The Captives – Five Shots ~ Ria (Chapter 1)

The Captives – Five Shots
Chapter 1

In case if someone missed out on the introduction, here’s the link below:

Intro
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It’d been two years since the incident at Goa had taken place and miseries had taken over everyone’s lives in Sarna and Taneja mansions. They couldn’t believe the fact that Kunj had left all of them and he wasn’t with them anymore. Usha had a few minor heart attacks after the incident and she was under the utmost care. She wasn’t allowed near the fire but, she was adamant to help out the people of the house and also, it would help her to keep herself away from Kunj’s thoughts.

Twinkle who had gone under a great shock on learning about Kunj’s demise was now normal but, she didn’t give up her hopes of Kunj returning in her life. She always hoped that Kunj was alive and it was just a matter of few days for which Kunj was away from them. She believed it to be a dark phase of their life which would get over quite soon. She still dressed up as a married woman with the vermilion on her forehead and the mangalsutra around her neck.

The night before this incident had taken place, the couple had the most wonderful night of their married life. They had consummated their marriage and after two months Twinkle had learnt about her pregnancy. The family members were happy knowing the news and considered the child to be the last symbol which would always keep Kunj alive in their memories. During the fourth month of her pregnancy, the doctor had advised the family to take care of Twinkle who was going into depression because of Kunj’s death.

At this time, Mahi had come back to India and helped Twinkle forget her sorrows and get her out of depression. She stayed with her the entire while and after five months Twinkle delivered a healthy baby girl whom they named Kaira. The family was very happy at the moment but, happiness doesn’t stay in one’s life for a long time. A few days later, Mahi met with an accident and the family immediately rushed her to the hospital. She was quickly admitted and the operation began. After a matter of few hours, the doctors had conveyed that Mahi was safe. But, unfortunately an hour later the family was informed about her death.

The families couldn’t believe the news and had broken down on learning about her death. Leela and RT had decided to relocate and move to London so that the memories of Kunj and Mahi didn’t affect them but, Twinkle convinced them asking them not to run away from the situation and rather face it. She asked them to think about her as well as she needed their support and love to stay strong and handle the Sarna family who had completely broken down after Kunj’s demise.

A day later, the families decided to throw Yuvraj outside the house as they considered him solely responsible for Mahi’s death. They had discussed the matter for quite a long time the previous evening and had concluded that it was Yuvraj who was behind Mahi’s accident of falling down the stairs. They supposed Yuvraj to spill oil or something on the stairs which could’ve made her slip and fall down because he had previously made an attempt to kill her. Yuvraj denied the fact and told the family about the love that he had developed towards Mahi in the past few months but, the Tanejas and Sarnas had their own mindsets and had warned him to leave or else, they’d be handing him to the police.

Anita Luthra, Kunj’s murderer was still set free as there wasn’t any evidence against her which could prove her the culprit. The Tanejas and Sarnas had been continuously trying to find out clues against her and hand her over to the police. On the other hand, she being oblivious of everything had captivated two people whom she believed to be her most important players who could save her from getting arrested by the police. The captives had been trying their level best to get out from her captive but, seemed like it wasn’t so easy and they had been struggling for almost two years now.

So, who are the captives and why are they held captive? Is there any motive of captivating them? If yes, then what is the reason behind all this which separates these two captives from their families?

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Hello, everyone! Thank you for all your comments and support. I tried replying to all your comments and hope I’ve not missed out on anyone. I’m extremely sorry if I did.

Please do drop down your thoughts below. I’d be eagerly waiting whether you liked my way of writing or not! If not, I’ll be writing the next chapters in my previous style. Suggestions and criticisms are always as they’ll help me improve but, no abusive language.

Best regards,
Ria

55 comments

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Sohi,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the plot. Well, Yuvi is alone. He ain’t married to Twinkle. He had started loving Mahi over the time as stated above.πŸ˜€

  1. Anam_sidhant

    |Registered Member

    Hey ria, U know what?! I m shocked man!
    I mean how can u write so well?😳
    I don’t like ur writing, in fact I love ur writing😍
    I usually wait for u to upload ur ff❀
    Its ‘mind blowing’πŸ’“
    Post soon😘

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Anam_sidhant,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked this.

      Well, I never expected you all will be liking this writing style of mine as I guess you all are to my usual writing styles. Anyway, seriously? You wait for my FFs to get updated? It means so much to me. Thank you so so much, dear!

      I’m working upon the next one. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Simiyy,
      Thank you so much, dear! I’m glad you liked this.

      Well, the second part of your OS, I read it but, probably didn’t comment. Extremely sorry for that but, the story was too good. Great work!

