“MY BIGGEST MISTAKE” part-2

“MY BIGGEST MISTAKE”
Hello all…..there is another post of this one’s 1st part…I thought since I wanted to write a swaragini ff too I would post the same with a change in names. I thought it would be posted in that page. But it came in MMZ ff page……….so sorry……..and enjoy……….

At last the day came. The one I had been awaiting for 12 long years. Finally I get to show the man who told me I was his “BIGGEST MISTAKE”, who had sneered at the race my mother started for making an identity for her daughter. I am ever thankful to her for standing strong and fighting with all her might in this cruel world which takes extreme delight in weakening others through their actions and words.

I felt an unknown desire to make this day different by dressing up colorfully. I normally wore plain white shirt along with a black pants and a blazer. But today I felt a sudden urge to make a change in that. Succumbing to my heart, I grabbed a pink shirt and blue pants and my blue velvet blazer. I put on slight make up and let my hair loose. All the while to my work place I was humming and smiling. I felt so happy and different. All the employees gaped at me as if I was an alien. I laughed out loud seeing my employees frozen on their tracks at the sight of me. Everyone seemed happy to see me happy. They later said that never have they felt the working atmosphere this happy. I suddenly felt something Soon everything turned normal and I engrossed myself in work.

The clock ticked by and struck 11 when there was a knock on the door. I suddenly felt something surge through me. I felt my limbs go numb. My moth went dry like a sand paper. Sweat covered my forehead and heart began to beat in a fast past as if it would jump out any minute. At last I mustered up my courage and spelt those words which sounded alien. I was at a loss to figure out what was bothering me. I wondered if it was my aversion to see the man who cheated on me and my mother. But as I my eyes fell on the smiling portrait of my mother on my desk I felt all my uneasiness wear away. With rekindled spirits I raised my head to look at the party.

I was glad to find the expressions I had anticipated on their faces. Shock registered on Samrat’s face and there was a gasp from Piyali. That was not expected. I suspected if she too was part of his plan to get easy money to lay the foundation of his dream project “Bird Song”. She looked down unable to hold my gaze. I noticed that dad squirmed in his seat under my glare. I smirked seeing their reactions and looked around to find Samaira perplexed at her parent’s behavior. I greeted them in a nonchalant manner and enquired her tastes. I promised to come up with a good design indirectly stating that the meeting is over. Sensing me uninterested in further talks they rose to go. But before getting out Sam did something that left me dumbstruck. She leaned in and kissed me on my cheeks before winking at me. She flashed a smile and said:” You look really cute. I couldn’t resist seeing my sister this close”. Seeing the frown on my face she asked ever so sweetly: “we are sisters aren’t we?” I grinned at her saying:” Yes. That’s right. We are sisters.”

The whole conversation was listened to in awe by Samrat and Piyali. Before leaving he turned back and locked my eyes with his guilt filled ones and said: “I’m proud of you my dear.(with little hesitation) I know that the scars I gave are very deep. Forgive me if you can. I know it would be nothing but I would like to make amends for my behavior. I know it’s too late too. But…….maybe we can start anew dear. Piyu is willing and Sam would only be delighted. I know it’s too much……but….do think on it”. Saying this he went out and walked to join the others with his head hung low. I sighed and sagged down on the easy chair thinking about his words.

I’m leaving Radhika’s to each of your jurisdiction. Do tell me your opinion. I would be glad if you could tell about my style of writing and my flaws too. Since I’m a literature student I want to know about. So please.

35 comments

  1. Aastha

    Guys there is a typing mistake…..in the 2nd paragraph last line ” I suddenly felt” wrds are NT there…….I was typing like a maniac to avoid scolding from mom……sry…do consider my request at the end of this chappy…….

    • Aadia

      |Registered Member

      So nice chinnu..very well expressed Rads’ emotions..Sam kiss cheythathinu shesham Rads inte thoughts enthanennu next next part l ezhuthumallo?In my opinion Rad shouldn’t forgive him so soon..but Sam has no faults ,so she has to accept her..just go with your idea..

      • Aasthu

        |Author

        njan ehodu koodi nirtiyalo enn alochichanu readersinu decide cheyam enn avasanam paranjath……………..chechide abhiprayathil njan ethinte continuation ezhutanam ennano ????

