Can give me one more chance?? (SwaSan an OS) By Rithika

Hi peeps,
I’m Rithika. I’m new to this page and this is my first OS also, so please be kind enough to give ur views 😃

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Swara was walking through the gates of her new college. Nervousness took over her mind, she wasn’t concentrating on her movement and the result was dashing into Sanskar. As a result Swara fell on top of Sanskar

Swara : (comes to her senses) Uh..sorry..

She said got up from him and went while Sanskar was captivated by her beauty

Sanskar : (monologue) First time in my life I’ve seen God’s perfect creation

He smiles to himself and goes. Soon it was their break time Swara was sitting on the table eating her food while Sanskar came there and sat near her

Sanskar : Can I?
Swara : Hmm
Sanskar : Ur new here?
Swara : Ya. By the way I’m Swara..Swara Bose
Sanskar : Hi, nice to meet u, I’m Sanskar…Sanskar Maheshwari

They shake hands while he was again lost in her. Many days passed by they both realized their love for each other but were scared to confess. Swara was stuck in the conflict of her mind and heart

Mind : Oh shut up u pest, how can our Swara trust this Sanskar, don’t u know many people like this Sanskar use girls like Swara only to satisfy their desires ok
Heart : Oh u shut up u practical rodent, I need a rodenticide over here….can’t u see Sanskar’s love for Swara his eyes huh! Practical idiot!
Mind : Ay u soft hearted idiot….
Heart : (cuts off) For ur information I’m a heart if u don’t know hahaha u need to check ur eyes and get spectacles then u’ll be the first ‘Chashmish Brain’ Hahaahah

The heart keeps laughing

Mind : Hey u shut up
Heart : U pant down

Finally Swara gets irritated by their conflict

Swara : Shut up both now!!!!

They both keep quiet. While on the other side Sanskar was thinking how to propose her

Sanskar : (monologue) Hmm I must think of a beautiful way to propose her….such a way that she’ll..she’ll fall for me. I can’t wait any more if that Sahil proposes her before me I won’t be able to live

He thinks for a while then jumps up in happiness

Sanskar : Yes!!! Yes..yes..yes…..I got an idea! I got an idea!

He dances in joy and then goes to prepare somethings. Next day in the evening Sanksar messages Swara

Sanskar : (message) Hey Swara..Can u please come to meet me now at my home…urgent!

On the other side Swara’s phone buzzes and she reads the message

Swara : What urgent work he has…let’s see

She goes to his house

Swara : What happened Sanskar y u called me so urgently haan?
Sanskar : One minute

He takes out a cloth and covers her eyes with it

Swara : (feels the cloth) Sanskar what happened y…

Sanskar cuts her off by carrying her

Swara : Sanskar what r u doing
Sanskar : Can’t u feel or what? I haven’t covered ur feeling cells ur asking ‘What r u doing’ I’m carrying u because u can’t see anything and I’ve covered ur eyes because I have a surprise for u
Swara : Hmm u carried me but don’t drop me I’m heavy

He nodes and goes on. After walking for quiet some time he kept her down and opened the cloth. She was awestruck seeing the decoration. They were under the starry sky with a lot of trees near by decorated with red and white balloons. She was even surprised when Sanskar kneels down in front of her

Sanskar : Swara I know ur surprised but saying this is important. Swara from the day I saw u I fell for u, we then became friends I came more closer to u, asking this important, I love u, do u love me? Will u allow me me to be the father of our children? Will u allow me to grow old with u?

Swara was numb hearing this while her heart and minds conflict started again

Heart : Swara accept it don’t listen to this pest…practical idiot!
Mind : Please Swara try and understand he’s not right listen to me not this emotional fool
Heart : (loud) Ay!!
Mind : (louder) Ay!!!!

Swara again got irritated

Swara : Shut up!

Sanskar was baffled seeing her silence

Sanskar : Swara please answer
Swara : Yes Sanskar, I love u too!!!

He gets overwhelmed hearing her answer and hugs her tightly planting a kiss on her fore head. While they don’t know someone saw them and burned with jealousy, it was Kavitha (cheapdy😒)

Kavitha : No Sanskar…u can’t be anyone else’s till I’m there…ur mine only mine!

