The Captives – Five Shots ~ Ria (Chapter 5: Last Update)

The Captives – Five Shots
Chapter 5: Last Update

A/N: Thank you to everyone who commented previously on this story. You people have always managed to make me smile and make this journey although a really small one memorable yet again. Well, I do feel a bit nostalgic thinking about no FFs right at the moment, but I assure you all to come back if I’ve an idea.

In case if someone missed the previous chapter, here’s the link below:

http://www.tellyupdates.com/captives-five-shots-ria-chapter-4/
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Two weeks had passed away since the incident at godown. Mahi and Kunj had been admitted to a hospital immediately and were treated for about a week. The families rejoiced upon knowing that their two children, Mahi and Kunj had been alive since the past two years. They rushed to the hospital when Twinkle let them know everything that had been happening since the last two years.

Yuvraj was admitted in the hospital as well for taking out the bullet. He was left within a day as the injuries caused were minor and it could be treated with unprofessional aid as well. Yuvraj had asked for forgiveness from both the families who had been considering him to be the mastermind of all the plans. The families forgave him on learning about everything that he had done for Twinkle, Kunj and especially Mahi. They were happy upon the fact that Mahi had chosen him as her better half because they couldn’t have expected anyone else to be better.

Anita Luthra had been sentenced to life imprisonment. She had been proven guilty of making an attempt of two murders, kidnapping, bribing the hospital staff, shifting a patient out of the hospital and changing the medical reports. Tanejas and Sarnas were happy upon learning the legal action taken by the court.

Yuvraj did feel bad for his mother, Anita Luthra, but he admitted that his mother was the one who was at fault and she deserved the actions that had been taken against her. He broke all the ties with his mother and told her not to face him ever again. Anita Luthra pleaded him to listen to her for once telling him that she could justify herself, but Yuvraj was least interested in her explanations and asked the police constables to take her away from the front of his eyes before he would lose his control and end up doing something which might lead to a worse death. Anita Luthra being disowned by her only son painfully walked away from there with the police constables and got into the police jeep.

Kunj and Mahi had been grandly welcomed to Sarna and Taneja mansion respectively. Yuvraj stood behind witnessing their welcoming ceremonies and later walked towards the Lauthra mansion to provide himself a shelter. The Sarnas immediately stopped him and asked him to stay with them. They apologised for the mistakes they had committed in the last two years and seeked a chance to rectify them. Yuvraj smiled and asked them not to let their past affect the present which had the hopes of living a peaceful and happy life.

Amidst all this excitement and happiness, everyone had completely forgotten to tell Kunj about his daughter, Kaira. Kunj rejoiced upon learning about his daughter and couldn’t bear his excitement to meet her little daughter being in hospital. Everyone calmed him down and told him that her daughter would be happier if she saw her father fit and fine.

Kunj’s happiness knew no boundaries when he took his little daughter in his arms. He looked at her tiny hands and toes and couldn’t believe the fact that he had turned a father now. He promised Kaira that he would never let anything happen to her or affect her even if it was at the cost of his life. Twinkle who had been silently observing and enjoying the current scene quickly shut Kunj and asked him not to speak like this ever again. Kunj smiled and engulfed her into a tight hug with their daughter in his arms. He promised never to speak like this ever again making Twinkle smile.

A month later, Yuvraj and Mahi got married following all the rituals and legally too. The couple was very happy thinking that their dream which had seemed next to impossible had finally come true. They were married on their parents’ will and nothing could’ve been better than this. The elders showered their blessings on the couple for a happy, married life and wished them luck for the this new phase of their life. Mahi and Yuvraj thanked all their elders and Yuvraj promised Leela, Mahi and Twinkle’s mother to always keep Mahi safe and happy. What better could’ve a mother asked for her own child!