      • Aadia

        |Registered Member

        Ente opinion continue cheyanamenna…ithu oru ending aayit thonnunila..time illenkl next update l end cheyyan nokku..just an opinion…CLG Tuesday start cheymo? Fb yl varumo?

      • Aastha

        Hmmm bt I have NT planned anything for the next part….any suggestions???? Ya clg starts on Tuesday…….FB no chance…….dad wont allow…..

  2. Gianna

    |Registered Member

    This is too short, I was getting immersed in it and bam ut ended. 😔 I love your narration in this story, u have written really well. About Rads decision, am in a dilemma part of me says she should forgive him but another part of me says she should just move on in her life. Waiting for ur verdict

    • Aasthu

      |Author

      So sorry Giu di…….thanks for throwing light on my style of writing…….ya I’ll try to make the next one long…….but since my clg will re-open the day after tmrw, I don’t know when the next update wud b…………

  3. farjana

    Hi aastha.. really interesting plot… pls update longer.. i think radhika will accept the the family coz of sam… sam is ever so loving.. update sn..

  4. Jessie

    |Registered Member

    Hey Aasthu.. I love ur writing style..and dear typos do happen.. this is superb.. I want Radhika to stay like b4.. is it because Radz is successful he wants his daughter back..Rasam bond cute ya.. she shldnt go with samrat.. jus gave my opinion.. TC n loads of love

    • Aasthu

      |Author

      Thank you Jess……..happy that u like my style of writing……….its not exactly like that….maybe that’s there in a corner of his heart…..but what made him say these words I believe is guilt…………TC…….love u too…….ya I’ll keep your suggestion in mind……Jess are you in any means contact with Thena????????

  5. Rossy

    |Registered Member

    Aasthu dear it’s very nice…u wrote well..rads should not accept samrat easily…update next a bit longer plzzzzzzzzzz😃

    • Aasthu

      |Author

      Thanks Rossy diiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii…………hmm so many are of the same opinion…..I’ll try to update soon and make it long……..I can’t at the moment guarantee anything coz my clg will re-open day after tmrw and my sem exam is bound to start exactly 30 days frm today……………love u…….Rosie di are you in any means contact with Thena??????

  6. starz

    awesome epi…i think radhika should not forgive samrat soon…pls update next one soon …lots of love and take care

  7. Sweetie

    |Registered Member

    Aasthu,why so short update?I was expecting a long one.. 😀 Dear,it’s superb.. 🙂 Your writing style is too good,keep it up.. 🙂 Love you loads and take care.. 🙂

    • Aasthu

      |Author

      Thank you Sweetie……as I said in the last update…ur wrds as sweet like you…………love u…..TC………have a nice weekend ahead……

  8. dipika

    Aasthu this is so marvelous.. M incredibly happy to see u here n writing this awsome upsate..u nailed it to tyr core
    .each n every emotion is perfectly penned.. So its rads….sam knew tht they r sis…m so excited for this..pls update soon..
    Love you dear…u hopr now ur pain of tooth is fine…tc

    • Aasthu

      |Author

      wow Deepu thanks……..happy that u noted and mentioned it……….ya nw I don’t have tooth pain…….they took it out…..bt next week I have to do root canal for the one next to it……..how did Ganapathi festival go??????? I’m sry I dnt know the name………

  9. Roma

    Awesome, marvellous aastha my sweeeeeetheart. …epi was really superbbbb…I want rads not to forgive samrat easily. ..she should give him very hard time…..Sam is innocent so she should accept her as her lil sis….keep it up honeyyy. Love you loads. muaaaaahhhhhh Bear hug

  10. _Ritu

    |Registered Member

    Amazing Aastha 🙂 Ur r awesome dear.. I thoroughly enjoyed it..Rads I really don’t want her to forgive Samrat so easily….waiting for ur nxt update nd why r u not updating ur other ffs…plz be sooner…loads of love 🙂

    • Aasthu

      |Author

      Hey Ritu………thanks for the comment….I’m happy to see you after long……..I’m busy ri8 nw……my semester exams are coming up……..so I’ll be able to update my other ff’s only after Oct 28………….sorry……..

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