Avneil Ts Mohabbat – Part 1

Hello everyone. My name is Zainab……..but prefers to be called zaini…..i am new on Telly Updates……..Like you guys I am also in love with Avneil a lot…. Today I had decided to update an os on them…….I am a newbie…..and I am not so good on writing but working on it…………Hope you will like it……..without any further due……….I will shut my bakwase……… 

 

This ts is on scene in the jail when ragini had put Avni behind the wall…….Just thought to add my little twist it it……

 

Neil had come in the jail with DD to see Avni. When arrived they saw all of the prisoners gathered in one place and the Jailer Madam was shouting at them. Then on her communicator she gave order to shoot at sight and then turned around to find Neil standing and stopped speaking.

DD: Kya hua hai?
Madam: Avni phir jail se baagh gayi hai

what she said  made Neil so shocked….he could not believe his own ears.

Neil: Par yeh kaisa ho sakhta hai….Avni nahi baagh sakhti jail se.
Madam: Par woh baagh gayi hai….itni strict security ke hotay hua.

Then one of the jailer came and told them that she had looked everywhere but couldn’t find Avni anywhere…….

Madam: (looking at Neil, on her communicator) Agar Avni kahi bhi dekhi toh shoot at sight.

Neil was angry and shock after listening to her…

DD: Yeh aap kaisa order de rahi hai…..shoot a…..
Madam: Avni dusary baar jail se baaghi hai….jail se baaghna par goli…..
Monika: Mujhe laghta hai ka iss baar yeh goli kahna ius ka naseeb mein hai…
Madam: Ha…..mujhe bhi aisa hi laghta hai…….

Listening to this Neil went away from there to go outside of jail to find Avni and DD followed him. Suddenly near the gate of jail, Neil stopped and turned to DD.

Neil: DD tumhe kaisa pata chala tha ka main aur Neelama khatray mein hai….
DD: Mujhe kisi qadi ki call aayi thi….
Neil: Par woh kaha se….aur
DD: Sir woh call muhje jail ka number se kisi qadi ne ki thi par apna naam nahi baatha…..
Neil:Par iusay kaisay pata chala ka hum khatray mein hai…
DD:Ho sakhta hai sir ka Avni bhabhi ne kisi qadi ko keha ho call karna ka liya….
Neil: Yeh tum ne mujhe pehla kyu nahi baatha DD…..iss ka matlab Avni ke gayab honay se pehla koi qadi ius ka saath tha… DD jaldi se sab qadiyu ko dobara se akhta karo…abhi….
DD: Abhi karta hoon sir……SAB KO AKHTA KARO….
After all prisoners got gathered Neil started to speak….
Neil:Mujhe pata hai ka tum mein se kisi ne Avni kay kehna par DD ko call ki thi……agar Avni ne kabhi bhi tum logu ka liya kuch bhi accha kiya hai toh aghay aa kar mujhe sab kuch sach sach baata do….

Listening to Neil, all of the prisoners started to look at each other and started to think how can someone call from jail when they are not allowed to and when everyone were in their cells…. Neil saw Sunehri moving toward him but suddenly stepped back after seeing Jailor. Neil went toward sunehri and signals her to meet him…

Neil:Sab log ja sakhta hai ab….which made Jailor even more shocked and scared then she was when Neil did not went out of jail to find Avni… Saying this Neil and DD left from there and a little later Sunehri went to Neil and told him everything and took him to the last location where Avni was before disappearing.

When they went near the cage where Avni was last present and immediately Neil saw a piece of fabric full of blood and blood drops in a trail following each other……Neil got to know that Avni had left a clue and started to follow the trail with each step he takes, Neil prayed that his Avni would be fine and unharmed……the blood trails led Neil to the room that had lock on it and asked to a jailer why it’s lock…….

Jailer: Yeh room kafi dinu se band hai……
DD: Kyu?????
Neil: Aap issa galdi se kohla….abhi

She opened the door and Neil got in following the blood trails that he had been following……but they suddenly stopped in the middle of the room…which confused Neil…..
DD: Sir aap yeha dekha main bahir kuch dekhta hoon….
Neil just nodded and everyone left the room leaving Neil alone in the room.

Neil: Avni main jantha hoon ka tum khatray mein ho….par tum ho kaha…..

Neil turned toward the wall and remembered his moments with Avni which they had in this room when he was here…..suddenly he saw wall which was painted freshly and remembered that jailer had told him that the cabin had been closed for many days…..which made him curious and went toward it and started to say Avni’s name…..seeing the wall fresh he immediately knew something was wrong………. he moved away everything infront of wall and broke it with the gun and what he saw next made his heart stop beating…..he saw avni behind the wall and broke the hole wall and got Avni out of there……

Neil: AVNI!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Neil: DOCTOR KO BOLU DD….
Neil hugged Avni and got tears in his eyes...and said Avni please apni aankha kolu…..tum mujhe chor ka nahi ja sakhti…..main wada karta hoon hamesh aik saway ki tarah tumhary peshay rahu ga….tumha meri kasam hai apni aankha kolu…..