The day after Mahi and Yuvraj’s marriage, the day of their reception, Twinkle had been trying out different suits to see which fits her the best. She asked Kunj who had been busy in the laptop the entire morning to help her out in selecting the outfit that she could probably wear in the evening. Kunj told her to select a dress which ever she likes as her choice was the best. Twinkle smiled at the beginning, but soon she realised that Kunj had just told her so because he wanted to concentrate and complete his work.

Twinkle stood beside Kunj and complained about his casual behaviour towards her. She complained that he hadn’t been giving her the attention she deserved and told that it would’ve been better if she had married someone else in the last two years when all the family members tried forcing her. Kunj immediately closed his laptop and pulled her on to his lap. He told her that she could be either his or no one else’s. Twinkle smiled to herself seeing him jealous and told him that he better not try convincing her because it wouldn’t work. She told him to stay away from her and pushing him she got up.

She walked away, but before she could continue with the rest of her works he cornered her to the wall and asked her what had she been complaining about all this time. Twinkle frowned and told him that’s she was really serious and should’ve married someone else. Kunj kissed her cheeks and before she could speak anything he kissed her. Twinkle responded back with equal passion and the two of them pulled back after a while. Kunj pulled her closer to himself making her smile and the two of them intently looked at each other. ‘You’re the captive of my heart’, was everything he expressed which made her blush and both of them hugged each other tightly to never let the other one go.

• • • • •

Regards,
Ria

67 comments

  1. Maria

    |Registered Member

    Wow! Superb! This was just amazing. I loved it thoroughly! Seriously this was brilliant and I loved it to the core. But sad that this was the last one. Will wait for ‘Our Dark Past Love’. So please post it soon. And do read my Twinj os named ‘Our Rain Confession’

    And come up with something else soon. Will wait for it!

    With Love <3

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Maria,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad that you liked this story. Well, as you know ‘Our Dark Past Love’ has been discontinued as a FF, but I’m trying to cover up the story in a series of two/three shots’.

      Also, if time permits, ill come up with something new.

      Love you back❤

  2. SarahKhan

    |Registered Member

    Ria. Wow. Like seriously this was way too amazing! You’re such a perfectionist I swear. I wrote the same on your previous ff too I guess, but I really mean it. Pls come back soon. Your ffs are really fun to read. If possible, please continue with your”I Love You Season 2″. Or please write any ffs! God bless!

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Sarah,
      Thank you so much dear! I’m glad you liked this story. Haha.. a lot too much if appreciation, isn’t it? Well, frankly I don’t write that good too, but thank you anyway!

      If time permits, I’ll surely come back with another story. May be a bit earlier than what I expected🙈

      Regards,
      Ria

  3. Chiku

    |Registered Member

    Wowwwwww!!!!!!!!its just superb man😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘ur amazing. Lovely. It was just amazing. Loved it to the core. I seriously thought it to the actual story of tei🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈
    So u ended it. Wish we could have got a chance to read some twinj romance and their moments with their daughter but never mind😏
    Loved it
    Love u😘

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Chiku,
      Thank you so much dearie! I’m glad you liked this story. I’m extremely sorry for not including a good lot of twinj romance plus, twinj and their daughter moments. So sorry.

      Also, this was actually a thought how I wished TEI could’ve ended. May be they could’ve just dragged upon the track a little too much and shown everything in specific which I didn’t do so, yeah.

      Love you back❤

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Sushmitha,
      Thank you so much dear! I’m glad you liked this story. If time permits, I’ll surely try come back soon. I guess it’ll be a bit too earlier than what I expected so, may be stay tuned?! Haha..

      Love you back❤

  4. Ramya

    |Registered Member

    Ria it’s awesome u gave dis ff such a lovely n happy ending n I loved it to core n I’m so happy dat everything was sorted n all r happy

    N plsss do come other ff
    Loved it n love u

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Ramya,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked this story. The story had to end on a good note, isn’t it? The evil can’t win over the good, right?

      If time permits, I’ll try coming back with another FF. Moreover, it might be earlier than what I expected so, let’s see.