2 years passed SwaSan were married happily, until one day…

Kavitha : (she comes to Sanskar’s mansion) Sanskar where r u??

She calls him and he comes from upstairs

Sanskar : Now what??
Kavitha : Swara is not there right!
Sanskar : No she’s in office..
Kavitha : Look at this

She opens an envelope and takes out Swara’s picture with Sahil..1 with Sahil carrying her ans the second with Sahil kissing her on her forehead, as expected Sanskar got angry and went out of there while Kavitha smirked

Kavitha : Yes! As expected now Swara will be out and Kavitha will be in

She happily went out from there while Sanskar reached Swara’s office and barged in her cabin

Swara : (happily) Sanskar!! U here….y r u angry haan! I already gave u good morning kiss then what u want!!

Sanskar doesn’t pay a heed to her words and shows her the pictures

Sanskar : Swara what is this? Just tell me once these pictures are fake, then that Kavitha will be gone, please tell me once
Swara : (shocked) Sanskar where did u get these pictures from, yes they r real but..
Sanskar : (cuts off) Enough! What I thought about u what u became as. U know what go and stay with Sahil itself..

He says this and leaves her shattered

Swara : Sanskar listen..

She starts crying and remembers how this happened

FLASHBACK

2 years ago in SwaSan’s college. Swara was really sick she still managed to come to college and that time Sanskar wasn’t present

Sahil : Hi Swara
Swara : (feeble tone) H..hi
Sahil : What happened Swara?

He touches her forehead

Sahil : Swara ur burning up..who told u to come to college
Swara : (feeble voice) No….I…h..had t..to…co..come
Sahil : No ur not

Saying this he carried her

Swara : (feeble tone) B..but Sahil
Sahil : Shut up!

After walking for sometime he drops her home

Sahil : Take care

He says and kisses her forehead and leaves

FLASHBACK ENDS

Swara : This happened 2 years back who clicked these pictures??

But her heart and mind again got into conflicts

Mind : Look I told u not to believe this duffer
Heart : Shut up u practical pest. Sanskar must be doing this for some reason someone brainwashed him maybe
Mind : Oh hello no one brainwashed him u emotional fool. I told u before these kind of people just satisfy themselves that’s y they use girls like out Swara
Heart : Shut up!!
Mind : Pant down!!

Swara got irritated by their conflicts

Swara : Both shut up

She feels really sad and after the office ends she goes directly to Sahil’s house

Sahil : U here and y have u wiped of ur sindoor and removed the mangalsutra haan?
Swara : Everything is over Sahil!

She tells him everything and again starts crying

Swara : Sahil please marry me I need to move on if I keep thinking about Sanskar I’ll never be happy

Sahil unwantedly agrees and they marry the next day in the temple. They both lived happily, Swara became happy again till one day while making the room she suddenly fell unconscious

Sahil : Swara..Swara(pats her cheek).Swara

He gets worried and carries her to the hospital

Sahil : Doctor..doctor see na what happened to her

Doctor checks her and then comes out

Sahil : Doctor what happend?
Doctor : Nothing to worry she’s fine in fact its a happy news ur wife is pregnant

Sahil gets overjoyed and goes to meet Swara he enters the ward and sees her crying

Sahil : Swara what happend y r u crying? Its a happy news
Swara : I know Sahil but this kid is Sanskar’s

She turns her face away from him

Sahil : I know Swara it’s ok
Swara : If u want I can abort this child
Sahil : No need, I will take care of this child like my own
Swara : Promise me that u will never let this child know ur not its father
Sahil : Hmm

They go home. 6 months pass by in the midnight

Swara : Sahil…Sahil wake up
Sahil : Now what u want
Swara : Vanilla ice cream ….no strawberry…no vanilla…hmm no get both
Sahil : How much will u eat..just now I bought u salad…how much does this baby eat ugh!! I won’t spare it when it comes out
Swara : Hahahaha now go get it

Sahil gets happy seeing her laughing and gets the ice cream for her. Next day they both went shopping Swara was walking happily when she dashed into someone (that someone is Sanskar), and Sanskar saved her by holding her waist. He finally gets a good look of her and gets shocked to see Swara

Sanskar : (whispers) Swara!!!!