By then DD had also got there with doctor and doctor checked Avni and….
Doctor: Iss ki condition bohat critical hai…..humay ina hospital la ka jana ho ga….
Neil nodded and got up but avni hold his hand……which made Neil smile and he hugged Avni…..when he was about to break it Avni said something in his ear……
Doctor: Please aap ina humay la ka janay de…..

Then took Avni outside of the room and outside everyone was standing. Seeing Avni Jalier Madam got shocked and Avni’s friend got emotional. Neil told Avni’s friends to say her goodbye because after today she will not come to jail……Doctor left with Avni to the hospital and Neil went toward the Jailer and said..

Neil: Meri Avni ka saath jis kisi ne bhi yeh kiya hai ius ka saath main bohat bura karu ga……mujhe apni Avni ki kasam woh shaksh apna paada honay par pashtay ga…. and left from there…

In the hospital Neela and Khanna family were sitting and waiting for doctor to come and tell them about avni. Everyone were crying and Mishti was infront of idol with bebe praying for her angel to get well soon….When the doctor came out….

Neela: Doctor…..Avni…meri bethi kaisi hai?????
Doctor: Iun ki halat bohat critical hai….
Parkash:Doctor….aap yeh kya bol raha hai…..jitna paisay laghta hai laghay day main du ga….bas aap meri bethi ko kuch na honay da….
Doctor: Hum apni taraf se koshish kar rahay hai…..par agar paisay se logu ki zindagi bachti hoti toh koi bhi ameer maarta na….aap log himmat rakhay…abhi aap patient se nahi mil sakhtay……

Doctor left from there…..Neela sat on the bench and cried….swetha and bebe were consoling her….and then Mishti came to Neela…

Mishti: Aap roh kyu raha ho….Angle ko kuch nahi hoga…superman ne promise kiya tha ka woh mujhe aur angle ko kuch nahi honay da gay…….Dekha aaj bhi superman ne angle ko baccha hai…..agar woh kahi jay gi toh superman iunay la kar aaya gay…..

All 3 women smile in tear after listening to Mishti and Neela hugged her…….Then Neil rushed to his family with a victorious smile on his face……and went to Neela and said…..

Neil: Neelama…..avni ko aaj main ne innocent prove kar diya hai…..aur aap ko paatha ha woh humary saath ghar jay gi…..Vidyut and Ragini Pandit kabhi bhi meri Avni ko kuch bhi nahi keh paay ga…..Ragini ab hamesh jail mein rehay gu….aur Vidyut ki toh ab koi power hi nahi rahi…..jin ko woh use kar sakhta hai aur abhi woh jail mein hai ……Avni…..Avni kaisi hai Neelama……

Neela could not help anymore and started to cry……and then Mishti turned to Neil and say….

Mishti: Superman….aap ne promise kiya tha na ka aap angel ko kuch nahi honay de gay…..Neil nodded…main ne yeh Neelama ko bhi kaha hai…par woh roh rahi hai…..main ne kaha hai ka agar angel kahi jay gi toh superman iunay lar kar wapis aay jay gay…..
Neil:Aap se kis ne kaha ka Angel humay chor kar kahi jarahi hai…hmmmm…….aur Neelama aap kyu roh rahi hai……avni bilkul theek hai…..infact ius ne jail main mujhe vidyut and ragini ka baray mein clue bhi diya tha………
Neela: Par ab woh theek nahi hai neil……..meri bethi itni critical condition mein ha……aaj phir woh zindagi aur mooth se lar rahi hai…….aur main rohu bhi na…
Neil: Neelama…..yeh aap kiya keh rahi hai…..Avni…..Avni aisay nahi……Nahi…….
Nurse: DOCTOR…….Doctor woh patient ki halat kharab ho rahi hai…….we are losing her……

Nurse and Doctor rushed in Avni’s room….leaving everyone worried and a shocked,broken Neil behind…

Neil:Nahi….yeh nahi ho sakhta…Avni….Avni mujhe aisay nahi chor ka ja sakhti…….AVNI..
saying this he fall on his knees…….

Seeing his condition Neela came to him and hugged him and cry so he would cry his heart out but no he didn’t….. It had been a while and Neil had been silent and had not dropped a single tear from his eye….which worried his family………It was late in the night, Parkash asked Ali to take everyone home since bebe is also not well….Ali asked Neil to come with him but he did not moved at all…….Parkash sign Ali to leave him…..everyone left for home after a lot of convincing done by Parkash….now Neil and Parkash were in Hospital……..Neil without speaking anything went in to Avni’s room after Doctor had gave permission to meet her….

Neil: Avni…..please aik dafa meray liya apni aankha kol do…..main tumhary bina nahi rah sakhta……sab log itna parshan hai tumharay liya…..kya tum mujhe iss tara punish karo gi…..plz apni aankha kolo……as he was saying this his tears were flowing, and he hold Avni’s hand very tightly and suddenly sleep took over him and he slept near his Avni holding her hand…….. Parkash saw this from the window outside and prayed to never take his son’s happiness away from him which was his daughter Avni…….

