Tum samne hoti to tumhari per pakad ti ki writing stop mat karo yarr….. Plzzzz try to understand yarr….. And don’t stop ur writing… It’s a humble rqst yarr……
    OK OK…. Now will see if u LOVE US then u won’t stop ur writing and cont it and m sure about it r8 na….. Plzzzz once again think of it….
    And epi ke bare mein mai kya bolu. M always said that ur writing left me awestruck and speechless….. It’s just mind blowing, wonderful, marvelous…. And love to the core…..
    Now plzz plzz think of it once again and cont ur writing and post it soon….. I will be eagerly waiting 4 ur ff….rmmbr that….
    Plz stay away of this bashers and keep smiling always….. Love you…!!!!

  16. Sohi

    Hey ritzi see all are saying sorry and want to read your writings too
    Well kunj said in previous shot that he didn’t have bath for 3 day
    So my question is till now also he didn’t had bath?
    Plz once again sorry
    Do continue

    1. Ritzi

      Hehe sohi yr question literally made me laugh…..actually I had not thought to this extent but if u r asking then he had his bath in jail’s bathroom

      1. Sohi

        Anything for you my dear you know what for the first time when I started reading telly updates the first writing I read was your ff “it was love that brought them together” from that time you have a special place in my mind and heart ♥ hope u will come back for your this fan

  17. O my god!!! Only wrd cmng right nw in my mind iS AWESOME… yss even i ws bashng kunj first bt this one chnged my mind luvvvd it to the core
    Plzz don ‘t stp writing i jst luv all ur writngs
    Nd yhh i am a silent reader thought to tlll u luv u plz cme bck wth a new story

  18. Purnima.agrawal30

    awesome amazing fabulous marvelous os….

  19. Twinjfan.tamanna

    hiya ritzi,
    what do u think of yourself… you think that I’ll say anything and all will follow… then your wrong because teri yeh frnd tera picha nahi chodegi… and how can u think that I will stop ur ff… dare u stop my one of fav ff written by my one of fav writer…
    this os tho I’ll never forget… how can I its so beautifully… and the way its written is amazing but I m angry on u… koi nai I know hw it feels when u write it from heart and u get less comments… maine mature content kitni mushkil se likha halat kharab hogai thi lekin I got only 15 comments… hw would I have felt…
    this part was emotional, romantic, cute etc (end of thinking capacity) it was all rounder shot…I loved every bit of it

    plz don’t stop ur ff at least if u think me as ir frmd… plz I love your ff…
    post ur ff soon..

    with love,
    Urs Tamanna

  20. Hey ritiz,
    That’s really not fair.How can u say so easily that it’s the last piece of ur writing.Don’t u dare stop writing.N what did u mean only cmt if a smile crept on ur face.What do u mean a single smile.I was totally blushing.At many points smile came on my face.I really have become a fan of ur writing.I really luved it.Firstly u made me go crazy for ur writing in ur ff as well as os then u say that it’s the last piece.That’s totally unfair.I am telling the truth I am in love with ur writing.I totally agree that I cmt very rarely on ur ffs n os coz of my hectic schedule n I am really very sorry for that.Pls pls pls do write more.

    I am just speechless.It’s too gud.How can u write so well.Their kiss… n the way kunj accepted his crime for saving twinkle… the way twinkle went to see kunj in jail… the way u described twinkle’s feeling was awesome amazing fab.Luved it to the core.Luking forward for more.

    Lots of luv,

  21. Hey Ritzi I completely disagree from you on this point …… We were not bashing kunjjj or you…..dear you Os was fantaaaasticc?????????… …….don’t feel sad I luved your Os genuinely?…….and post your other writings soon.

  22. Amazing

  23. Meethi

    He was fabulous..and d way u wrote it was fabulous..pls do keep writing?

  24. Chiku

    That was amazing ???lovely. Loved it. It’s amazing. Just amazing.
    Plzzzz dont stop ur ff and collab with krystal. I am waiting eagerly for both of the ffs. I am waiting and i mean it. U r amazing.
    I cnnot write long comment bcz i am down with high fever…hope h understand ?
    Post ur ff sooonnnnnnn… i am waiting ???