Swara hears Sanskar’s voice she opes her eyes and gets even shocked to see Sanskar. She immediately gets up and goes to Sahil

Swara : Sahil come we’ll go to some other mall. Come!
Sahil : But…

He looks around and sees Sanskar and understands her mood swing and they leave from there, while seeing them go Sanskar notices Swara’s baby bump he gets angry and somewhat happy

Sanskar : (monologue) I missed u so much Swara, and u married him…but wait this child is my or his…(gets angry) I won’t spare him if he did anything with Swara

He angrily goes from there. One week passed he found Swara’s address and reached there when Sahil wasn’t there. He angrily barged in

Sanskar : (shouts) Swara!!!

She hears Sanskar’s voice and comes down

Swara : Now what haan! U told me enough and as u said I came here now won’t u let me be happy
Sanskar : Leave that! Just tell me this child is mine right not Sahil’s na
Swara : Hmm ur right but one change this is only my child! Understand now get out!

Sanskar leaves sadly and sits outside

Sanskar : Y did I do it

Just then Sahil comes there

Sahil : Ya right y did u do it. U know how much she cried after u blamed her simply..yes those pictures r true but u don’t know what happened do u?

He nodes no and Sahil tells him everything and that leaves Sanskar shocked

Sahil : Where r u going? Don’t u want to apologize to Swara
Sanskar : Later..for now teaching that Kavitha a lesson is important

He leaves from there (don’t expect me to write the lesson he gives to Kavitha😜). Next day he again comes to Sahil’s house

Sanskar : Swara please Swara forgive me I’m an idiot for not believing u please Swara

He said this following her. Just then Sahil comes

Sahil : Yaar Swara he’s right…zyada bhav mat khao na please
Swara : Waise Sahil u r going for ur business trip right for 4 days
Sahil : Hmm so what?
Swara : So I’ll give him his punishment and then forgive him okay!

Sankar’s jaw dropped down hearing the word punishment but nodded in helplessness

2 months passed Sahil and Sanskar walking here and there outside Swara’s ward. After sometime they went inside hearing a baby’s crying voice

Doctor : Congrats it’s a girl

Sanskar was overjoyed seeing his daughter. Yes Swara had forgiven him but with a punishment

Sahil : Waise how did Swara take revenge haan

Sanskar frowned hearing that while Swara was laughing

FLASHBACK

Sanskar’s POV

Ur Swara madam took proper revenge in those 4 days

* Swara : So Mr. Maheshwari come here *

She took me to the kitchen I never expected doing that

Sahil : Accha what she told u

* Swara : Clean all these dishes now
Sanskar : Swara y!! *

My mouth opened in ‘O’ seeing all those dishes

Sahil : Then

What then I stared at those dishes for sometime then it took me 2 long hours to do that. God! The work I did in those 2 hours I didn’t do in 2 years

Sahil : Hahahaha then

Abay ay tumhe hassi aa rahi hai. Meri halat patli ho gayi. Then after 10 mins this maharani came with her cravings God how do u manage those cravings

* Swara : Go get me chocolate all flavours*

My mouth opened wide hearing all the flavours

* Sanskar : What???? Just now u had 3 whole packs of chips and now this
Swara : Shut up and get me chocolate now!!*

Seriously yaar how did u manage it

Sahil : Bhai even my halat was like ur’s

All my days were like these cleaning everything and bear her cravings. Finally on the 4th day

* Swara : (strokes his hair) Wake up Sanskar*

She kindly woke me up when I got up I realized that it was 10

* Sanskar : God I woke up so late I’ll do the work now
Swara : No need I forgive u. I don’t want to die drinking ur extra sugar tea
Sanskar : Y didn’t u tell me
Swara : I couldn’t waste the food and especially if it’s made by u..*

She cut herself by hugging me she had finally forgiven me and we remarried in a temple