In the morning sun rise outside brightly like its was smiling because of the peace….. Avni slowly opened her eyes and sensed weight on her hand….when she turned to see what it was.She saw here cute husband sleeping holding her hand…….a smile came on her face seeing her husband….but she could see tears stains on his face which made her feel bad for making him cry……..Neil sensed movement and quickly sat straight to check Avni……and he saw her looking at him with a heart melting smile……

Neil: Avni……avni tum theek ho na…..tumhari breathing toh…..tum rukho…main doctor ko bolata hoon…. he was about to leave when Avni hold his hand
Avni:Neil…..Main theek hoon….dekho tum se baath bhi kar rahi hoon….please doctor ko na bolana…..
Neil: Avni….
Avni:Please Neil……Agar tum meray saath ho toh main theek rahu gi…..promise…

Neil: (got emotional and hugged her) Avni……agar tumhe kuch hojata toh…..tumha pata hai main kitna dar gaya tha…..Jab jail mein tumha khosh aaya tha mujhe lagha tha ka main ne tumha baacha liya hai aur tum meray saath raho gi….par tum toh mujhe choor ka janay ka baray mein soch rahi thi…..agar tumha kuch hojata toh main maar…..before he could even complete,Avni put her hand over his mouth…..
Avni: Aisa kabhi bhi na bolna….main tumha maaf nahi karu gi……Aur waisay bhi main Avni Ayesh Neil Khanna hoon…Itni asani se picha nahi choru gi…..samjhe…..suddenly she started to cough which made Neil panicked and he rushed out to call doctor….Doctor came in and checked…..
Neil: Sab theek hai na……

Doctor:Do not worry Officer….aap ki biwi bilkul theek hai……bas aap in ka thora sa dahaan karhi ga yeh weak hai…. aur bohat se rest bhi…..main ab chalta hoon..
Neil: Dekha doctor ne kya kaha….tum weak ho aur rest…..ab sirf tum rest karo gi….samjhi..
Avni:dekha issi liya main na tumha doctor ko bolana se maana kiya tha…..aur ha main weak nahi hoon….aur main koi rest nahi karu gi….samja DCP Neil Khanna…hmm
Neil:Sach main….tum weak nahi ho….yeh doctor ki education mein thori si kammi rah gai hai….tum itna bol  rahi ho aur woh bhi full on kya kaha tha….ha… Avni Ayesha Neil Khanna  ka attitude mein…..
Swetha: Hoy…..tu kya meri bethi ko tang kar raha hai….tillu
Avni:Mummy ji…

Swetha came in her room and hugged her, she was very happy to get Avni back….

Ali: Laghta hai ka tu apna best friend ko bul gayi hai…..main nahi bolu ga….
Avni:Ali….(hugged him) Mishti aur bakhi sab kaha hai…..
Swetha: Tum fikar maat karo….sab tumhary welcome ki tayari kar rahay hai…..
Ali: Tumha pata hai Avni…..subha se Mishti itni khush hai ka poucho hi maath….
Swetha: Kaisay na ho….. ius ki Angel jo aa rahi hai…..khush toh ho gi na…….
Neil:Mom….main bhi room mein ho….
Swetha: Ha…humha bhi pata hai…toh raho….
Neil:Avni…..tum ne mujhe se meri mom ko bhi ab chine liya hai….main ne toh sirf tumhari ma ko liya tha….par tum ne meri puri family ko la liya hai….
Avni: Yeh ab mera charm hai Mr.Khanna
Ali:Ab tum dono bas kar do….kya ghar nahi jana…..chalo jaldi karo.
Avni: hmmm..

Swetha: Chal Ali hum bahir chalta hai….tum bhi aa ja tillu…
Ali: Swetha aunti….Avni Neil ki wife hai……
Neil: Aliiiiiiii

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Promo: A little drama, action, romance….will see………….

Hope you all had liked it……Do like and comment telling me how you liked it……….see you all next time

   Take care…………keep smiling

                Love zaini

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  1. Story is very interesting??? hindi main dialogue write karne ki saath uska english translation bhi dena.sabko read karne main easy hoga.
    Main comments nahi kar paaungi aage.but hamesha ye story read bhi karunga like bhi karunga.
    All the best ?

    1. Zaini

      thanks for comment…….and yes i will try to put them in english

  2. loved the episode!!!!! update soon i was so happy reading this because other people stopped writing ff

    1. Zaini

      I am happy that you had liked this and I promise by tomorrow I will update the next part……and don’t you worry I will update here all of my stories. Thanks for commenting?????????

    2. Zaini

      I am happy that you had liked this and I promise by tomorrow I will update the next part……and don’t you worry I will update here all of my stories. Thanks for commenting????????? it meant alot

  3. Wow!!! It was superbbb dear…..Love it so so much…….Plzz post soon….Lots of love to u……

    1. Zaini

      thank you so much…………..i am working on it right now

  4. This is awesome but can you please try to write in English and I am looking forward to read next part and please update next part soon

  5. Niyati

    This is awesome dear….loved it …..

  6. Hiii zaini areena here

    1. Zaini

      hi ree…..what a suprise…

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