      Love you back❤

  5. Ayu

    |Registered Member

    Riaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!
    Maan gyi yaar! Tooo good! Twinj romance though!👌
    I loved each and every bit of these shots…it was a short yet beautiful journey…i am so glad that finally it was a happy ending!!!!
    Thank u for such a. Beautiful piece of writing!!! I’ll be impatiently awaiting your next🙈❤️

    • Ria

      |Author

      He Ayu,
      Thank you so much darling! I’m glad you liked this short story. This was indeed a really short journey, but you all made it extra special. As usual. It had to end on a good note. How can the evil win over the good!

      I’ll try coming back soon and probably with a FF because I already find some part of my life missing without a FF.

      Regards,
      Ria

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey di,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the story. Di, don’t leave TU nah.

      Well, I’ll try coming back soon because I already feel something from my life missing without a FF. So, let’s see.

      Regards,
      Ria

  6. Manvi

    😍😍😍 awww the episode wass awesome…….. well it feels like only yesterday u started it and today u r finishing it😯😯….. but all five shots were extra ordinary…….
    😢😢 i will misssss u ……..😔😔😔😔

    But try to make a huge comeback as soon as possible☺ 💕💕💕

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Manvi,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the story. Well, it was a really short journey, but you all made it extra special and worth remembering. As usual.

      Aww..I’ll miss you too.

      I’ll try coming back soon because I already feel something missing in my life without a FF and probably, it would be earlier than what I had hoped so, let’s see.

      Regards,
      Ria

    • Ria

      |Author

      Thank you so much Aaliya! I’m glad you liked the story. Well, I really don’t know who’s the author of that FF. I’m sorry.

      Regards,
      Ria

  7. Kritika14

    |Registered Member

    Yo idiot,
    Honestly speaking, I didn’t realize that this has actually come to an end! Anyway, speaking of it … I really loved these 5 shots a lot. They were quite mysterious initially but of course, I’m a mastermind so I guess it all 😂 but still it always managed to keep me into it which is certainly the reason why I love your writings so much!

    Well, I hope that the surprise that you had planned sometime ago comes into action (hoping you to understand what I mean cause you are so dumb after all 😂) Will really be waiting for it!

    Lastly, this new attempt of yours was fab! I really appreciate it!

    Love you! x 💕

    • Ria

      |Author

      Heya stupid,
      Firstly, remember I’m gonna block you soon. How dare you ignore me huh?

      Anyway, thank you for your beautiful comment! I’m glad you liked the story. You! Mastermind! Are you kidding me?😂 Haha..Okay, I don’t live my writings much so, never mind.

      Moreover, regarding the surprise, you already know it all so, erm..stay tuned😂 Plus, you’re even more dumb so, don’t call me dumb😉😝

      Thank you for so much appreciation!😂

      I love myself too so, never mind!😝

      Okay, okay, I’m not copying. I love you too baby!!💕

  8. Zuha Fatima

    |Registered Member

    This broke all the boundaries of perfections…Yes indeed it did…These shots were more than perfect 🙂 Fortunately got some time to read this stupendous piece of creativity!

    Word are falling short to describe this magnificent effort of yours 🙂 Indeed these shots will be captivated in my mind till you break the records of writings (as always) once again 🙂

    Hoping to see you back with more such work!

    Keep smiling 🙂 Always 🙂

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Zuha,
      Thank you so much dear! I’m glad you liked this story.

      Haha..record breaking? Seriously? I’ll try coming back with something soon because I already something essential from my life without an FF. Moreover, it might end up being a bit earlier than I what I had initially expected.