FLASHBACK ENDS

Sahil was laughing like a maniac

Sahil : Haha I’m feeling so bad for u bro
Sanskar : Haan haan has lo jitna has na hai has lo mera bhi din aayga then I’ll show u but for now my cute daughter

He picked her up and kissed Swara on her forehead

Sanskar : Thank u for giving me this happiness

Finally everything was alright they got their real happiness back. Soon Sahil got married again with Kavitha as she realized she was only obsessed with Sanskar and truly in love with Sahil

5 years later Sanskar was running behind Kriti (their daughter)

Sanskar : Kriti stop get ready u have to go to school come now please for daddy
Kriti : Fine but only if Ansh (Sahil and Kavitha’s child) comes
Sanskar : Meri ma he got ready
Swara : (comes there) Kriti here ur tiffin box finish it….yeh kya u haven’t got ready yet jaldi karo look Ansh also got ready
Kriti : Mummy what full time Ansh Ansh even I’m there
Swara : Ok my princess go get ready

Soon they leave for school and Kavitha, Swara, Sanskar and Sahil share a group hug thanking god for such lovely kids

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That’s it sorry if I bored u to death 😐
But please give ur responses they might help me in future
And if my ending was abrupt sorry for that

26 comments

  1. SwaSanChuu

    RJ dear,, ur writing is good.. keep going.. !! story was nyc..
    but sorry to say i didn’t like it..
    1st of all Sanskar misunderstood her.. that’s ookk..they would have solved that problem …
    2nd When Sanskar asked or blamed her she didn’t even tried twice/thrice to make him understand or saying the truth.. instead iif she went to Sahil.. lioe seriously? what was that for?
    3rd in a few days ahe wanted to become Sahil’s … like seriously? Did she ever loved him? oh God i understand both are at fault but saying those dialogues by Swara u just ruined her character.. omggg both insulated marriage… i didn’t like it at all.. !!
    overall was good..
    do write more dear.. sorry if i words hurt u but acc to me it was needed to convey my feelings…
    Thnk u… 🙂

  2. SRSL

    |Registered Member

    Dear I liked your story plot a lot…you could have written it more detailed do it would seem convincing…. Swara how can she decide to abort that child…it doesn’t suit her character….when sanky left her she straight away went to sahil instead of sanky…..and why would she tell sahil that its sanskaar child because they never got physical so it was obvio that the child is sanky’s…these things kinda spoiled swara’s character….but I loved your story..just wanted you to describe it more…

  3. Raina

    |Registered Member

    nice one. but sanskar misunderstanding swara, i didn’t like that part and swara’s punishment…..umm… i thought she will not accept him and he doing a lots of things to convince her. and swara thinking to abort the child was not good. and coming to sahil, i never imagined sahil’s to be this much good. sorry if i hurt you

  4. Arshaanya

    |Registered Member

    Wat was dat 😮😮😮
    Sorry to say bt i didn’t lykd it…
    1. Sanskar misundrstood her
    2. She didn’t even try for once to clr d MUz fine bt
    3.she gone dirctly to sahil n married him lyk srsly 😑😑😑
    4.she even askd she can abort d baby 😞😞
    5. Dan sanskar came to knw abt it aftr some months she gve him punishmnt n married him again
    Is marriage somekind of joke 😕😕😕
    Fine snaksra misundrstd her she cud leave him n al bt she married sahil d next sec.. did ahe evr loved him??

  5. Riyanjali

    |Registered Member

    No offence dear….but i did not like it at all…first the fall once sanskaar distruster swara, she just like that went to sahil….was marriage a game for her to marry trice? Then she forgave sanskar and the punishment was to wash vessels??that was not nice at all dr…then story plot should be modified a bit and marriage should be shown in a more serious manner.Then you can describe the story more and maybe keep the description a bit long to capture the readers attention…sry if i had h]urt you with my words…but good try and try more os

  6. Krpkabian

    Sorry if u mind, but Bringing a little modification in one of the KRPKAB ff and marking it as ur OS and posting it on swaragini page 😕 I think it was maleeha’s ff coz I was a silent reader of her that ff. Ok, u just adapted the mistrusting and punishments idea but u must have given her the credit at least.
    Anyways, it was a good try from ur side. I liked it

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