  25. Ramya

    Hey ritzi
    It’s awesome amazing
    N I’m really so sry yr I said kunj was not gud
    Bcoz at dat time I didn’t liked his character it doesn’t means I hate it infact I loved it
    N u know when I read ur first part I was waiting eagerly impatiently Sachi much i I swear
    I loved it soooooo mmuuucchhjjj
    Pllsssssssss don’t end it plssssssdsd my dear dearie
    N really I’m sry I never wanted to hrt u I just want to say dat at first I hate kunj character
    But today I just loved it d way he changed fr twinkle n d way he asked everyone I mean lawyer to don’t play dat video
    Srsly I loved it A lot
    N really hw u wrote dis many days if I were in ur place I think I have have never completed it
    Plsssssssssdsddd don’t end ur ff
    Love u keep smiling

  26. SidMinTwiNj

    Hey ritzi
    Amazing awesome fabulous fantastic superb mind blowing and what not OS… I so loved when Kunj said not to show the video as he dint want his Twinkle’s reputation to be at staked…
    Ritzi plz dont say this is ur last piece of writing… I so much love ur writings it was love that bought them together was one of my fav ffs and this is when the feelings sinks in is one of my fav ffs too… I always enjoy ur writings so much… U r one of my fav ff writers… I always wait like hell for ur ff… The way you write sizzling hot romance tho???? I always long for TwiNj romance and only in ur writings I get to read it and thank you so much for it… Plzzzzz dont stop writing plzzzzzzzzz…
    Desperately waiting for ur ff… Try to post as soon as possible…


  27. I am much of a kumkum bhagya fan but ur. Os was the highlight of my day every time u posted.that is how great your os was

  28. Wow ritiz it was really an amazing piece.I luved it.Post the next one soon.Will be waiting?

  29. SidMin

    Hey I really loved your os it was truly amazing 14 long days … a lot of time but it was really worth it 🙂
    An awesome piece of writing thought presented and written so beautifully ….
    Love you 🙂 Keep writing 🙂

  30. Yashaswi Shrivastava

    Hey Ritzi,this one brought a biggg smile on my face.I haven’t commented on any piece ever. I never even thought that I would ever comment but after reading ur last note,I just couldn’t stop my fingers to do so.just don’t stop plzz

  31. shreyashi [new person to tu family]

    love u ritzi it was just awesome mindblowing i m speechles love u

  32. Aanya_pandey

    Atlast twinj were together i was wandering how will twinj be one at d end.. n u did it in ur style..
    Jst loved d way kunj accepted is fault in court room to save his love’s respect.. n d way twinkle went to meet him in jail.. that ws really fab.. how he jst knew wat his girl is thinking.. n many more things that wwmere jst way too good.. but bht zyada bada comment ho jana h agr pura likha to.. bcoz.. this part itself ws soo good.. all d line n all were splendid.. n yeah that dialog of twinkle “MAKE SURE U DONT FALL FRM THE NINTH CLOUD KUNJ SARNA!”
    It made me smile endlessly yrr.. exams ki saari tensn khtm ho gyi meri.. saari neend bhag gyi ye part padh kr to????

  33. SidVee_Yashvee

    Heya, this update was mind blowing ???.. and it definitely brought 440 volt smiles on my face.. n how dare you to say ke this is your last piece of writing??.. dear I love your writings very much and I loved this os very much.. I didn’t bash kunj.. I had just written that kunj is disgusting here but I loved ur story.. I never bash anyone.. and I’m still waiting for your ff.. Plz don’t end it okay.. Plz plz plz.. this has been one of the best os so far.. the way kunj stopped from showing the video in the court clearly proved that he loves Twinkle.. and the ending was beautifully written.. loved it.. will be waiting for ur ff.. plz continue ot okay? ❤❤

  34. SidMin23

    This is going to be my one of favorite os and if is possible than do make into ff and I love how u show the care side of kunj that he don’t want them to see the video of him and twinkle and the emotional throw twinkle was nice and I love how they handle kunj family’s and I love each and everything about this os and do make if it’s possible to convert into ff love it

  35. Purvi128

    Noooooooooo … plss don’t do this … don’t stop writing .. don’t stop ur ff …. and this os was amazing …. this is now my favorite os …. u knw …. plsss sorry for not commenting on previous part … ritzi u knw na …. i love ur writing … plsss don’t do this …. and about this ff .. it was amazing .., yrr .. ya i was smiling reading that … a huge smile …. plss dekh baat maan … don’t stop writing yrr … i will die wothout ur ff …. plsssshhhhhhh …

    Love u loads ❤❤❤

  36. Hey ritzi
    Sry fr the late cmmnt
    Just one question from my side
    For the bashers you decided nt yo continue yr writings
    Then for the all who loved ye os cnt u rethink abt yr decision
    Its a humble request frm n all the lovers of yr os n ff plz don’t stop writing
    If u consider me as a friend plz plz plz rethink abt yr decision
    Biee tc

  37. Hey ritiz,
    That was amazing yaar.
    14 long days to write this os…wow but I must agree it is one of the best writing.Pls a request of a silent reader pls don’t stop writing it’s really too gud yaar.I wanna read more of ur creations.N pls don’t end ur ff.It’s too gud yaar.

    Loads of love!!!!

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