      I’m working upon the next one. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  2. Manvi

    Awesome………….. amazingggg episode😊😊☺….
    u surely deserve a huge round of applause for writing sooo wellπŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Manvi,
      Thank you so much, dear! I’m glad you liked this. Aww.. it really means a lot. Thank you so so much!

      Loads of love.❀

  3. Ramya

    |Registered Member

    Awesome ria loved it
    Ur writing skills r mind blowing loved it n I’m in dis ff twinkle have a child nt like dat serial n I hope kunj is also alive loved it to core
    Plss asap

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Ramya,
      Thank you so much, dear! I’m glad you liked this. Well, I know. I was extremely sad upon learning that Twinkle lost Kunj’s child in the show.😒 Anyway, as the story unravels you’ll find out things and also a special note from my side at the end of the story letting you know what I felt about this story.

      By the way, I’m working upon the next one. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  4. Monica

    |Registered Member

    Idiot,
    I swear this is one of the best descriptions I’ve read. It was just so amazing! Everything you’ve described was just perfect, I could imagine everything in my head. Besides, I love this style of your writing. It’s just so new and appealing to me. Go on with this cause I love this change! Hope you post soon and don’t keep me waiting, unlike how I make you wait πŸ˜‚

    Moreover, this “captive” word has got me like freaking out! It’s like blablahblah captive .. another blahblahblah captive πŸ˜‚ So you better let the names of the captives out soon, okay? πŸ˜‚

    Also, Iloveyou❣️

    • Ria

      |Author

      Heya Stupid,
      Thank you so much, baby!! I’m glad you liked this. Well, never knew you’d be liking this so much that you’d want all my stories to go on like this.πŸ˜‚ You know, it mean a lot to me when a reader can imagine things through my writings. It really means a lot.

      Also, I’ll let you all know the captives soon. Greedy people.😏 Thoda dhairya nahi dhara jaata kya?πŸ˜’πŸ˜‚

      Okay, as you know, I told of posting it today but, didn’t post because I wanted to reply to the comments first and then update it. Moreover, I’m still left with some of it. Anyway, do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀❣😘 (Aur heart nahi hai. Ek tha woh bhi tune chura liya..huh!!😘)

      ~ Your forever idiot.❣

      • Monica

        |Registered Member

        Arrey bhai! If you say so much about the captives toh kis angle se ham dhairya se kaam le? πŸ˜‚ Pehle khud itna bolo and phir hame blame karo? Sahi hai yeh tumhara πŸ˜‚ Okay, this hindi session was shit so don’t judge my hindi okay? But actually, I got a A in my hindi IG’s πŸ˜‚ so my hindi isn’t so bad after all πŸ˜‚πŸ™ˆ

        Anyway, you’ve started being too cheesy these days man, even while chatting πŸ˜‚ Waise toh I know you’re heart is with me πŸ˜‚ but itne se kaam nahi chalega! Stop being kanjoos okay? Free ka maal hai so use it as much as you can and don’t disappoint me, alright? πŸ˜‚

        iloveyou! ❣️
        ~Your stupid πŸ’•

      • Ria

        |Author

        Erm..nahi, free ka toh hai but, you know na. I AM LAZY😝 Moreover, dhairya dharo thoda. I’ll try updating tomorrow may be. Idk. Let’s see.

  5. Zuha Fatima

    |Registered Member

    I have 2 feelings right now…First is to tightly hug you for the fact that this writing is AMAZING! But the next moment I wanna slap you tight for asking, whether we liked the way of your writing or not? Seriously?? Chalo enough of my gussa … Now jump over to tareefein πŸ™‚ You wrote it so beautifully that I want to read the next part now only πŸ™‚ Anyways soon reveal the captives and I feel pity for Yuvi πŸ™ Bechara πŸ™ Anyways love you and post soon πŸ™‚

    Keep smiling πŸ™‚ Always πŸ™‚

    ~Jaan

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Zuha,
      Thank you so much, pretty! I’m glad you liked this.

      Mujhe maarna hai?😒 Okay, fine slap me when you meet me.. atleast we’ll meet then.πŸ˜‚ Well, I really didn’t expect that you all will like this writing style so, urm..yeah.

      Anyway, I’m working upon the next one. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

    • Ria

      |Author

      Heya Rashi,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked this.

      I’m working upon the next one. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  6. Loveleen

    |Registered Member

    What a different n unique plot it is…..I loved it…I guess the two captives r kunj n mahi…bt I ll b waiting to see hw ur story unfolds…

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Loveleen di,
      Thank you so much for this beautiful comment! I’m glad you found the story nice and interesting. Haha..let’s see who the captives are..