      Regards,
      Ria

  9. SidVee_Yashvee

    |Registered Member

    Hy Ria! I’m sorry for not commenting on ur previous episode.. Actually exams r coming up and I’m not getting time to read ffs.. but I saw that this is ur last update so I read both the episodes now.. both episodes were amazing.. And TwiNj’s little not jhok in thus episode was so cute.. loved it.. am going to miss this ss so much.. Hope to see you back soon with another ff 🙂

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Yashvee,
      Thank you so much dear! I’m glad you liked this story. Well, studies are really update and please don’t be sorry. I do understand. Hehe… I’m happy you liked their little nok-jhok. I’ll try coming back with an FF soon because I already feel an essential part of my life missing without it. Moreover, I might end up being a bit earlier than what I had initially expected.

      Regards,
      Ria

  10. Foreverfanoftwinj

    |Registered Member

    Hiiiiiiiiiiii BQ
    See I m commenting
    Tere is capitives ne mujhe captive kr diya
    MATLAB hadd hai
    Itna accha kyu likha haan
    And agar likha bhi toh mujhe bataya kyu nhi
    Veli bad
    But ab likh hi diya hai
    So fr u I just have
    Muahhhhhhhhhhhh
    U seriously made me ur captive 😍😍😍

    • Ria

      |Author

      Heya DQ,
      Thank you so so much! I’m glad you liked this story. Pata hai kya? Tere comment ne mujhe sabse zyada khush kiya. Ek toh aap silent reader hain aur aap ne comment kiya!! Yay!! Aur itna acha laga kya? Mujhe toh nahi laga. Anyway, thank you!!

      Jaa, ijazat dedi. Chura le Apne ko aur jee le apni zindagi… Isshh.. ki filmy!!😂😝

      Love you too💕

  11. TwinjSidMin

    |Registered Member

    Hey ria
    This five shots were really so amazing…loved it to the core…TwiNj romance tho 😍😍❤❤🙈🙈 I so loved Kunj’s happiness when he got to know about his daughter and the way he took her in his arms…

    Ria will miss you so much…plzzzzzzzz do come up with new ff soon…if get some ideas for I love you TwiNj journey comeback plzzzzzzzz do continue it…

    #XOXO 😘😘❤❤

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey di,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the story. Haha.. I really thought that the way I wrote Kunj’s happiness wasn’t portrayed pretty well, but when you all liked it, I can’t ask for anymore.

      Moreover, I might end up coming back with something pretty soon, earlier than what I’d guessed so, let’s see. “I Love You” (Comeback) doesn’t seem to have any scope. Just forget about the new one. It was over those 50 chapters. Just that.

      Love you back💕

  12. Ramya

    |Registered Member

    Hi ria it was awesome amazing
    I’m happy dat twinj have United I’m so happy dat it had happy ending
    Loved it

  13. Sohi

    |Registered Member

    Yaar abhi tho ye ss shuru hua tha abhi khatam this is not fair i want read more please come back with new story I am waiting for you eagerly bye and take care

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Sohi,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the story. Well, this was indeed a pretty short story, but you all still made it worth remembering.

      I’ll try coming back with something soon. Moreover, I guess it might be earlier than what I’d initially guessed so, let’s see.

      Regards,
      Ria

  14. SidMin

    |Registered Member

    Loved it 🙂 Jj
    It was awesome the lines everything 🙂 Hope you start something new soon 🙂 Love you 🙂 Take care 🙂

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey SidMin,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the story. Well, I’ll surely try coming back soon and may be earlier than what I’d initially expected so, let’s see.

      Love you back💕

  15. Ramya

    |Registered Member

    Hi ria it was awesome amazing fabulous I’m happy dat twinj have United I’m so happy dat it had happy ending
    So sry fr late
    Maine bohat baar likha hai post hi nahi hua

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey di,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked this story. I’ll surely try coming back soon at the earliest. Hopefully it’ll be a bit earlier than what I had initially supposed so, let’s see.