      Well, I’m working upon the next one. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  7. Chiku

    |Registered Member

    Wowwwww it’s amazing 😍😍lovely. I really think tei ke makers should have approached u. U r fabulous. I really want tips for writing from u. U are an amazing and a grt writer. Loved it.
    I think the captives are kunjsmd mahi. Maybe i am wrong 😬😬
    Love uπŸ’•πŸ’•
    Post next soon

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Chiku,
      Thank you so much, dear! I’m glad that you liked this story. Haha..Thank you so much for this appreciation but, frankly, it isn’t that good either. Haha..You taking tips from me? You’re obviously better than me.

      Also, got to know that you’ve left writing. I kinda feel sad about it. Please, try convincing your mom and do try writing. But, I won’t force you.

      Well, I’m working upon the next chapter. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  8. Vipul

    |Registered Member

    Riaaaaaaaaaa kya hai ye haann?? tu kaise… matlab kaise likh leti hai tu itna achha haan?? achha ab mujhe ye bata ki tu iss time kahan hai?? mujhe tere paas aakar tere charan kamlon ko chookar tere ashirwad lene hai….. arrey yaar mujhe bhi thoda tere jaisa mind mil jayega…. seriously now I’m thinking that I should learn from u that how to write ff so well….. what say will u give me tution?? no I think I should stop my ff on 2epi only… hai na???

    Anyway I must say ria! u r not only a great writer but you’ve a genius mind…. really u r superb….

    Well coming the epi it was really amazing mindblowing epi…. I just loved it…. it remind me TEI but ya it is defferent from that I mean twinkle has a daughter wow… I hope kunj is also alive… well I’m waiting for ur next epi to see that…. so pls come soon with next epi…

    Waise I wanna hug u tightly but it’s not possible from here so main online de rahi hu tum recieve kar lena ok?? arrey apni badi bahen nahi to kuch bhi samajh kar hi ek jhappi dedo…..

    Ab main chalti hu else u’ll get bore with my bak bak…. par mai jhuth nahi bol rahi hu u r really great writer….

    β™₯Love uβ™₯ n β™₯keep smilingβ™₯
    n post next asap

    “Shalini/Neha”

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Neha di,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked this story. Di, itni tareef mat karo. I’m not that great of a writer. Just an ordinary one and just trying to improve every time. Well, you can PM me anytime but, letting out all my personal info here isn’t a good idea.πŸ˜”

      Anyway, I accepted your hug and even you accept mine. Aur charan chuna and all, sochna bhi mat. You’re elder to me and I won’t let you do it.

      By the way, I’m glad you’re able to reminisced TEI through this story. As the story unravels and comes to an end you’ll get to know a special note from my side.

      Well, I’m working on the next chapter. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  9. Maria

    |Registered Member

    Rha my jaan! You are again back with an amazing story line. I’m really very excited to read the entire plot. This was really awesome and I guess the two captives are Kung and Mahi! Let’s see if I’m right. And one more thing please don’t keep us waiting for a long time so please post the next part very soon.

    Loads of love,
    Maria.

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Maria,
      Thank you so much, darling! I’m glad you liked this story. Let’s see who the captives are. Keep on guessing, I’ll reveal the names soon. I love to keep suspense, you know!!πŸ˜‚ Just kidding. Will reveal everything soon.

      Well, I’m working on the next one. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  10. SidMin

    |Registered Member

    Loved it πŸ™‚ It was too good so Kunj is kept captive with someone else πŸ™‚ Post soon πŸ™‚
    Love you πŸ™‚

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey SidMin,
      Thank you so much, dear! I’m glad you liked the story. Let’s see who the captives are.

      Well, I’m working upon the next one. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  11. Sara28

    |Registered Member

    Hey Ria,

    So sorry, as Monica may have told you, I accidentally blocked you πŸ˜‚ I’m trying to figure out what to do so don’t worry.
    Getting to the chapter, u captivated me throughout the whole chapter. I didn’t know what was coming next and Mahi’s death was a huge plot twist! Is she held captive along with Kunj? So many questions and no answers. Please post soon! Love you!

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Sara,
      Well, urm..yeah. She did tell me. Moreover, I’ve just posted another post on your wall. Try checking it out and let me know, please?

      Anyway, thank you so much, pretty! I’m glad you liked this. I captivated you?! Okay, I’ll let you free on the condition that you’ll back the next time.πŸ˜‚ Didn’t expect that you all would be so shocked with her death but, now that you all are so,.. never mind.πŸ˜‚

      Okay, I’m working on the next one and it shall be posted soon. Do stay tuned.πŸ˜€

      Loads of love.❀

    • SidMin

      |Registered Member

      I can help you unblock Ria πŸ™‚ Its quite simple just click the bell and then click the gear like thing at the top corner your Account would open and then click the option Privacy There you get a list of Blocked users and then you can unblock them The fact is that Even I had blocked Ria to see what happens when you click that button πŸ˜‚

  12. TwinjSidMin

    |Registered Member

    Hey ria the episode is amazingly amazing…loved it to the core…eagerly waiting for next episode…plzzzzzzzz try to post as soon as possible…

    Love you 😘😘

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey di,
      Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked this.
      Well, I’m working upon the next one and it shall be updated soon. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  13. Adya

    |Registered Member

    Hey Ria di, ( hnn hnn I’ll now copy u everyday)
    Well honestly apne mujhe nikalne ko kaha h but u know I can’t control myself from commenting….dil hee ni bharta….