      Regards,
      Ria

  16. Kruti

    |Registered Member

    Hey Ria

    The whole Ss was amazing…..nd suspence at a point of time…..d end was cute…..spcly that Kunj nd his daughter wala part was so sweet…..Loved it

    I still hope u continue writing

    Loads of love 💕💕😘

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Kruti,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the story. Well, the end was long planned and I really wanted to end it this way with Kunj telling Twinkle that she was already captivated. Haha.. Also, for the father-daughter scene, I really thought I wasn’t able to portray the happiness, but since you all liked it, I’m happy.

      About writing again, I’ll try coming back soon.

      Love you back💕

  17. Simiyy

    |Registered Member

    Hey Ria
    It was written in such a beautiful way
    You have ended it so quickly
    Please come up with another ss or write other os please
    Take Care and good luck
    Loads of love 💙💜💙

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Simiyy,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked this story. Well, it surely did end quickly, but you people made it an incredible journey yet again.

      I’ll surely coming back at the earliest and hopefully, a bit earlier than what I had initially expected so, let’s see.

      Love you back💕

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Akriti,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the story. Well, I’ll try coming back soon with something else because I already feel an urge to write more. Also, it might be a bit earlier than what I had expected so, let’s see.

      Hoping you to come back soon too😀

      Regards,
      Ria

  18. Adya

    |Registered Member

    Hii di !!
    Well I understood , no more episode of anything ri8 !
    Okh fine I understand but try coming with a new one …
    Now the ss , that was really super…I really Donno how to appreciate you…in which way should I…that’s what is called , driving someone crazy nd speechless…hope to see u with a new one…
    Love u…

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Adya,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the story. Well, yeah. No more updates of anything currently, but I might end up coming with something soon because I already feel the urge to write so, let’s see.

      Love you back💕

  19. Sara28

    |Registered Member

    Ria,

    I am sooooooooo sorry for the late comment. I know I have been gone for a while but I just had to read your writing. What do I say, you probably are tired of me calling you amazing. Ok fine lets see….you are marvelous, incredible, stunning, wonderful, fascinating, unbelievable, fantastic, remarkable, magnificent, outstanding, phenomenal….I’m running out of words. These five parts were so powerful and emotional, I just loved it! Still sad tho that you might not be back with another ff for a while. 😢 But the ones you have left me with, I will always remember and love. Love you!❤️

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Sara,
      Thank you so much darling! I’m glad you liked this story. Well, that was a tonne of appreciation and wasn’t much needed because I don’t really deserve it. Anyway, thank you so so much!

      See, I told you, you could ask me for anything, but since you didn’t so, erm.. haha.. I don’t need to write a FF because I really thought you’d ask for it.

      Love you more pretty❤

      • Sara28

        |Registered Member

        Girl, don’t listen to me, I’m crazy. Write that ff!!! When you asked me for something, I didn’t say anything cause I didn’t want to pressure you to write anything cause you seemed busy. But now that you have brought it up, I won’t be leaving you until I get to read your writing again!

      • Ria

        |Author

        No, no, Sara. All such opportunities come for once and since you didn’t ask me for it, it’s over and I’m free. I don’t have anything to write at the moment. Yay!

        Love,
        Ria

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Aanya,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked this story. I’ll try coming back with something else pretty soon because I already feel the urge to write.

      Regards,
      Ria

  20. Maleeha

    |Registered Member

    Hi…!!! I just ended up Reading all the five shots..in a go…and I would only say that….my mere words…couldn’t explain the awesomeness, of these shots, ur writings, ur mind…which cook up so delicious stories….
    U r surely a great writer indeed….and I would love to read more and more from ur side…..besides, I didn’t watched TEI but still….I would love to read more awesome stories of urs…..
    Please don’t drop the plan…of ‘Our Dark Past Love’…..I’m in love with that ff and also with ur writings….. U can take ur time…..if u want….
    Now, coming to these shots…… The idea was very lively and full of suspense and thrills…… I loved the way….twinkle waited for kunj…..all these years……and uv also who changed the……game at the very last moment…… He acted out so smart…… Mahi care towards uv…… Kunj being desperate for meeting his daughter….. And when he met….the lines….were that much awesome that it brought tears in my eyes….. Loved that….. And the way twinkle teased him…..telling him of her plan of second….. Surely was a greatly written……
    I gave all in these five shots….. The power of love, suspense, thriller, a pinch of romance……everything
    U managed each and everything so amazingly…..and it was indeed superbly written……
    Lots of love……❤❤❤

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Maleeha,
      Firstly, a big thank you to you for reading this story even though you aren’t a Twinj fan. Thank you so much for the appreciation dear!