    Cut the crap !!! Well what’s dis hnn …u didn’t reveal the captives , very bad hnn…Bt do tell in the next one…it was such an awesome description..tell me ur address , I’ll come to u nd touch ur feet ..no no sry sry…hug u….heeee

    Nd yeah one thing more !!!!! CONTINUE SOON…. Was that ok???

    Plssssss post soon….nd ur ff also…plssssss di pls..Nd will u like to read my ff ?? Do tell me…
    Love u..

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Adya,
      Bura laga kya tujhe? I was just joking though.πŸ˜”

      Thank you so much, darling! I’m glad you liked this. Well, the captives shall be revealed soon but, may be not in the next chapter itself. Aur hug kar lena, PM mein bata dungi kahan Rehti hoon.❣

      Ff, I guess you already know everything. I’ll be posting the remaining chapters at the earliest and finish it soon. Frankly, I’ve got no time to read ffs at the moment but, if you don’t mind giving me a short summary of the ff, then I’d surely try it out.

      Okay, I’m working upon the next one and it shall be posted soon. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  14. Meeta

    |Registered Member

    Oh My My.
    This is just amazing.
    I’m still trying to get over that you wrote so shot.
    Man., wow.
    This was uhh….Bliss.
    Next one soon.
    Please.

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Meeta,
      Thank you so much, sweetheart! I’m glad you liked this and my way of writing. I really didn’t expect you all to like this.

      Well, I read your nine shots. I couldn’t manage up for a comment but, believe me it was amazing.

      Okay, I’m working upon the next one and it shall be updated soon. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  15. twinj

    Hey Ria,
    Itna acha tum kaise likti ho.Too gud.Awesome yaar but who are this captive.Pls reveal their name.Post soon.

    Lots of luv,
    twinj

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Twinj,
      Thank you so much, dear! I’m glad you liked this. The captives’ names shall be revealed soon.

      Well, I’m working upon the next chapter and it shall be updated soon. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  16. SidVee

    Riaaaaa, where r u? Just tell me, i wanna give u a tight hugggπŸ€—πŸ€—πŸ€—.. what was this yaar.. it’s so amazing.. i love your new way of writing 😍😍😍 you’ve written it beautifully😍😍😍.. mahi’s death was totally shocking.. didn’t expect that.. and u didn’t reveal who the captives are😢😢 I’ll die out of curiosity πŸ˜›πŸ˜› plz post the next part soon ❀❀ love u😘😘

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Sidvee,
      Thank you so much, dear! I’m glad you liked this as well as my writing style. I was pretty nervous about it.

      Well, I didn’t suppose you all will be so shocked with Mahi’s death but, now that you all are so, erm..yeah.. never mind.πŸ˜‚ The captives’ names will be revealed soon.

      I’m working upon the next one and it shall be updated soon. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  17. Ranabulbul

    |Registered Member

    My Ridi is back woow…
    I just loved it yr..too good and aj ka epi kafi emotional tha..but mere pgl dimag me ek bat aari hai…
    Ki Jo captives hain wo kunj and Mahi hai kunki kunj died but there is no proof and Mahi was declared fine but after one hour she died…Anita is free so she may have kept them under her cage so that she can’t destroy tanejas and sarnas and can be save from any legal action….
    Hhehe itna description main likha diya…jaise maine age ki story likhni ho..
    Main or meri lame guesses…
    Bbye di muaaahhhh lots of love reveal the secret soon

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Bulbuliya,
      Kaisi hai bhai? Bohot miss kiya tujhe aur tu finally aayi yahan. Well, thank you so much, dear! I’m glad you liked this.

      Aur ye guesses about the captives are… Keep guessing till I reveal.😜

      Okay, I’m working upon the next chapter and it shall be updated soon. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

  18. Ayu

    |Registered Member

    Ria!!!! That was amazing! Lemme guess…captives have to be kunj and Mahi…right? But then…who is the own responsible for this?? Post soon dear cuz i really wanna know! This one was πŸ‘ŒπŸ‘ŒπŸ‘Œ

    • Ria

      |Author

      Hey Ayu,
      Thank you so much, pretty! I’m glad you liked it. Well, let’s see who are the captives!? Wait for it. It shall be revealed soon.

      Moreover, I’m working upon the next one and it shall be updated soon. Do stay tuned.

      Loads of love.❀

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