      About ‘Our Dark Past Love’, you already know everything. I’m trying to write a short story like this on that plot. Just hoping that you all would like it. But it would take sometime as I’ve my mocks coming up.

      Well, I’m glad you liked the way I described everything although I was kinda unsure about everything. Now that you all liked all the descriptions, I’m satisfied.

      Love you back💕

  21. Jisha

    |Registered Member

    Fab episode dear… ending was cute.. keep writing whenever u get time…not sure about me being in tu… but still…u have good writing skills… love you dear
    I know I am commenting late… stuck with so many things.. packing n all…

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Jisha di,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the update as well as the end. Di, even if you’re unsure, I feel our love will soon bring you back to the site.

      Di, please don’t be sorry. I do understand your part. Hope you’d a happy and safe journey.

      Loads of love💕

  22. Vipul

    |Registered Member

    Hi Ria, sorry yaar jyada late ho gayi….. well what to say about this ss… it was superhit blockbuster epi…. loved each n every scene of this…. uv’s changed behaviour n his love confession for mahi n twinj scene n the dialoges everything was perfect n heart touching…. but I’m sad it ended… kaash ye ss na hokar ff hota…. well I hope you’ll come back with new ff….

    Love you…. take care

    “Shalini/Neha”

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Neha di,
      Thank you so much! I’m really glad that you liked this story and all the scenes. I couldn’t wished for anything else! Well, I’ll try coming back with a FF soon because I already have an urge to write something pretty soon so, let’s see.

      Love you back💕

  23. Baby

    |Registered Member

    ohhhhhhhhhhhh god ria………………..
    wat u know dis is excitment yr……..
    i mean speechless ohhhh god yr it was beautiful damn goodness
    it was amazing story one could imagine like i am stunned loved d story soooooooo much
    i wis it would hv been d continuing stry if tei had to go off air……
    loved it 2 core awesome fabulous dear… 😀
    a bit sad it ended bt srsly sooo beautifully portrayed dat it seemed to me i was watching tei aftr months aftr my kunj’s death.. 😀
    lov u lods♥♥♥

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Baby,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked this story. Well, frankly, this story was actually a thought how I’d wished TEI could’ve ended, bhmut the idea struck my mind a bit late. Anyway, I’m happy that you enjoyed the story.

      Love you back💕

  24. Meeta

    |Registered Member

    Riaaaaa
    I’m sorry.
    I’m late.
    Really, u ended these shots without me.
    Never mind.
    U know the reason for me being late, Right?
    Whatever.
    Come back with something soon.
    I’ll be waiting.
    Loves..

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Meeta,
      Darling, please don’t be so sorry. I know why you’re late and I completely understand your part. I hope you enjoyed this story😀

      I’ll try coming back with something soon because I already feel like writing something and presenting it before you all so, let’s see.

      Love you back💕

  25. Ria

    |Author

    Hey guys,
    Thank you so much for your constant support and love throughout! I couldn’t have asked for anymore. Moreover, the fact that you all enjoyed this story makes me feel glad. This story was merely thought of how I thought Tashan-E-Ishq could’ve ended. Even though the idea struck me pretty late, but I’m happy you all liked and enjoyed the idea.

    Also, I might end up coming back with another story soon whether an SS or FF and all the credit goes to you all. I couldn’t help thinking about another story seeing your encouraging support guys. Thank you so much for love guys!

    Loads of love,
    Ria

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